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Comment from Mai Mai
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This is an interesting piece. It flows nicely as it provides an interesting look at the flag (that's how I interpreted it any way). Thank you for the update on Brooke, I was wondering why I had not seen her work since I returned.
Good work and good luck.

Mai Mai

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
    Hi Mai Mai....-smile- she's fallen ill. Glory and Michael Cahill are putting together a surprise for her...a present from all of us...-smile- check out the "general" forum or contact one of them. love Michael
Comment from OLA THOMAS
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This is a very patriotic poem coming from a heart in love with his country. This stanza make a great appeal to me: "freedom...for all
honored in United state of brotherhood
one Country colorful." How true. Nice work.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
    Hi Ola...-smile- thank you very much...God Bless. love Michael
Comment from RahulChadha
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American rhymes is a Great poetry, beautiful topic selection and decent vocabulary as well. Loved it:)))))
Best wishes and best of luck

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
    Hey buddy...-smile- thank you man...have a great day. love Michael
Comment from MissMerri
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Hi Michael... this poem says a lot to me, (But as usual, I am never sure I'm catching the message you are wanting to throw out there.) I also very much enjoyed the music so I thought I should at least say hi and thank you. The poem is beautiful and rich in colors of the past and hope for the future.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
    " unusual to find Shroud of Turin"
    special is a pioneer of first explorers
    straight ahead waves exceptions bountiful spread....

    America was never heard of before...bet against Her birth.
    founded on the resurrection of a free society
    honoring God and Country...the apple of the whole worlds eye in a "bigger" " Rocky" picture...."special"...-smile- "rare" ...and that's why I started it the way I did...that and its significance as representing the Christian principles and basic beliefs...not only "our" forefathers possessed , but also I would suggest most of the civilized world, then and today...-smile- Good to see you Meadow...love Michael
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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A very nice poem rich with patriotic images that invoke pride. I love the waving flag as your artwork. I'm glad to see people are raising money for Brooke's recovery. How sweet to step in as her extended family!
Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    Yes Maam...its wonderful and what a community should do...-smile- She gave herself to this place...she deserves it. thank you ...love Michael
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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Great poetry, freedom for all. All in one country. Lazarus born again and the resurrection. Pioneers and first explorers.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    thanks Sandra...-smile- yes maam if that aint great poetry I don't know what is. -salute-...love Michael
Comment from JW
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Thanks for this very lovely poem regarding Old Glory. Words cannot adequately describe the challenges of the first explorers. Yet, I wonder if they were alive today and could view the going-ons within our country - I cannot help but wonder if they would be proud, or shocked.

Thanks for sharing this. JW

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    Well...I think they'd feel like it was time to start again....and that it was going to be as challenging , if not more than the first time. Ready to sign their names to a declaration again.Amen...love Michael
Comment from Dawn Munro
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Well, Mike, You've done it again. Yes, the flag still flies, free and proud, in spite of all the country's problems (and ours does too, and if you were to ask, I'd rather be here (Canada) than anywhere else - at least most of the time...LOL. The West Indies is tempting though...especially when it's -30C.)

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    you guys don't ever have any problems....I think because your leaders care about their people and Country...I'm so freakin' jealous I could smack you...-headshake-...a river away...just a river away...waaaAAAAa hic-hup waaAAAAAAa its just not fair! No fair I want to start over!...-smile-...love you Michael
reply by Dawn Munro on 05-Oct-2015
    Silly wabbit. Our leaders care? Yeah, about the $ they get as elected officials, AND all the perks. We HAVE problems, but it's the green grass on the other side that looks appealing to you perhaps...? LOL. :)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
    I've loved Canada...ever since Amy Krenshaw let me kiss her, while dancing for the first time in my life...ya know with a real female, as much as twelve years allows anyway...-smile- at Smokey the Bear camp grounds...yea Canada's just okay with me...-wink-
Comment from keimosobie
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not sure what Shroud of Turin is.
not sure america is so free either.
free to exploit the poor and the needy and the middle class if your rich enough. if thats freedom you can keep it.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    the Jews didn't really bury their dead, they embalmed them...then. Wrapped the body in bandages saturated with aloe and mirth. the "shroud" was ..is a cloth "napkin" placed over the face of Jesus, as was their custom of burial....people have been arguing its authenticity since its find...it gives us the first real image of our Lord in human form. Yes Sir, I'm aware those who have led US, have done so without concern for the well being of their own heritage and People...and I am one for their exposer, conviction and sentence before they face their Makers wrath...but "we" need each others support to do that...so "we" start by becoming "one" arm, voice of overwhelming power...and take back "our" freedom. thanks man. love Michael
Comment from jlsavell
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She's old, at least by human standards
But her indomitable spirit looms large
And she sings, sings loud for her people
Her battle cry for true liberty
Hard earned freedom

Her presence is glorious
Full regale of red, white, and blue
She flies for the weary
and soars for equality
While she shrouds her men's sacrifice

She cries, cries for lost ideas
Ripped asunder by politicians
Whose history of blood, sweat and tears
they wish to rewrite
and ignore our forefather's strife

She waves for our children
Wanting to promise abundant life
Without carnage and fear
Where laughter resounds security
Among life's fever and fret

She floats above all crowds and harbor
Beckoning all to join her cause
To hold all values her men died for
And protect the very foundation
Built upon her shores

Her vision gleams brighter than stars
Wanting the hearts of all men to believe
That strength is in united numbers
To quieten all discord with strong and tender arms
And brace this world in peace

Within all turmoil
She remains aloft
Proudly proclaiming
Her sweet anthem of loyalty
Upholding her torch of God's liberty

She floats through rain or shine
Even when the darkest clouds
Want to dim her light
For careworn hearts will ne'er forget
The promise of Old Glory's fight


this is what you inspire my wonderful friend. much love and respect...

Jimi

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    Amen...the vision, the ideal, the great American experiment made history more than interesting but a template for what all men can do purposed. I know "our" reason for being...has been manipulated and man handled into a strangle hold. but that's not HER...its not US, the Majority...the American people...only the greed that corrupts and enslaves those possessed by selfish motive for more than the last man standing...are responsible. they took "our" trust and betrayed US.....Traitors to their Country and men. May they live and die with their sin. loved you Michael
reply by jlsavell on 04-Oct-2015
    And I loved you too! What happened? lol. Watch those past tenses, could get you in a heap of trouble.

    Much love, admiration, and respect.
    jlsavell
    the community lush.. lol
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    Sorry kid...you know I love you...-smile-
reply by jlsavell on 04-Oct-2015
    Well I don't know about being a kid