Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Scarlet Letter"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from courtneysthoughts
This is a very difficult moment for a couple, nicely expressed with your words. There are a few lines that catch me off guard that perhaps could be phrased a little different. Your second paragraph is perfect in that it explains why she turned her head, that there is shared sorrow and shared mistake.
Good luck to you and wonderful job.
Courtney
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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This is a very difficult moment for a couple, nicely expressed with your words. There are a few lines that catch me off guard that perhaps could be phrased a little different. Your second paragraph is perfect in that it explains why she turned her head, that there is shared sorrow and shared mistake.
Good luck to you and wonderful job.
Courtney
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
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Comment from Begin Again
A different interpretation of grief...though no less painful for the griever than of someone who has lost a loved one through death. I appreciated your poem and wish you well in the contest
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A different interpretation of grief...though no less painful for the griever than of someone who has lost a loved one through death. I appreciated your poem and wish you well in the contest
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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Comment from Phoenix8
This is a unique and intresting approach to the contest entry, it speaks of your creativity. This was a lovely poem that depicted a marriage that fell apart. I loved the rhythm it had and the repitition at the end was beautiful. Good luck on the contest.!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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This is a unique and intresting approach to the contest entry, it speaks of your creativity. This was a lovely poem that depicted a marriage that fell apart. I loved the rhythm it had and the repitition at the end was beautiful. Good luck on the contest.!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support.
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It was my pleasure.😄
Comment from Ben Colder
Yep. Don't need an unfaithful wife for sure. So, here I am without her and I don't know what to do.
Gone away forever she tore my world in two.
You will get over it.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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Yep. Don't need an unfaithful wife for sure. So, here I am without her and I don't know what to do.
Gone away forever she tore my world in two.
You will get over it.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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The pain of a heartache. Thanks for your comments and support.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a sad poem. To come home to a note telling a person the end has come for the relationship would be devastating to anyone. Blessings, Patricia.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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This is a sad poem. To come home to a note telling a person the end has come for the relationship would be devastating to anyone. Blessings, Patricia.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
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Comment from Dean Kuch
A spectacular piece of poetic expressionism, Mystery Poet, and a wonderfully written entry for this contest prompt. Poignancy and pain seep out of every line, as both parties involved in this despondent tale grapple with the loss of their relationship. The poem is well rhymed and uniquely composed, and tells a sad story which is all too commonplace today during these trying times in which we're living.
Excellent flow and tempo, easily comprehended and wonderfully presented, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest...~Dean
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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A spectacular piece of poetic expressionism, Mystery Poet, and a wonderfully written entry for this contest prompt. Poignancy and pain seep out of every line, as both parties involved in this despondent tale grapple with the loss of their relationship. The poem is well rhymed and uniquely composed, and tells a sad story which is all too commonplace today during these trying times in which we're living.
Excellent flow and tempo, easily comprehended and wonderfully presented, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest...~Dean
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support as always. Very much appreciate them.
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You're very welcome...
Comment from petalangela
Such a loving post gentle in its nature but savage in its message. There is no blame to lay at his feet no recrimination on his head but having read the words he would wish he was was dead. Good luck
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Such a loving post gentle in its nature but savage in its message. There is no blame to lay at his feet no recrimination on his head but having read the words he would wish he was was dead. Good luck
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
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Comment from scd41
The pain and anguish suffered due to desertion of the beloved have been narrated poignantly in the poem so much as to arouse empathy of the readers.When love is volatile, it is impossible to hold for ever and once it escapes, there is no way it can be regained.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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The pain and anguish suffered due to desertion of the beloved have been narrated poignantly in the poem so much as to arouse empathy of the readers.When love is volatile, it is impossible to hold for ever and once it escapes, there is no way it can be regained.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
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Comment from Pantygynt
This reads like a country and western lyric and that makes me think I might just have come up against some of your work before. One line I felt is deserving of special praise: "I'd trade away tomorrow for one single yesterday." Oh how I loved that, it reminded me of the line from the remembrance day service: "For our tomorrow they gave their today.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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This reads like a country and western lyric and that makes me think I might just have come up against some of your work before. One line I felt is deserving of special praise: "I'd trade away tomorrow for one single yesterday." Oh how I loved that, it reminded me of the line from the remembrance day service: "For our tomorrow they gave their today.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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As Country music lyrics musically they are fine. This is not a poem per se. They are lyrics. Appreciate your comments.
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Obviously you have a tune in your head so I will alter my review.
Comment from Joan E.
The artwork you selected reinforces the theme of your lyrics perfectly. I admired your reference to the "scarlet letter" and the refrain, plus your rhymes in this "lost love" song. Cheers- Joan
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The artwork you selected reinforces the theme of your lyrics perfectly. I admired your reference to the "scarlet letter" and the refrain, plus your rhymes in this "lost love" song. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support.
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Best wishes in the Empathy and Grief contest- Joan