The Music of Love
A Valentine story for older folks19 total reviews
Comment from rjpurdy
Superb! I have felt evry emotion you so accurately describe. I am so fortunate to be in the midst of the same type of love. This is a flawless and wonderful story Ingrid. You managed to pull tears from eyes beacause of the parallels we share. I just don't have honor of mourning the love I have cherished for many lifetimes, "we breathe as one."
Thank you for this wonderful trip down lovers lane.
~Peace & Grace~ Rod
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Superb! I have felt evry emotion you so accurately describe. I am so fortunate to be in the midst of the same type of love. This is a flawless and wonderful story Ingrid. You managed to pull tears from eyes beacause of the parallels we share. I just don't have honor of mourning the love I have cherished for many lifetimes, "we breathe as one."
Thank you for this wonderful trip down lovers lane.
~Peace & Grace~ Rod
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you for your very kind words and generous response.
Comment from boxergirl
You hooked me from the beginning and I was mesmerized by this tale of a lonely widow. The use of first person voice made me feel as if I knew her and she was telling the story to me. Details were interesting and realistic. I liked the ending as well..
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You hooked me from the beginning and I was mesmerized by this tale of a lonely widow. The use of first person voice made me feel as if I knew her and she was telling the story to me. Details were interesting and realistic. I liked the ending as well..
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you very much for the veru kind words.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was breathtaking. I not only had to recheck to see if it was fiction or nonfiction I had to pause and lok away from the screen. Great characterization and I loved the first person perspective. Good imagery and the last couple of lines were like a slow fade to black. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
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This was breathtaking. I not only had to recheck to see if it was fiction or nonfiction I had to pause and lok away from the screen. Great characterization and I loved the first person perspective. Good imagery and the last couple of lines were like a slow fade to black. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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There's a piece of me in everything I write--unless I'm storring the cauldron, something I've been known to do. Many thanks.
Comment from Donya Quijote
I'm a closet romantic, so do don't tell anyone. The Navy told me I was too soft and my students walk all over me at school, like I am a mat on the floor, but they do it in a nice way, if that makes any sense to you.
Your sad, distant tone almost had me blubbering in my chair. There is no story better than a love story of two people who never lost their passion, their desire for each other as told by one of those involved. It is very apparent that this relationship, and I am hoping that this tale is true as the use of the first person would indicate at first glance. If not, well it's use does make the tale more personal. Loss, especially losing someone one truly, deeply loves is very difficult. You show that hardship well in this sad but loving tale.
Dialogue adds to the sentiment and demonstrates the loss felt by the main character. Will, if a real person, would have been catch.
I like your description of the setting, and contrast between the home life and real life and the cemetery, and how the two scenes reveal the main character's emotions.
Nice choice of Moon River as the nostalgic song. I love that song as sung by Andy Williams. Beautiful, romantic, appropriate.
Wonderfully, well done write...
Valentine's Day drives me crazy. All the sappiness is sometimes more than I can bear. I am almost fifty years of age and still have no significant other in my life. I am afraid that ship set sail long ago and none have come into port since. I call it Single's Awareness Day.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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I'm a closet romantic, so do don't tell anyone. The Navy told me I was too soft and my students walk all over me at school, like I am a mat on the floor, but they do it in a nice way, if that makes any sense to you.
Your sad, distant tone almost had me blubbering in my chair. There is no story better than a love story of two people who never lost their passion, their desire for each other as told by one of those involved. It is very apparent that this relationship, and I am hoping that this tale is true as the use of the first person would indicate at first glance. If not, well it's use does make the tale more personal. Loss, especially losing someone one truly, deeply loves is very difficult. You show that hardship well in this sad but loving tale.
Dialogue adds to the sentiment and demonstrates the loss felt by the main character. Will, if a real person, would have been catch.
I like your description of the setting, and contrast between the home life and real life and the cemetery, and how the two scenes reveal the main character's emotions.
