Streaks in the Night
Have you heard lightning make crackling noises? 3/5/323 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
A tall lightning rod will hum and sizzle as the charge
is drained into the earth. Love these little shorties-
especially nice ones like this.
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A tall lightning rod will hum and sizzle as the charge
is drained into the earth. Love these little shorties-
especially nice ones like this.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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You are kind to review my poem so positively. Thank you.
Comment from Nosha17
Yes, an electric storm really does give out sparks and crackle. We don't often get them that bad here as we have no hurricanes or tornadoes, not tropical enough. Well chosen words to describe the ferociousness of the storm. Great picture and good luck in the contest. Faye
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Yes, an electric storm really does give out sparks and crackle. We don't often get them that bad here as we have no hurricanes or tornadoes, not tropical enough. Well chosen words to describe the ferociousness of the storm. Great picture and good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind words. We have lightning storms a lot. I am in the tornado alley section of US. I appreciate you taking time to review my poem.
Comment from rrabinow
Wonderfully written poem for this prompt. I like the line eerie noise. Great use of description in your poem. I also like the last line, brilliant flash, as durring a storm there are brilliant flashes that I enjoy watching. Best of luck.
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Wonderfully written poem for this prompt. I like the line eerie noise. Great use of description in your poem. I also like the last line, brilliant flash, as durring a storm there are brilliant flashes that I enjoy watching. Best of luck.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review. I agree with everything you said about storms.
Comment from skye
eerie noise
angry show of light
brilliant flash
The air crackles inside your poem about electricity in the air.
Well chosen artwork and great imagery.
Well done.
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eerie noise
angry show of light
brilliant flash
The air crackles inside your poem about electricity in the air.
Well chosen artwork and great imagery.
Well done.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you very much for your kind review. I appreciate you taking time to review my poem.
Comment from adewpearl
strong pairing of dramatic photo and poem, which is in excellent 3/5/3 syllable count
you create a sense of mystery and drama well
good personification with the angry show of light
I realize this takes place in the sky, but it doesn't really make air come to mind, the way wind would
Brooke
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strong pairing of dramatic photo and poem, which is in excellent 3/5/3 syllable count
you create a sense of mystery and drama well
good personification with the angry show of light
I realize this takes place in the sky, but it doesn't really make air come to mind, the way wind would
Brooke
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate everything you have said. It means a great deal to me.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, but I don't know if this would be considered air. I know there are winds associated with a storm, but don't know what the committee will think. good luck in the contest
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this is very well written, mystery writer, but I don't know if this would be considered air. I know there are winds associated with a storm, but don't know what the committee will think. good luck in the contest
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I appreciate your words very much. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jackarrie
eerie noise
angry show of light
brilliant flash
Brilliant flash, brilliant entry, you have kept to the prompt and produced a very good 3-5-3 poem all syllables correct
good luck in the contest
Mary
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eerie noise
angry show of light
brilliant flash
Brilliant flash, brilliant entry, you have kept to the prompt and produced a very good 3-5-3 poem all syllables correct
good luck in the contest
Mary
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Thank you for the stars. It means a great deal to me.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
The poem is a great little poem, but I don't see air in the poem. The writing prompt says it has to be related to air. Still, I love it! It's written well and caught my eye. I enjoyed reading it very much. God bless you!
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The poem is a great little poem, but I don't see air in the poem. The writing prompt says it has to be related to air. Still, I love it! It's written well and caught my eye. I enjoyed reading it very much. God bless you!
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Thank you very much. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from mikemagine
Our powerlessness set against the Creator's power. We are "Fearfully and wonderfully made," but obviously not infinite. We can marvel at the Power that designed and made us before Time.
Thunder. lightening. Wind. Hail. Snow. Rain. Hot. Cold. WE have NO control...
Mike
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Our powerlessness set against the Creator's power. We are "Fearfully and wonderfully made," but obviously not infinite. We can marvel at the Power that designed and made us before Time.
Thunder. lightening. Wind. Hail. Snow. Rain. Hot. Cold. WE have NO control...
Mike
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I appreciate your kind words. Thank you very much.
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My pleasure JannyPan!!
Comment from kiwisteveh
I like your poem with its vivid image of lightning, both the sound and the appearance. However, in terms of the contest, I would be dubious as to whether this constitutes an 'air' poem. I know the examples use storms, but only with reference to wind....
Good luck anyway.
Steve
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I like your poem with its vivid image of lightning, both the sound and the appearance. However, in terms of the contest, I would be dubious as to whether this constitutes an 'air' poem. I know the examples use storms, but only with reference to wind....
Good luck anyway.
Steve
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your kind review.