Hearts Desire
Erotica15 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hey, Missy. First of all, I'm all outta sixes, just to let you know that before I even get started. Also, I don't read too much erotic fiction. I'd rather live it, alive and in person, if you catch my drift. I find that so much more...rewarding. However, since it's your story, I thought I'd give 'er a go...
"Be still my love, I am exploring." I saw his hands grip the sink. Smiling I proceeded........Phillip was smart. I woulda stood rigid (no pun intended--I swear!), and gripped the sink myself, lol...
"Philip had made me quiver with desire the night before and I wanted to feel his knees get weak now! It was a game to us to find new ways to keep passion flowing in our love life."................Well, if her lips were headed (again, no pun!) where I think they were headed, she was definitely headed in the right direction to make it happen...you know, to keep that "passion flowing"? Ahem.
"His breathing was faster now and little moans escaped his lips. But to his credit, he did not touch me ...I smiled to myself.".........Hell no, of course he didn't touch her! His hands were gripping that bathroom basin so tightly, I'd guess rigor mortis was starting to set in, heh-heh...
"He sank to the floor, took me in his arms, then passionately kissed me to complete my heart's desire.".......Hey, you don't smoke do ya, Missy? I suddenly have a strange urge for a cigarette. Odd...
Well, from a woman's perspective (not that I have a damn clue what that is...but I'll try), I would imagine a man like Phillip is every woman's dreamboat. Any guy who worries about the pleasure of his significant other without regard for his own, as he did hers the night before, he's got the right idea.
Now, if you'll kindly excuse me, Missy, my shower's runnin'...again!
Heh-heh-heh...
~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Hey, Missy. First of all, I'm all outta sixes, just to let you know that before I even get started. Also, I don't read too much erotic fiction. I'd rather live it, alive and in person, if you catch my drift. I find that so much more...rewarding. However, since it's your story, I thought I'd give 'er a go...
"Be still my love, I am exploring." I saw his hands grip the sink. Smiling I proceeded........Phillip was smart. I woulda stood rigid (no pun intended--I swear!), and gripped the sink myself, lol...
"Philip had made me quiver with desire the night before and I wanted to feel his knees get weak now! It was a game to us to find new ways to keep passion flowing in our love life."................Well, if her lips were headed (again, no pun!) where I think they were headed, she was definitely headed in the right direction to make it happen...you know, to keep that "passion flowing"? Ahem.
"His breathing was faster now and little moans escaped his lips. But to his credit, he did not touch me ...I smiled to myself.".........Hell no, of course he didn't touch her! His hands were gripping that bathroom basin so tightly, I'd guess rigor mortis was starting to set in, heh-heh...
"He sank to the floor, took me in his arms, then passionately kissed me to complete my heart's desire.".......Hey, you don't smoke do ya, Missy? I suddenly have a strange urge for a cigarette. Odd...
Well, from a woman's perspective (not that I have a damn clue what that is...but I'll try), I would imagine a man like Phillip is every woman's dreamboat. Any guy who worries about the pleasure of his significant other without regard for his own, as he did hers the night before, he's got the right idea.
Now, if you'll kindly excuse me, Missy, my shower's runnin'...again!
Heh-heh-heh...
~Dean ;)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Oh mercy...I had to go and splash water on my face, after reading this!!! It is kinda scary to put this kind of writing out there. I am deeply pleased that you put me at ease with your review, sweetie.
Hugs,
Missy
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Oh, I can imagine it would be, Missy. For me, it'd be a lot scarier than posting any of the horror stuff I write.
Those words counts, they aren't etched in stone. In other words there is no minimum or maximum, only suggestions as to how long and short to make it.
So, you're good there.
Best of luck in the voting...
~Dean :)
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Can you sneak in??? Heh-heh-heh...
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Into the contest you mean? Heck no, there's no way I could write anything like this. My face would turn so bloody red that my head would probably explode, haha! ;}
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No into the Committee!!!
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Oh, no way would I ever want any part of that, Missy.
