Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A wonderful piece of creative writing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks, Charlie - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Cheryl9359

Excellent

I really like your poem. I think it flows well and I like how you wrote it. It is a sweet poem, and nice for a love poem. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Cheryl, thanks for your review and good wishes.

Steve

Comment from MidnightReicheru

Excellent

Aw, this poem is so cute! Wonderful job and beautiful contest entry. Great job. I really like the slight repeating as it adds a wonderful rhythm to the poem itself.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thanks again.

yes the repeating lines are a feature of this form - the trick is to get them to slide in smoothly the second time around...

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Exceptional

Excellent. I enjoyed reading it... it's beautiful form and its cute words. It had a softness about it and at the same time a very strong message which left no doubt in the readers mind as to the feelings of the writer, Giddy

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

Giddy, thanks so much for the kind words and the six stars - I am glad you enjoyed this.

Steve

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Steve!

The Rondeau redouble style suits you well. This is a delightful and beautiful poem and will be a strong contender in the Love Poem contest, I'm sure.

This is my favorite stanza:

Her lustrous satin wings of purest white,
lie there upon the bed, shed carelessly.
And here she is, tucked up with Mister Right -
her halo's slipped a little, as you see.

Good luck!

Kim

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

Kim, thanks so much for the generous review.

Steve

Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi Steve,
long time, no review?

Well I'm here now, so that must account for something... and I was so glad I did whilst browsing the front page... as you always have some tricky little spin on your take. (Said with a glint in my eye and a smile on my dial.)

This style of poetry lends itself to a wonderful flow of refrain... which you take advantage of through composing the right words that linger with each refrain... and yes, the content within was a cute love story... and personalised through the use of...
'when to 'my' wedding, at its very height...
an angel flew from heaven.'

Yes, Steve a wonderful composed Rondeau for this scorching Love Poem Poetry Contest... all the very best wishes to you in the mix.

With our thoughts we create,
an image of perfection,
James.

******Stars!!!!!!

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

Hey, Jumbo! Where've you been? Hope all is going well with you.

Thanks for the great review and the virtual sixer. I've been playing around with this form for a little while now - they always seem to come out with a touch of wry humour...

Steve

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Aww, what a romantic lovely poem. This is very well written, the rhyme and rhythm flows smoothly, it really is a beautiful love poem. Married to an angel, how wonderful is that?? Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

Thanks, Sandra.

The wings are a little dusty after 40 years and the bloody halo's lost altogether!

Steve

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 01-Feb-2016

LOL!! But a bit of spit and polish will soon bring them back to their former glory! As for the halo, that might need a bit more work! lol! x

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Lovely picture for your beautiful double rondeau. Excellent rhyme and I really liked the repeating lines. The Guinivere and knight reference was brilliant.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

Thanks, Janet. Glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Wonderful expression of love and in such a challenging form. Great job and an enjoyable read that had to put a smile on the reader's face. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

Thanks for the great review and the smile.

Steve

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

Ah, so lovely, Steve! I could envision this wayward angel throughout your poem.

You've done a masterful job with the repeating lines. Your rhyming is perfection, and the flow of your words is wonderful.

One word threw me -- in the first line in the second stanza. I wonder -- should it be 'moonshine' or 'moon's shine'? Almost instantly, the hard liquor made in the southern United States came to mind. :)

Beautiful, my friend. I'd love to give you a six, if only I had one. Take care. Alana

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

Alani, thanks for the great review and the virtual six.. Haven't seen you around in a while...

I tossed up between moonshine and moonbeams. Both Websters and Collins give 'moonlight' as their first definition....
The liquor meaning did cross my mind but I stuck with this as I thought the context would make it clear...

Steve

reply by acerisestory on 01-Feb-2016

You are welcome, Steve! It's a lovely poem. Take care. Alana

reply by Anonymous Member on 04-Feb-2016

You are welcome, Steve! It's a lovely poem. Take care. Alana