The Final Battle
An assassin finds herself in a fight for her life.18 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for the pleasure of reading your fun and exciting story. I knew when the thread started weaving it's strands that the enemy was spiders and it wouldn't be long before the injection of poison. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Thanks for the pleasure of reading your fun and exciting story. I knew when the thread started weaving it's strands that the enemy was spiders and it wouldn't be long before the injection of poison. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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thanks for reviewing, you clever reader. Not much pounces on you from behind. Do I detect a fellow spidernator?
Comment from papa55mike
Holy crap, that was awesome. I to love to write flash and this was one fast paced thriller. I love the twist at the end. How the hunted, become the prey in the end.
Just a great job and good luck in the contest. Have a grat Sunday and God bless, mike.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Holy crap, that was awesome. I to love to write flash and this was one fast paced thriller. I love the twist at the end. How the hunted, become the prey in the end.
Just a great job and good luck in the contest. Have a grat Sunday and God bless, mike.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much, Mike. Your comments and stars are most generous. At first I wasn't crazy about conforming to flash fiction, but now I love it!
Again, thank you!
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was a poem, Anonymous Author? Your author's notes said as much, but it read much more like prose to me.
Spidernators, h-m-m-m-mmm... apparently these weren't your average household varieties of arachnids we all see nearly everyday. These were more like the Eight-Legged Freaks variety. Big, mean, nasty and out for blood.
I'll admit, I thought the narrator was going to wind up being the spider in the story, and the assassination they were conducting was against a nest of hornets, wasps, or some other type of insect.
Boy, was I wrong!
Good luck to you in the contest...
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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This was a poem, Anonymous Author? Your author's notes said as much, but it read much more like prose to me.
Spidernators, h-m-m-m-mmm... apparently these weren't your average household varieties of arachnids we all see nearly everyday. These were more like the Eight-Legged Freaks variety. Big, mean, nasty and out for blood.
I'll admit, I thought the narrator was going to wind up being the spider in the story, and the assassination they were conducting was against a nest of hornets, wasps, or some other type of insect.
Boy, was I wrong!
Good luck to you in the contest...
~Dean
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Dean. Sorry about the confusion. I didn't know I posted it as poetry. I've been moonlighting as a poet...don't tell anyone.
A beautiful review from the master of the thriller. Thank you.
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No worries, it's a great story. I thought you might like to know so you could change the category heading, that's all.
Good luck!
~Dean
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No, it was supposed to be prose. I am so glad you caught it! For the contest it can't be poetry and wouldn't want to get DQ'ed for a silly mistake. As I said, I've been writing a lot of poetry lately.
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Well, good luck with this one! ;)
~Dean
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Thanks so much!
Comment from gamay
Hi Anon, This great work my friend. I enjoyed it very much. Its fit in to this contest. Good luck and have a nice day. gamay
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Hi Anon, This great work my friend. I enjoyed it very much. Its fit in to this contest. Good luck and have a nice day. gamay
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Gemayel. You are so sweet and kind for your review! Have a nice day to you as wel. God bless.
Comment from poetadeu
I thought espionage...but in an ingenious way you
trapped the reader by way of your prowess. Exterminator,
and caught by a zillion spiders. What an ending...Great
story and wonderfully creative!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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I thought espionage...but in an ingenious way you
trapped the reader by way of your prowess. Exterminator,
and caught by a zillion spiders. What an ending...Great
story and wonderfully creative!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much! The story was supposed to be a thriller, and I can think of very few other things that scare me as much as spiders! Thanks for reading.
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Oh, it was definitely a thriller...
I don't try to review stories because
of my eyes. I couldn't resist this one.
I want to remember you from the
visit over to my place so I can read
from time to time. Thanks!
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Oh, it was definitely a thriller...
I don't try to review stories because
of my eyes. I couldn't resist this one.
I want to remember you from the
visit over to my place so I can read
from time to time. Thanks!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Even Spidernators, or other high ranking warriors, must some times face their Waterloo. Like everybody else. Well written poem depicts this defeat in battle nicely. Should also be a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Even Spidernators, or other high ranking warriors, must some times face their Waterloo. Like everybody else. Well written poem depicts this defeat in battle nicely. Should also be a good contest entry.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Brett. It was a bit out of my norm, but a break in stride feels good. Thanks for the review,
Mystery writer
Comment from Javed05
This piece is good.....I found this interesting and engaging.......I also found it flows smoothly and good use of words.......while reading I could see the imagery created by the author........thank you for sharing with us.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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This piece is good.....I found this interesting and engaging.......I also found it flows smoothly and good use of words.......while reading I could see the imagery created by the author........thank you for sharing with us.
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you for your review and comments. It was a fun piece.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, this made me smile at the ending. reminds me of this movie where an exterminator ends up battling radioactive spiders and helping the military with their mission. good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, this made me smile at the ending. reminds me of this movie where an exterminator ends up battling radioactive spiders and helping the military with their mission. good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much. I hadn't seen that movie, but it sounds great! I appreciate the comments,
Mystery writer