The Piper
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-I always look forward to Piper's next story and who or what he will encounter.
-This is an excellent chapter.
-The character of the Fae is developed more, and we meet a friend of Piper.
-As they move along in the marketplace, they chat about Piper's previous experience just like teen boys would, exaggerating, laughing, etc.
-However, for a reason I cannot explain, I was very suspicious of the leather goods merchant, and sure enough, he repeated some of the boy's descriptions back to Piper.
-I figured there was going to be some kind of issue associated with the bag if he bought it because, so far, we have not been able to trust the Fae.
- Then he proceeds to tell Piper about things his grandfather wanted him to know.
- It would seem the Fae is linked with the grandfather, and he is somewhat reassuring when he tells Piper he could have killed him at any time, if he had wanted.
-Now we are left with the question, what is the link between the grandfather and the Fae? There are many possibilities, but I am going to wait for the next chapter!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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-I always look forward to Piper's next story and who or what he will encounter.
-This is an excellent chapter.
-The character of the Fae is developed more, and we meet a friend of Piper.
-As they move along in the marketplace, they chat about Piper's previous experience just like teen boys would, exaggerating, laughing, etc.
-However, for a reason I cannot explain, I was very suspicious of the leather goods merchant, and sure enough, he repeated some of the boy's descriptions back to Piper.
-I figured there was going to be some kind of issue associated with the bag if he bought it because, so far, we have not been able to trust the Fae.
- Then he proceeds to tell Piper about things his grandfather wanted him to know.
- It would seem the Fae is linked with the grandfather, and he is somewhat reassuring when he tells Piper he could have killed him at any time, if he had wanted.
-Now we are left with the question, what is the link between the grandfather and the Fae? There are many possibilities, but I am going to wait for the next chapter!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful review. It is so nice to hear that you look forward to hearing more about Piper. I appreciate your analysis. THANK YOU for the six stars! Thank you for sticking with the story and taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate the detailed review.
I apologize for the late response. I was called away unexpectedly and did not have access to FS. It was so nice to return and read your review. Again, thank you for the support and encouragement. Debi
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You are very welcome for the stars and the comments. I appreciate your comments, in turn, and no problem with a late reply.
Comment from rspoet
A most excellent chapter in the story.
Loved the addition of Rupert,
The perfect buddy and foil for Piper.
Allows us to see his character
and sense of humor.
The stealthy fae has a habit of disappearing
a good skill to have
if you want to live a long life.
And Piper is saved from making a quick decision.
I saw no errors, well done
The reviewer said, "I'll give you three stars for your story."
"I can't take less than ten," the author replied with a very straight face.
"How about six that seems fair."
"I knew in the end, we'd see eye to eye. Six it is."
"And it deserves every one!"
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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A most excellent chapter in the story.
Loved the addition of Rupert,
The perfect buddy and foil for Piper.
Allows us to see his character
and sense of humor.
The stealthy fae has a habit of disappearing
a good skill to have
if you want to live a long life.
And Piper is saved from making a quick decision.
I saw no errors, well done
The reviewer said, "I'll give you three stars for your story."
"I can't take less than ten," the author replied with a very straight face.
"How about six that seems fair."
"I knew in the end, we'd see eye to eye. Six it is."
"And it deserves every one!"
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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I love your review! It is so creative. Thank you for the encouraging comments. THANK YOU for the six stars! I do apologize for the late response. I was called away unexpectedly and did not have access to FS. I appreciate you following the story so far and for taking the time give detailed feedback. I love how you borrowed from the story and turned it into part of the review. Debi
Comment from nancy_e_davis
So the Fae will not leave Piper be. He has a message for him from his deceased Grandfather. What could that be? He will be taking a chance leaving the safty of the village walls again on his Birthday but I sense the Fae means him no harm. Well done Debi! Nancy
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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So the Fae will not leave Piper be. He has a message for him from his deceased Grandfather. What could that be? He will be taking a chance leaving the safty of the village walls again on his Birthday but I sense the Fae means him no harm. Well done Debi! Nancy
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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Hi Nancy,
Thank you for following the story of Piper. I appreciate it. I am sorry for the late response. I was called away for the week and have just returned.
Debi
Comment from giraffmang
Hi,
This was a really good chapter. Well written and technically sound.
The exaggeration of the meeting with his friend adds a level of believability to the writing. The Fae showing up and melting away was well handled too.
Good dialogue and furtherment of plot here.
Good stuff.
G
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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Hi,
This was a really good chapter. Well written and technically sound.
The exaggeration of the meeting with his friend adds a level of believability to the writing. The Fae showing up and melting away was well handled too.
Good dialogue and furtherment of plot here.
Good stuff.
G
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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Hi G,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the writing. I am pleased to hear you like the story so far. I apologize for the late response. I was called away for the week and did not have access to FS.
Debi
Comment from redrocklover
I am really enjoying this story about Piper and the Fae. It's well-written with an intriguing premise. Your description about the marketplace was excellent.
Peace,
Linda
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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I am really enjoying this story about Piper and the Fae. It's well-written with an intriguing premise. Your description about the marketplace was excellent.
Peace,
Linda
Comment Written 28-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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Hi Linda,
Thank you for following along with the story. I appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from chasennov
Young Adult Fantasy "The Piper, part 4" I was trying to see what the young adult fantasy thing was all about. I thought I had passed that stage a long time ago. It is very well done.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Young Adult Fantasy "The Piper, part 4" I was trying to see what the young adult fantasy thing was all about. I thought I had passed that stage a long time ago. It is very well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Thank you for stopping in to read and deliver your encouraging comments. I appreciate it.
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You are most welcome, Debbie.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Wow! This story is so delightfully exciting
with a tone of mystery and foreboding. The imagery and descriptions remind me of the dark ages or Roman Greek eras.
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Wow! This story is so delightfully exciting
with a tone of mystery and foreboding. The imagery and descriptions remind me of the dark ages or Roman Greek eras.
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the great review. I have this set in medieval times, so that would be the dark ages. I am pleased you caught that. I am happy you enjoy the mystery and foreboding. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Debi
_ You just can't trust a Fae who says to meet him in a cemetery, even if it is at Grandpa's graveside! (*.*)
_ Nice hook at the end with the merchant trying to up the price--money-grabber!
_ Another very well penned installment. Always enjoy the read.
<> Since using as a noun, I'd capitalize: ma'am/Ma'am
_"Sorry. Beg your pardon, ma'am/Ma'am."
<> Typo: than/than
_ The Fae was taller that/than Piper remembered, and
* Merry Christmas & Happy New Year to you and yours*
Cheers & Blessings...
Keep Smilin'...
Jacqueline<>Jackie<>Jax (*:*)
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Hi, Debi
_ You just can't trust a Fae who says to meet him in a cemetery, even if it is at Grandpa's graveside! (*.*)
_ Nice hook at the end with the merchant trying to up the price--money-grabber!
_ Another very well penned installment. Always enjoy the read.
<> Since using as a noun, I'd capitalize: ma'am/Ma'am
_"Sorry. Beg your pardon, ma'am/Ma'am."
<> Typo: than/than
_ The Fae was taller that/than Piper remembered, and
* Merry Christmas & Happy New Year to you and yours*
Cheers & Blessings...
Keep Smilin'...
Jacqueline<>Jackie<>Jax (*:*)
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Hi Jax,
I appreciate you sticking with the story. Thank you so much for the suggestion and the heads up on the typo. I have fixed them both. It means a lot to have your help. Thank you. And, yes, I don't think I would trust anyone who said to meet him alone at midnight in a grave yard.