No thanks... :P
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Oh, no way would I ever want any part of that, Missy.
No thanks... :P
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Into the contest you mean? Heck no, there's no way I could write anything like this. My face would turn so bloody red that my head would probably explode, haha! ;}
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Missy. Sorry I have missed some of your posts. Busy, busy. My new book is coming out in June and it takes a lot of prep with writing liner notes etc.
You know this is a racy, just plain hot story. LOL. I think you handled it tastefully and with great images throughout, like: "I told him to spread his legs and hold on to the sink. He complied. What a gorgeous man. I don't think he actually knew how handsome he really was. It felt like I had loved him my whole life or the idea of him...but this was the real thing and I was going to enjoy it now!!
Suggestions if I may: " my lips softly kissed him between his shoulders. I felt him as his body tightened ever so slightly at my touch. Try: "my lips kissed the skin between his shoulder blades and I felt his body tighten ever so slighty."
Very good writing, Missy. (Now, I am off to the cold shower.) Bob
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Hi, Missy. Sorry I have missed some of your posts. Busy, busy. My new book is coming out in June and it takes a lot of prep with writing liner notes etc.
You know this is a racy, just plain hot story. LOL. I think you handled it tastefully and with great images throughout, like: "I told him to spread his legs and hold on to the sink. He complied. What a gorgeous man. I don't think he actually knew how handsome he really was. It felt like I had loved him my whole life or the idea of him...but this was the real thing and I was going to enjoy it now!!
Suggestions if I may: " my lips softly kissed him between his shoulders. I felt him as his body tightened ever so slightly at my touch. Try: "my lips kissed the skin between his shoulder blades and I felt his body tighten ever so slighty."
Very good writing, Missy. (Now, I am off to the cold shower.) Bob
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Busy, busy man!!! No problem sweetie. I think you are a solid rock star on this site :)
Thanks for giving this a once over :)
Missy
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Actually...more like the twice over. LOL :) Bob
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Smooches
Comment from fastdigits
Okay, I proclaim you the winner for this no holds
erotic story contest, or, oh, yes, I meant to say
no holes barred LOL.
Your tale of eroticism is what dreams are
made of, as each act is slowly and sexually
manipulated enticing the reader down
the path of the exploding finish.
Whew, I'm completely exhausted
and can't wait for tomorrow.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Okay, I proclaim you the winner for this no holds
erotic story contest, or, oh, yes, I meant to say
no holes barred LOL.
Your tale of eroticism is what dreams are
made of, as each act is slowly and sexually
manipulated enticing the reader down
the path of the exploding finish.
Whew, I'm completely exhausted
and can't wait for tomorrow.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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~Sigh~My work here is done!!! lmao
Thank you so much, Mel, for this, for your graciousness in awarding this Erotica with a 6.
Big Hug for you :)
Missy
Wasn't really long enough. I am worried I might get disqualified for not even a thousand words. :(
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Not to worry, what man could possibly last any further on this trip to paradise. LOL Whew
Comment from William Ross
now that's very erotic a great story of a lady pleasing her man in an oral manor. great job on the writing wonderful read. Enjoy your evening and good luck on this.
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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now that's very erotic a great story of a lady pleasing her man in an oral manor. great job on the writing wonderful read. Enjoy your evening and good luck on this.
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Ahh, this is the part of writing Erotica, for me that is a lil embarrassing! Thank you, William for jumping the hoops to get to the story and leaving me this confidence booster of a review :)
Missy
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It's just part of life. you gave a great write
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:)
Comment from TAB_that's me
Ok Missy, It's a great erotic story and well written. Not my cup of tea as you can imagine but plenty here will love it. The things you wrote were the things I had the most trouble doing when married to a man.
Teresa
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Ok Missy, It's a great erotic story and well written. Not my cup of tea as you can imagine but plenty here will love it. The things you wrote were the things I had the most trouble doing when married to a man.
Teresa
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Oh precious, I am so sorry! But, it tells me something about you, my sweet, you go the extra mile for friends :)
Thank you, bunches!!
Missy