A Life Abundant
Dedicated to valor and femininity24 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello to you jlsavell
What is so good about your brave sweet elderly lady when her breast of the past--
were just ornaments of beauty,
but the abundance of life is the blessed tree
from which the ornaments once adorned.
Gert
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Hello to you jlsavell
What is so good about your brave sweet elderly lady when her breast of the past--
were just ornaments of beauty,
but the abundance of life is the blessed tree
from which the ornaments once adorned.
Gert
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from write hand blue
This is an exceptionally well expressed poem.
With a message for all women, to do their checks regularly.
This is quite an interesting way for your story to written. An effective story poem from a new angle.
:) Mel.
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This is an exceptionally well expressed poem.
With a message for all women, to do their checks regularly.
This is quite an interesting way for your story to written. An effective story poem from a new angle.
:) Mel.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello good poet friend Jimi. I must say that was such a wonderful presentation and such an amazing story. You should touch many hearts wit this. I enjoyed, Loyd
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Hello good poet friend Jimi. I must say that was such a wonderful presentation and such an amazing story. You should touch many hearts wit this. I enjoyed, Loyd
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from dmt1967
This is a sad but hopeful poem. We all get old. Some grow old with grace and white hair is just a thing, some hold onto their youth till the bitter end. I thought your story was very well written. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a sad but hopeful poem. We all get old. Some grow old with grace and white hair is just a thing, some hold onto their youth till the bitter end. I thought your story was very well written. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from amanda98653
This is definitely an exceptional poem.
"She had the finesse of a ballerina
This beautiful lady, a decade shy
of a gifted century"-- Wow! These verses are captivating.
"But at the end of the day I know
breasts are just ornaments of beauty,
but the abundance of life is the blessed tree
from which the ornaments once adorned." --so wise and memorable
This poem delivers a a meaningful message: true beauty is on the inside.
Hugs
Amanda
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This is definitely an exceptional poem.
"She had the finesse of a ballerina
This beautiful lady, a decade shy
of a gifted century"-- Wow! These verses are captivating.
"But at the end of the day I know
breasts are just ornaments of beauty,
but the abundance of life is the blessed tree
from which the ornaments once adorned." --so wise and memorable
This poem delivers a a meaningful message: true beauty is on the inside.
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from Showboat
Salutations, my dear Jimi, for another hauntingly sad and incredibly uplifting poem. Kudos for being able to work in this field and to be able to do so much for the victims of breast cancer.
Excellent!
Love,
Gayle
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Salutations, my dear Jimi, for another hauntingly sad and incredibly uplifting poem. Kudos for being able to work in this field and to be able to do so much for the victims of breast cancer.
Excellent!
Love,
Gayle
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from Sis Cat
A deeply effective story poem. I can see the woman in this poem and hear her conversation in the fitting room. You display your perception of the woman's vulnerability which contrasted with her grandeur. "the image of rag doll sutured scars" resonated with me as vivid and poignant. Your discovery that this woman was a dancer and living life to the fullest moved me with her message of strength. Thank you for sharing and caring.
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A deeply effective story poem. I can see the woman in this poem and hear her conversation in the fitting room. You display your perception of the woman's vulnerability which contrasted with her grandeur. "the image of rag doll sutured scars" resonated with me as vivid and poignant. Your discovery that this woman was a dancer and living life to the fullest moved me with her message of strength. Thank you for sharing and caring.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from mauidux1963
so nice to see you writing and posting again jimi. Where do you get the inspiration for the stories you weave? Real people you have met? Or .....is it a composite of people you have met over time.
I am always drawn into your stories Jimi......you already know that. You usually have me teary-eyed in the first one or two stanzas......this was no different. I had an idea what the story was about from the picture.....but ....BAM right off the bat when you described this beautiful old woman.....whose hat ribbon...."Teases the cobalt in Her eyes"....you had me tearing up. You have a gift of making the reader connect emotionally with your characters ( real or not ) in part I think because you describe them so well....and.....you give them "real" "relateable" human problems to deal with.
I love your writing Jimi.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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so nice to see you writing and posting again jimi. Where do you get the inspiration for the stories you weave? Real people you have met? Or .....is it a composite of people you have met over time.
I am always drawn into your stories Jimi......you already know that. You usually have me teary-eyed in the first one or two stanzas......this was no different. I had an idea what the story was about from the picture.....but ....BAM right off the bat when you described this beautiful old woman.....whose hat ribbon...."Teases the cobalt in Her eyes"....you had me tearing up. You have a gift of making the reader connect emotionally with your characters ( real or not ) in part I think because you describe them so well....and.....you give them "real" "relateable" human problems to deal with.
I love your writing Jimi.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Dennis, my dear friend, this is actrue story, as are ll of the pietry I have written in the last year or so. My inspiration comes from everyone I meet. I happen to work in a place which fit breast cancer survivors with prothesis and wigs and whatever else they need for durable nedical purposes.
Thanm you so much Dennis. You are my good friend and I value our exchanges. I cannot tell you how happy I am that you came back to Fanstory. But happier still, we are good friends.
I have been meaning to answer your p.m. I will get back to you later.
Oh and thank you.. I love your writing too and our friendship.
Jimi
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I loved the note at the end and that I so very true. Well done.
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This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I loved the note at the end and that I so very true. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
Comment from christianpowers
There was a very sweet and uplifting story hidden inside this free verse poem. Quite an interesting form for such a unique story to take, and I commend you on the execution of it.
I found the pic kind of funny. Was that wrong? It's more of a statement on the absurdity of the modeling industry than anything else... 'the public's obsession with physical beauty exposed' should be the headline.
Thanks for posting this.
Christian
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There was a very sweet and uplifting story hidden inside this free verse poem. Quite an interesting form for such a unique story to take, and I commend you on the execution of it.
I found the pic kind of funny. Was that wrong? It's more of a statement on the absurdity of the modeling industry than anything else... 'the public's obsession with physical beauty exposed' should be the headline.
Thanks for posting this.
Christian
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2015