The Bunny at the Bank
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Comment from Wendyanne
What a cute picture and cute story. I think anuity has two Ns in it but otherwise this well written. The haiku is adorable just like the bunny. Good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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What a cute picture and cute story. I think anuity has two Ns in it but otherwise this well written. The haiku is adorable just like the bunny. Good luck.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Trybuck
On the farm, we see nature at play almost everyday. Anything from rabbits to wild turkeys, fox, coyotes, deer and if we're lucky an occasional black bear.
Your haiku described beautifully the prose part of this. Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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On the farm, we see nature at play almost everyday. Anything from rabbits to wild turkeys, fox, coyotes, deer and if we're lucky an occasional black bear.
Your haiku described beautifully the prose part of this. Well done, Buck
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Your farm sounds like a great place. Thanks for a wonderful review. Elaine
Comment from Ricky1024
{Review in a sad story in partial rhyme this time call...
"Objection Your Honor that Killer is not My Cat!"
{ZAP!!!!}
"I like bunnies and so doth my cat
'Valerie the Huntress!'
And I will tell you why I like them Alive 'Miss mermaid of da Seven Seas.'
"She 'Catatized' one about a year ago after washing it! {She thinks all furry creatures are her kittens!}
[It's a nature thing for an animals that never mated.}"
Any who, she brought it, caught, it, decided to play with it....
And then I bagged it and her!
The baby, rabbit got away for it was faking and I bagged it and Valerie again for instead of the neck like a kitten, it was the poor things head in the nasty cat's mouth!"
...
"Pissed that I bagged it and her again, my friend...
Out the door that night so, long, long, ago...
Then a miracle appeared and {it was Santa and his reindeer!]
It was the bunny all fluffy {but not funny} because on the 'Huntress's' release...
{To say the least} she caught that poor creature...
{Dommed from da START!!!}
At it all{except the bitter entrails} including the poor things tail, soul, eyes, and lastly the Heart!"
Thanks,
24.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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{Review in a sad story in partial rhyme this time call...
"Objection Your Honor that Killer is not My Cat!"
{ZAP!!!!}
"I like bunnies and so doth my cat
'Valerie the Huntress!'
And I will tell you why I like them Alive 'Miss mermaid of da Seven Seas.'
"She 'Catatized' one about a year ago after washing it! {She thinks all furry creatures are her kittens!}
[It's a nature thing for an animals that never mated.}"
Any who, she brought it, caught, it, decided to play with it....
And then I bagged it and her!
The baby, rabbit got away for it was faking and I bagged it and Valerie again for instead of the neck like a kitten, it was the poor things head in the nasty cat's mouth!"
...
"Pissed that I bagged it and her again, my friend...
Out the door that night so, long, long, ago...
Then a miracle appeared and {it was Santa and his reindeer!]
It was the bunny all fluffy {but not funny} because on the 'Huntress's' release...
{To say the least} she caught that poor creature...
{Dommed from da START!!!}
At it all{except the bitter entrails} including the poor things tail, soul, eyes, and lastly the Heart!"
Thanks,
24.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks for a generous amount of stars and your slam version of the bunny and the cat. Elaine
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Your welcome!
and read!!!
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Comment from Spitfire
I love bunnies too. Occasionally, one hops into our suburban neighborhood. Nice contrast between your world and the more carefree one of the rabbit's. Your haiku at the end says it all.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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I love bunnies too. Occasionally, one hops into our suburban neighborhood. Nice contrast between your world and the more carefree one of the rabbit's. Your haiku at the end says it all.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Capricorn30
Thank you for sharing your encounter with the bunny--I greatly enjoyed your well-penned haibun;
These animals are so darned cute;
Good creativity of contemplating what the furry friend is thinking as he/she sits quietly;
"of cottontail dreams"--such fine dreams to experience.
A pleasure to read--excellent!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thank you for sharing your encounter with the bunny--I greatly enjoyed your well-penned haibun;
These animals are so darned cute;
Good creativity of contemplating what the furry friend is thinking as he/she sits quietly;
"of cottontail dreams"--such fine dreams to experience.
A pleasure to read--excellent!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Love your review! Just made my day. Elaine
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Thank you very much, Elaine.
You have made my day also!
Comment from kiwijenny
This is so cute...and nature does provide ...
It looks like have reviewed this once but this was blank so I will post again? Maybe there is a glitch in the system
God bless
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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This is so cute...and nature does provide ...
It looks like have reviewed this once but this was blank so I will post again? Maybe there is a glitch in the system
God bless
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from w.j.debi
What a nice surprise to brighten your day as you go about your business. It is amazing how something as sweet as sighting a bunny can make you thankful. Excellent descriptions. We'll executed 5-7-7 to complete your haibun.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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What a nice surprise to brighten your day as you go about your business. It is amazing how something as sweet as sighting a bunny can make you thankful. Excellent descriptions. We'll executed 5-7-7 to complete your haibun.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A well written and constructed prose of your visit to the bank. How lovely the rabbit appeared for you. A bright spot in an ordinary task. Your writing is
clear and very concise. An enjoyable read. And Lapin, I learned a new word. I will look for it...on a menu perhaps? Smiles, Robin :)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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A well written and constructed prose of your visit to the bank. How lovely the rabbit appeared for you. A bright spot in an ordinary task. Your writing is
clear and very concise. An enjoyable read. And Lapin, I learned a new word. I will look for it...on a menu perhaps? Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Hahaha....lapinmaybe on a menu. Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from country ranch writer
WE HAVE A BIG FAT BUNNY WHO HANGS OUT BY OUR BOAT HE RUNS BETWEEN THE SHED AND THE BOAT JUST AS FAST AS HE CAN HE DOESN'T SLOW DOWN. HE LIKE THE TALL GRASS BY THE SHED BECAUSE HE CAN HIDE IN IT.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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WE HAVE A BIG FAT BUNNY WHO HANGS OUT BY OUR BOAT HE RUNS BETWEEN THE SHED AND THE BOAT JUST AS FAST AS HE CAN HE DOESN'T SLOW DOWN. HE LIKE THE TALL GRASS BY THE SHED BECAUSE HE CAN HIDE IN IT.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Yes, I too have bunnies hanging around my yard. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Elaine
Comment from adewpearl
an anuity - annuity
excellent detail of the bunny's activities and the speaker's musings
that compare the state of their lives and contentment
I love what can inspire a poet :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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an anuity - annuity
excellent detail of the bunny's activities and the speaker's musings
that compare the state of their lives and contentment
I love what can inspire a poet :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the spelling correction,I am bad with money and even spelling words related to money. Thanks for a thoughtful review. Elaine
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LOL :-)