Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "You Ain't Got Far To Go"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
31 total reviews
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This sounds like lyrics for a bona fide country western song. The repeating lines state the theme well. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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This sounds like lyrics for a bona fide country western song. The repeating lines state the theme well. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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They are lyrics for a Country song. Glad you enjoyed them. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Leineco
LOL - I was just about to say, after checking the category, I think these lines are perfect song lyrics when your author's note caught my eye as I scrolled back down to review :-)
Which, I guess, is my way of saying "Effective and catchy lyrics :-) Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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LOL - I was just about to say, after checking the category, I think these lines are perfect song lyrics when your author's note caught my eye as I scrolled back down to review :-)
Which, I guess, is my way of saying "Effective and catchy lyrics :-) Well done!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from royowen
The first thing I noticed was how even was the meter was from line to line (line 1S1 with S 2 L1 and so on) well done, Brett, the narrative sounds very country, well suited putting to the twangy guitar and country, well done, well scribed, thoughtful,, creative and poignant lyrics. With alternating aabb and mono rhyming, well done, blessings,, Roy.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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The first thing I noticed was how even was the meter was from line to line (line 1S1 with S 2 L1 and so on) well done, Brett, the narrative sounds very country, well suited putting to the twangy guitar and country, well done, well scribed, thoughtful,, creative and poignant lyrics. With alternating aabb and mono rhyming, well done, blessings,, Roy.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support always appreciated.
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Most welcome
Comment from poetadeu
I felt sorry for you through this whole write.
I thought by the ending you would have put him
to rest in another nest...like, maybe a eagle's
so her babies could eat him bite by bite. You
see who's side I am on.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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I felt sorry for you through this whole write.
I thought by the ending you would have put him
to rest in another nest...like, maybe a eagle's
so her babies could eat him bite by bite. You
see who's side I am on.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Yes I see a typical cheating female reaction here. But, that is okay. Most, if not all, women cheat in their relationships. Historically, that is nothing new. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
The image certainly does say a lot-doesn't it?
You have depicted the emotional upheaval of lost love to perfection.
Sadly, for most, this is a life lesson we learn at least once.
The style and format work well as lyrics and the chosen repeats are quite
effective.
Sorry , no sixes ******
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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The image certainly does say a lot-doesn't it?
You have depicted the emotional upheaval of lost love to perfection.
Sadly, for most, this is a life lesson we learn at least once.
The style and format work well as lyrics and the chosen repeats are quite
effective.
Sorry , no sixes ******
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from judiverse
Let me guess--It's Trump's parting shot to Fox News. Excellent work in this one. Really singable lyrics. A great idea with the way you use "hurt feelings." Those strong, silent types do seem to have a soft spot in their hearts and melt easily. You always have to wonder if the gal is worth it. judi
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Let me guess--It's Trump's parting shot to Fox News. Excellent work in this one. Really singable lyrics. A great idea with the way you use "hurt feelings." Those strong, silent types do seem to have a soft spot in their hearts and melt easily. You always have to wonder if the gal is worth it. judi
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Glad yu enjoyed this one. Your comments and support appreciated.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow I love your lyrics and look forward to reading each and every one of them.
Beautifully done and love the rhythmatic sing/song of each of them
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Wow I love your lyrics and look forward to reading each and every one of them.
Beautifully done and love the rhythmatic sing/song of each of them
Comment Written 24-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MelB
Great song lyrics, Brett. I like the chained here to a memory line. Artwork goes along well with this piece.
If you wanna hurt my feelings
You ain't got far to go
If you wanna see me crying
Keep putting on your show - love this stanza
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015
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Great song lyrics, Brett. I like the chained here to a memory line. Artwork goes along well with this piece.
If you wanna hurt my feelings
You ain't got far to go
If you wanna see me crying
Keep putting on your show - love this stanza
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated?
Comment from boxergirl
Sounds like some great song lyrics to me. He has taken about all he can take because he "aint got far to go."
"chained to a memory..." is one of my favorite lines.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Sounds like some great song lyrics to me. He has taken about all he can take because he "aint got far to go."
"chained to a memory..." is one of my favorite lines.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Dean Kuch
A lot of great number one tunes topping the charts in their respective category over the years--as well as today--are far from having perfect rhyming or meter/schemes. That being said (and since you've been gracious enough to inform us that these are song lyrics and NOT a poem), hopefully folks who read this will take that into consideration before they start tearing it apart.
When we can read (and write for that matter) for the pure enjoyment of experiencing someone else's thoughts and feelings, I feel we get much more out of what we've read.
As for me, I got the message here loud and clear, Brett, and I loved every word of it!
~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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A lot of great number one tunes topping the charts in their respective category over the years--as well as today--are far from having perfect rhyming or meter/schemes. That being said (and since you've been gracious enough to inform us that these are song lyrics and NOT a poem), hopefully folks who read this will take that into consideration before they start tearing it apart.
When we can read (and write for that matter) for the pure enjoyment of experiencing someone else's thoughts and feelings, I feel we get much more out of what we've read.
As for me, I got the message here loud and clear, Brett, and I loved every word of it!
~Dean ;)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Appreciate your comments very much my friend. Yes, indeed. I have had to go to telling people my poetry is actually song lyrics, not poems. Too many of them trying to rip it apart because it does not follow a set pattern. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Something I wrote several years ago and decided why not post them here as well for others to enjoy. I have always advised others to write for their own enjoyment. If not, what is it worth doing?
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If writing isn't fun for us in some way shape or form, and if we are not passionate about what we write, then we may as well just hang up our pen, close the laptop, and simply walk away.
You're more than welcome, Brett.
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About to post
Confession: Part Two -- Black Widow.
Would certainly appreciate your feedback if you get the time to read it.
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Time is what I have most of, Brett. All I do is read and write. If I'm not reviewing for Amazon.com, I'm writing or reviewing something here at FS.
I'll be sure to take a gander at it for ya'.
~Dean ;)