Wanted Dead Or Alive
a story poem about the Old West14 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Rod. That is great work mate on one of my favorite topics, the wild west. It flows really smoothly and it is a wonderful contest entry. Good luck mate, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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G'day Rod. That is great work mate on one of my favorite topics, the wild west. It flows really smoothly and it is a wonderful contest entry. Good luck mate, cheers Fez
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Hey, hey, Fez, it's always good to hear from you. I'm delighted the western genre is one of your favorites. Thanks for sharing and your kind comments. Rod
Comment from krys123
RodG;
+ Near a notable alliteration's: /"tale or two"/"say so"/"bloated bodies"/"saw me shudder"/"bloody bayonet"/"went wide"/
+ The title that you have chosen for your poem fits well and you write a poem well enough to do it justice.
+ The pictures truly outstanding and is befitting, reflective and complementary to your poem so much so that it looks like he's ready to draw the reader.
+ Imagery throughout is distinct and clear and very expressive and truly vividly descriptive: "When he saw me shudder, heard me moan, he raised that bloodied bayonet. Then his eyes went wide, and his pistol barked. A righteous kill with no regret." Very picturesque of a killing between two very scared men.
+ Enjambment was used in this poem and is the running on every thought and idea or concept from one line of verse to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Rhyming was done perfectly and was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line making it neither forced nor labored and helpful in the rhythmic flow of the poem.
+ Rhythmic meter(Mixed syllable count per line), cadence, timing and tempo all were helpful in making the reading clear, food and very easy.
+ Poetic assessment: an excellent and vivid story of the life and death of gunmen and men in battle with each other. Also with description of a man who robbed trains and banks and live by the gun and probably died by the gun.
+ Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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RodG;
+ Near a notable alliteration's: /"tale or two"/"say so"/"bloated bodies"/"saw me shudder"/"bloody bayonet"/"went wide"/
+ The title that you have chosen for your poem fits well and you write a poem well enough to do it justice.
+ The pictures truly outstanding and is befitting, reflective and complementary to your poem so much so that it looks like he's ready to draw the reader.
+ Imagery throughout is distinct and clear and very expressive and truly vividly descriptive: "When he saw me shudder, heard me moan, he raised that bloodied bayonet. Then his eyes went wide, and his pistol barked. A righteous kill with no regret." Very picturesque of a killing between two very scared men.
+ Enjambment was used in this poem and is the running on every thought and idea or concept from one line of verse to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Rhyming was done perfectly and was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line making it neither forced nor labored and helpful in the rhythmic flow of the poem.
+ Rhythmic meter(Mixed syllable count per line), cadence, timing and tempo all were helpful in making the reading clear, food and very easy.
+ Poetic assessment: an excellent and vivid story of the life and death of gunmen and men in battle with each other. Also with description of a man who robbed trains and banks and live by the gun and probably died by the gun.
+ Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much, Alex, for taking the time to examine my poem line by line. I truly appreciate your analysis and your kind praise. Rod
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend Rod.
Alex
Comment from kiwisteveh
A well-ritten account of the life of a gunman in the old West - more realistic than romantic, which matches the laconic style.
Good abcb rhyme scheme and nicely constructed stanzas.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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A well-ritten account of the life of a gunman in the old West - more realistic than romantic, which matches the laconic style.
Good abcb rhyme scheme and nicely constructed stanzas.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Steve. I really appreciate your high praise and best wishes. Rod
Comment from pattipac
I grew up watching cowboys shows, and playing cowboys and Indians, so I enjoyed reading your well penned poem about a hombre in the wild-West. Your poem paints a picture with words about the harsh life people led back then. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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I grew up watching cowboys shows, and playing cowboys and Indians, so I enjoyed reading your well penned poem about a hombre in the wild-West. Your poem paints a picture with words about the harsh life people led back then. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Thank you, pattipac, for sharing my western poem and your kind comments. Rod