Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Untitled"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from Nosha17
'The Long Road to Nowhere', maybe for the title. He is travelling down that road but is not getting anywhere with his love life. Good use of rhyming and imagery of the loves he won and lost. Enjoyable read. faye
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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'The Long Road to Nowhere', maybe for the title. He is travelling down that road but is not getting anywhere with his love life. Good use of rhyming and imagery of the loves he won and lost. Enjoyable read. faye
Comment Written 16-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Will consider the name suggestion. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Joyce Long
A wandering he goes traveling from state to state with a girl in each one. Unless he settles down in one place, he will be traveling alone. With California calling he says "one last time." Does that mean its "Go west, young man, go west." Now that he is in California, the furthermost west, he is going to stay in one place? I doubt it.
I didn't see any errors or corrections to be made.
Well done.
Joyce 11-16-15
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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A wandering he goes traveling from state to state with a girl in each one. Unless he settles down in one place, he will be traveling alone. With California calling he says "one last time." Does that mean its "Go west, young man, go west." Now that he is in California, the furthermost west, he is going to stay in one place? I doubt it.
I didn't see any errors or corrections to be made.
Well done.
Joyce 11-16-15
Comment Written 16-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Will consider the name suggestion. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is an interesting Untitled piece. I enjoyed the story it told. I had to read it more than once to feel what it was truly saying. If I were to give it a title what comes to mind is "A Lonely Heart".
Thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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This is an interesting Untitled piece. I enjoyed the story it told. I had to read it more than once to feel what it was truly saying. If I were to give it a title what comes to mind is "A Lonely Heart".
Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Will consider the name suggestion. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Tessa Kay
Was thinking about a title. How about 'Roaming lonely', 'Empty love', 'Love's quest - East to West', 'Moving on'. It'll be interesting to see what you will call it in the end.
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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Was thinking about a title. How about 'Roaming lonely', 'Empty love', 'Love's quest - East to West', 'Moving on'. It'll be interesting to see what you will call it in the end.
:)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Will consider the name suggestions. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem is reminiscent of "Please Come to Boston" where the traveling man keeps seeking what he already has, seemingly unaware. I think that if these lyrics had a unifying refrain, that would hold the title.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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This poem is reminiscent of "Please Come to Boston" where the traveling man keeps seeking what he already has, seemingly unaware. I think that if these lyrics had a unifying refrain, that would hold the title.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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"Please Come To Boston" was indeed a very good Classic recording.
Perhaps a refrain would better support "Untitled"?
Had not considered that previously.
However, still would like a name for them.
Only lyrics I have ever written I have not named.
Glad you enjoyed them.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from GE Parson
Title: Now "She's Gone"
Brett, I have no idea what you were talking about here. I
noticed you write a lot of stories along this line. You
must have had a lot of disappointing 'love life'.
Anyway, I do enjoy most of your writings, even tho I don't understand them.
You have a good one,
Jerry
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Title: Now "She's Gone"
Brett, I have no idea what you were talking about here. I
noticed you write a lot of stories along this line. You
must have had a lot of disappointing 'love life'.
Anyway, I do enjoy most of your writings, even tho I don't understand them.
You have a good one,
Jerry
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Actually, I am very happily, and long time married. Glad you enjoyed these lyric. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice country story about a woman who finally got smart and left this traveling man.
Not just travelling from state to state but from girl to girl. Now she is free of him but he is not free of her. He still has the memory.
Maybe you could name it 'Burnt Out' because both Atlanta's fire and love's fire burnt out in this song.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Nice country story about a woman who finally got smart and left this traveling man.
Not just travelling from state to state but from girl to girl. Now she is free of him but he is not free of her. He still has the memory.
Maybe you could name it 'Burnt Out' because both Atlanta's fire and love's fire burnt out in this song.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Will consider the title recommendation Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
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No problem. I am hopeful I can help.
dragonpoet
Comment from Eric1
Hi Brett, this is a really good song Lyrics/poem and I enjoyed the reading of them, they have a really good flow and the rhyming is excellent, I would have called it Sin City.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Hi Brett, this is a really good song Lyrics/poem and I enjoyed the reading of them, they have a really good flow and the rhyming is excellent, I would have called it Sin City.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Sin City. I like that title. Who knows? Maybe I will use that one. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from TPAC
I very pause write. Like descending down stairs each step giving one a little more to be seen. Creative and thought-provoking in its appeal. I found it to be a good read.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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I very pause write. Like descending down stairs each step giving one a little more to be seen. Creative and thought-provoking in its appeal. I found it to be a good read.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Ricky1024
"After some grave thoughts...
'Hmm...
"Grave Thoughts?"
{"Thanks Brett, and I only started writing in 2003!'
Ricky1024.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015
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"After some grave thoughts...
'Hmm...
"Grave Thoughts?"
{"Thanks Brett, and I only started writing in 2003!'
Ricky1024.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
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Thanks,
Ricky1024