Humanity Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Desert Dilemma"A science fiction book about genetic engineering.
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Comment from MelB
This is such a good story, Rhonda! I am truly enjoying it. I'm not sure if I missed a couple of chapters while I was gone. I feel like I may have missed, so I will have to go back and check.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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This is such a good story, Rhonda! I am truly enjoying it. I'm not sure if I missed a couple of chapters while I was gone. I feel like I may have missed, so I will have to go back and check.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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I think you did miss a few, but the summary should have helped you catch up. Otherwise, you can ask and I'll tell you what you missed. It's still not too far into the plot, and I am so glad to see you back. I know you've been through a lot, but last year when I was injured, I found this site help me to feel normal. It was a good stabilizer.
Still praying for you,
Rhonda
Comment from Zue65
This is another exciting story that I am willing to wait for every post and will look forward to with eagerness. The setting , the characters and the plot and the theme is less explored which renders the story quite fresh. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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This is another exciting story that I am willing to wait for every post and will look forward to with eagerness. The setting , the characters and the plot and the theme is less explored which renders the story quite fresh. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful review. I look forward to more! Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from giraffmang
Good development here with Ayala's realisation of her situation and the wider picture.
as tears welled up in her eyes.
- in her eyes is a little redundant.
the Ant Kin or something?"
. - there's an errant full stop here on a line on it's own.
Ayala's fear of the unknown is well written and comes across well.
They're fibrous and we can use their strings for binding. - need closing speech marks here.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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Good development here with Ayala's realisation of her situation and the wider picture.
as tears welled up in her eyes.
- in her eyes is a little redundant.
the Ant Kin or something?"
. - there's an errant full stop here on a line on it's own.
Ayala's fear of the unknown is well written and comes across well.
They're fibrous and we can use their strings for binding. - need closing speech marks here.
All the best
G
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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As always, thank you for the wonderful review. I have made necessary corrections, and appreciate you finding them. Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Alex Biasin
Another good chapter here Rhonda.
You are moving the story along well, while exposing more and more of the secrets of the "cult" at the same time.
It is building empathy towards your main characters and creating that "bond" with them that hooks the reader in to find out what becomes of them.
Good stuff.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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Another good chapter here Rhonda.
You are moving the story along well, while exposing more and more of the secrets of the "cult" at the same time.
It is building empathy towards your main characters and creating that "bond" with them that hooks the reader in to find out what becomes of them.
Good stuff.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Alex, for the wonderful review and comments. Your input helps to move my story forward.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from lyenochka
Great dialog bringing everyone to the same page. I was a little surprised at how adamant Ayala so quickly asked Archie if his father would help. I know you didn't want to draw this out too long. I enjoyed reading Sani's recipe for the camouflage.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Great dialog bringing everyone to the same page. I was a little surprised at how adamant Ayala so quickly asked Archie if his father would help. I know you didn't want to draw this out too long. I enjoyed reading Sani's recipe for the camouflage.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Yeah, that part probably needed stretching. Thanks for the feedback on that part.
Thanks for the wonderful review,
Rhonda
Comment from Heidi M
Ayala's eyes are finally being opened! Good job of chronicling the range of emotions she went through as she processed the information that Koko is pregnant. I'm wondering how they are going to rescue Todd so he can join them. They are moving away from where he is, but somehow he needs to be freed. I'm looking forward to the 'chase' scene that's bound to be coming up soon!
Great chapter in your story.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Ayala's eyes are finally being opened! Good job of chronicling the range of emotions she went through as she processed the information that Koko is pregnant. I'm wondering how they are going to rescue Todd so he can join them. They are moving away from where he is, but somehow he needs to be freed. I'm looking forward to the 'chase' scene that's bound to be coming up soon!
Great chapter in your story.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the beautiful six stars, Heidi!! You're so supportive, and such a wonderful novelist!
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment from BOO ghost
Ha ha, my father's name was Archie. Time to get to the roots of this journey. Appreciate the character list. You got BOO's curiosity. Ayala: Female head of household in the house Archie finds himself imprisoned. Nice word. agape. Looks like you grammar is in order. You tell and describe a good story. I can see the talent here which is evident. Story has grip, holds you into the plot. An enjoyable read, sorry i am a late comer. So much to read but I do have time in purgatory. BOO!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Ha ha, my father's name was Archie. Time to get to the roots of this journey. Appreciate the character list. You got BOO's curiosity. Ayala: Female head of household in the house Archie finds himself imprisoned. Nice word. agape. Looks like you grammar is in order. You tell and describe a good story. I can see the talent here which is evident. Story has grip, holds you into the plot. An enjoyable read, sorry i am a late comer. So much to read but I do have time in purgatory. BOO!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Boo!!! What a lot of wonderful praise!! I'm so glad you happened upon it, my friend!!
Have a wonderful week,
Rhonda
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Lot of castles to spook. So little time... BOO!
Comment from LaRosa
Am really enjoying each chapter. Glad I 'found' this story.
You have a really interesting way of weaving ideas and personalities together. I even found myself smiling as Ayala confesses her joy (and ulterior motives) of having Archie carry her. :)
Since I haven't been able to 'catch up' through the other chapters yet, I think it's another sign of good writing to tell enough old with the new to keep the reader in-the-loop.
Looking forward to the next section.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Am really enjoying each chapter. Glad I 'found' this story.
You have a really interesting way of weaving ideas and personalities together. I even found myself smiling as Ayala confesses her joy (and ulterior motives) of having Archie carry her. :)
Since I haven't been able to 'catch up' through the other chapters yet, I think it's another sign of good writing to tell enough old with the new to keep the reader in-the-loop.
Looking forward to the next section.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful review, my friend!!
It's really hard to go back and catch up when we have so much else to read on this site, but I'm glad you've picked up and are following!
Take care,
Rhonda
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yeh, but little by little, I shall!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Rhonda,
Glad to catch another chapter in your novel. I'm kind of beginning to get the hang of it now.
So a young girl who has been sterilized has got herself pregnant. I would think the consequences if she was caught would be dire and fearsome.
Nicely done. Best wishes with the rest.
Sonali
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Hello Rhonda,
Glad to catch another chapter in your novel. I'm kind of beginning to get the hang of it now.
So a young girl who has been sterilized has got herself pregnant. I would think the consequences if she was caught would be dire and fearsome.
Nicely done. Best wishes with the rest.
Sonali
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Selina!! I'm glad you found it, too!! You caught up pretty quickly.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Ulla
Hi Rhonda, This is a wonderful chapter and you've brought up a lot of issues to which there are so many answers. Very interesting. I can't wait to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Hi Rhonda, This is a wonderful chapter and you've brought up a lot of issues to which there are so many answers. Very interesting. I can't wait to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Ulla, for always being such a strong support.
Take care,
Rhonda