Nice choice of Moon River as the nostalgic song. I love that song as sung by Andy Williams. Beautiful, romantic, appropriate.
Wonderfully, well done write...
Valentine's Day drives me crazy. All the sappiness is sometimes more than I can bear. I am almost fifty years of age and still have no significant other in my life. I am afraid that ship set sail long ago and none have come into port since. I call it Single's Awareness Day.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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I'm told we must open our hearts to the possibility of love before it can find a way past our heavy gates.
Singles awareness day, HUH? As an acronym it comes out as SAD, but it doesn't need to be. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from gypsycaravan
I don't know how you so consistently knock your stories out of the ballpark. This is the most magnificent Valentine's love story and told in such a true manner that I had to scroll back to the top to make sure it was fiction. Absolutely marvelous and always flawless technically. Bravo.
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I don't know how you so consistently knock your stories out of the ballpark. This is the most magnificent Valentine's love story and told in such a true manner that I had to scroll back to the top to make sure it was fiction. Absolutely marvelous and always flawless technically. Bravo.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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It comes from a long life filled with dramatic hills and valleys and stored snapshots. Thanks for your generous words and the stellar rating.
Comment from gypsycaravan
I don't know how you so consistently knock your stories out of the ballpark. This is the most magnificent Valentine's love story and told in such a true manner that I had to scroll back to the top to make sure it was fiction. Absolutely marvelous and always flawless technically. Bravo.
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I don't know how you so consistently knock your stories out of the ballpark. This is the most magnificent Valentine's love story and told in such a true manner that I had to scroll back to the top to make sure it was fiction. Absolutely marvelous and always flawless technically. Bravo.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
Comment from gypsycaravan
I don't know how you so consistently knock your stories out of the ballpark. This is the most magnificent Valentine's love story and told in such a true manner that I had to scroll back to the top to make sure it was fiction. Absolutely marvelous and always flawless technically. Bravo.
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I don't know how you so consistently knock your stories out of the ballpark. This is the most magnificent Valentine's love story and told in such a true manner that I had to scroll back to the top to make sure it was fiction. Absolutely marvelous and always flawless technically. Bravo.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh, How sweet! She found love again! Ingrid this is a beautiful story and I applaud Your efforts. I would give you a six but I don't have one. I hate it when people say that but it's true. Here is a virtual one for your very nice story! *****+ Nancy
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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Oh, How sweet! She found love again! Ingrid this is a beautiful story and I applaud Your efforts. I would give you a six but I don't have one. I hate it when people say that but it's true. Here is a virtual one for your very nice story! *****+ Nancy
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
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Thanks very much. I think we old foggies need a romantic tale now and then.
Comment from Genya
This was so touching and full of love. All through life, their love shone and even in death the love was still there. Beautifully told with words that almost sang the tunes of love. Then the man with the violin playing for his loved one and then playing for her loved one. Moon River, such a beautiful song. Loved the ending how they both left the cemetery together and walked to the coffee shop together. Hopefully, these two will find company in each other. How lonely she must be now. Retired, no husband and company only fro her children and grandchildren on the times they can get together. Lovely story. Found a couple of typos...
when I was working (u)would get up each day (I)
customer ahead of mr, scanning his groceries (me)
Good luck in the competition with this. Genya
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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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This was so touching and full of love. All through life, their love shone and even in death the love was still there. Beautifully told with words that almost sang the tunes of love. Then the man with the violin playing for his loved one and then playing for her loved one. Moon River, such a beautiful song. Loved the ending how they both left the cemetery together and walked to the coffee shop together. Hopefully, these two will find company in each other. How lonely she must be now. Retired, no husband and company only fro her children and grandchildren on the times they can get together. Lovely story. Found a couple of typos...
when I was working (u)would get up each day (I)
customer ahead of mr, scanning his groceries (me)
Good luck in the competition with this. Genya
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thanks so much. I released this before a proper edit and have been correcting ever since. I'll check the ones you pointed out to make sure I didn't miss these.