Humanity Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Desert Confrontation"A science fiction book about genetic engineering.
25 total reviews
Comment from Lu Saluna
This was an excellent chapter. Great action! Really happy Junior took a good beating, he deserved it. He is very smug and pompous.
The idea of experimenting on people is awful. I know that is what the Germans did during the war. It is unthinkable.
Good luck to you in the voting!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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This was an excellent chapter. Great action! Really happy Junior took a good beating, he deserved it. He is very smug and pompous.
The idea of experimenting on people is awful. I know that is what the Germans did during the war. It is unthinkable.
Good luck to you in the voting!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Lu! You are so very sweet for your support and wonderful review. Take care, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment from MelB
Hi Rhonda, you always keep me wanting more of this story. It is so fascinating! The part about the half human and half animal continues to be an intriguing part of this. Wonderful writing and dialogue throughout.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Hi Rhonda, you always keep me wanting more of this story. It is so fascinating! The part about the half human and half animal continues to be an intriguing part of this. Wonderful writing and dialogue throughout.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and sweet review! Have a great weekend,
Rhonda
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You're welcome. Thanks - you too!
Comment from fafa
This story always pays and seduces the reader to continue the plot, this book of his has several chapters that it will be necessary to read to understand, what I manage to read I see that you are it right, Greetings
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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This story always pays and seduces the reader to continue the plot, this book of his has several chapters that it will be necessary to read to understand, what I manage to read I see that you are it right, Greetings
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you, fafa, for the wonderful and supportive review! I do so hope you go back and read. I am honored you would consider it!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from LaRosa
the action is intense as reality becomes reality for Archie and Koko.
The reader almost feels he's there in the middle of the fight and the dirt and the dust.
It is another great chapter
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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the action is intense as reality becomes reality for Archie and Koko.
The reader almost feels he's there in the middle of the fight and the dirt and the dust.
It is another great chapter
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the glowing review. Have a great weekend,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
The plot's at the crossroads, so to speak, where to mow, Archie seems to be most able to take care of the thugs that came after, it seems a little in the air at the moment, I think Ayala intends to return the establishment, tune in folks, well done, Rhonda blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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The plot's at the crossroads, so to speak, where to mow, Archie seems to be most able to take care of the thugs that came after, it seems a little in the air at the moment, I think Ayala intends to return the establishment, tune in folks, well done, Rhonda blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your read and review! Yes, Ayala wavers a bit. She's only doing it for Koko. Things are a bit at the crossroads.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Well done Rhonda
Comment from Heidi M
Some intense fighting in this scene. I'm glad Sani had a 'light show' left because I didn't know how they were going to get out of that. I was afraid some of the Cougars Archie had knocked down were going to attack again and capture them.
'like a(n) unrequited lover'
Another great chapter!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Some intense fighting in this scene. I'm glad Sani had a 'light show' left because I didn't know how they were going to get out of that. I was afraid some of the Cougars Archie had knocked down were going to attack again and capture them.
'like a(n) unrequited lover'
Another great chapter!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Heidi! I appreciate the comments and support. The Cougars haven't completely given up, but they are definitely down for the count.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Ulla
Hi Rhonda,this is a great chapter with a lot of suspense. I sure hope they mange to escape that nightmare. I'm looking forward to reading on.It's a great story. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Hi Rhonda,this is a great chapter with a lot of suspense. I sure hope they mange to escape that nightmare. I'm looking forward to reading on.It's a great story. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much, Ulla!! You've made me smile~
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent as usual. I hope you get them all out in one piece. This is a most interesting read and I wish I had the whole book in my hand so I could continue. Great work.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Excellent as usual. I hope you get them all out in one piece. This is a most interesting read and I wish I had the whole book in my hand so I could continue. Great work.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Awww, thank you for the wonderful compliment! You've raised my spirits!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from lyenochka
Whew! Good ol' Sani to the rescue. I guess he still had some explosives left? It's a riveting chapter. I wasn't sure that you needed to tell us that it was going to get bad before it got bad. But that's a stylistic choice. You're missing "know" in ""I how it sounds, Koko" and I can't imagine "eyes open" out of anger. Anger usually makes the eyes narrow. Other than that, great tense moments and revealing dialogs!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Whew! Good ol' Sani to the rescue. I guess he still had some explosives left? It's a riveting chapter. I wasn't sure that you needed to tell us that it was going to get bad before it got bad. But that's a stylistic choice. You're missing "know" in ""I how it sounds, Koko" and I can't imagine "eyes open" out of anger. Anger usually makes the eyes narrow. Other than that, great tense moments and revealing dialogs!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful review, and the helpful suggestions. You're right on the eyes. I changed it to narrowed! Great call on the micro-expressions.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Rhonda,
Another good, strong continuing chapter. The verbal sparring and justification is well written.
Cougars guards - Cougar guards, or an apostrophe?
The three began to roll around, trading powerful punches.
. - there's an extra full stop here on a separate line.
"I how it sounds, Koko. - I know how it sounds.
Leave and we'll have you shot on site."
- should that be sight?
All the best
G
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Hi Rhonda,
Another good, strong continuing chapter. The verbal sparring and justification is well written.
Cougars guards - Cougar guards, or an apostrophe?
The three began to roll around, trading powerful punches.
. - there's an extra full stop here on a separate line.
"I how it sounds, Koko. - I know how it sounds.
Leave and we'll have you shot on site."
- should that be sight?
All the best
G
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the review and comments. Noted changes were made. I appreciate your help on that!
Take care,
Rhonda