Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

A very well read poet. Famous for several works. Has inspired many others. Well written poem that should be a good contest entry.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015

Thanks, Brett Matthew West, for the kind comments. They are much appreciated.

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Roads not taken,
(I really like the format of your acrostic. Both the bolding, and the very slight to the right on space paragraphing shift that happens in text, but not visually in poem. Still, the acrostic name stands out well.)

I'm not as cultured with writers as I'd like to be, I don't know Robert Frost's works, but thanks to google... and to your acrostic and my lucky oh, I'll just read the one of Frost's titled ' the road not taken', I can see you smoothly utilized in the poem the road not taken with your acrostic. I'm not sure, I think it would be allowed... Though I'm not sure... you could post in the author's notes that poem for those other uncultured dead-beats like me... who are much lazier in seeking such things out. It really tributes the poem/ poet well, and I liked the link back with take the road less travelled with a side shout... And don't you bother regretting it.


Reliving times
long gone by
means future plans
may go awry.
(This is the only verse I had trouble following where to put my feet on the beat with ease, where I didn't figure out the flow of words. I don't know how to even suggest it differently, but I wanted to point at this one and mentioned I stumbled. I think it might be because by means... I went to the store by means of a car. That might be were I was going awry. The man was long gone by means of a car.)

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015

Hi Turtle,

Thanks for taking the trouble to research the author before commenting, I think that shows excellent dedication to the reviewing task.

I've only utilized a couple of phrases from Frost's work (and they are not verbatim), so I hope that is acceptable in a "tribute" poem. I notice another entry uses the same technique (very successfully, I feel), so hopefully it is OK.

I can't think of an alternative wording to the "means" line at the moment, but I'll mull it over - there is a bit of time left.

Many thanks for your well considered critique and helpful comments, much appreciated.

reply by --Turtle. on 23-Aug-2015

No, there wasn't too much of the poem in your tribute, it was just enough of the essence for the arrow to point me in the 'ah ha!' direction.

I thought this was a solid entry, and I hear you on not being able to think of another word for means; it took me a little bit to even figure out why I was miss-stepping.

I also want to make sure I remembered to point out how smoothly and effortlessly I went through the other verses... really enjoying the play off of two concepts, one with the original poem in mind, and the one as the original poem that this one is in tribute. It just seems a shame that others might not get that extra connection understanding, that they might if they had the other poem at easy access.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

A very wistful and interesting reflection on the poet Robert FRost and famous sentiments expressed by him , using a fascinating variation on the Acrostic Form and a great pic

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015

Thank you, zanya, for your very kind comments; I really appreciate them.

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

That is quite a challenging brief you set yourself. An acrostic in stanza form.
And then spell something as long as Robert Frost. I must admit, I've never heard of him. May google him and find out who he was to inspire a poem about him.
All the best in the competition. :)

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 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015

If you Google "The Road Not Taken" you will find the poem that inspired this little tribute fairly easily. Thanks for the kind comments and good wishes, much appreciated :)

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Nice photo that complements your poem perfectly. Nice choice: Robert Frost. When I made my one I overlooked that you could use multiple lines. Best wishes for the contest.

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 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015

My first attempt just had one line for each letter, but I felt I wanted more. Thanks for the kind review, and the good wishes. Obviously I don't know which is yours, but good luck to you as well :)