The Piper
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Piper, part 14"Young Adult Fantasy
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Comment from pome lover
This is a fascinating chapter. Sheba talks nicer and seems more concerned for Piper than I think she probably is.
There is good tension and dialogue, leaving the reader anxious for more.
I have not read any other chapters yet, but I must say I'm a bit surprised that this is a YA. It seems more a story for middle grade, to me. But it seems, from this chapter, to be adventurous and and exciting. I enjoyed it.
pome lover
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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This is a fascinating chapter. Sheba talks nicer and seems more concerned for Piper than I think she probably is.
There is good tension and dialogue, leaving the reader anxious for more.
I have not read any other chapters yet, but I must say I'm a bit surprised that this is a YA. It seems more a story for middle grade, to me. But it seems, from this chapter, to be adventurous and and exciting. I enjoyed it.
pome lover
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging comments, pome lover. I am shooting for 14 year olds so you may be right about middle grade. Different websites make the division between middle grade and Y.A. at different ages so I'm not sure. Right now, I am just enjoying writing the story. I am so pleased to hear you enjoyed reading. Thank you for stopping in to read and review.
Debi
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I'm not familiar with the story, but the chapter
was so well written that I found easy to follow
which made it a pleasure to read.
"Oh, you do have an active imagination, don't you[.](?)" - question-mark.
Well penned, Debi.
Margaret
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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I'm not familiar with the story, but the chapter
was so well written that I found easy to follow
which made it a pleasure to read.
"Oh, you do have an active imagination, don't you[.](?)" - question-mark.
Well penned, Debi.
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Hi Margaret,
Thank you so much for dropping in to read and review, and for the encouraging comments. I appreciate you catching the SPAG too, and I have corrected the punctuation as you suggested. I am pleased you found it a pleasure to read.
Debi
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. This is a most creative and interesting story. You do have one word spelled wrong. Where you wrote was (conscience) should be spelled (conscious) Otherwise it is perfect and I enjoyed reading it.
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Excellent. This is a most creative and interesting story. You do have one word spelled wrong. Where you wrote was (conscience) should be spelled (conscious) Otherwise it is perfect and I enjoyed reading it.
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Hi prettybluebirds,
I appreciate the encouraging comments and for you catching the spelling error. It does change the meaning of the sentence, doesn't it. I am delighted that you enjoyed the story. Thank you for stopping by.
Debi
Comment from fafa
It has a very particular way of writing, with a definition much marked with the paragraphs that do the soft and fluid reading, I congratulate him on it and thanks for sharing its writings with us, greetings
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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It has a very particular way of writing, with a definition much marked with the paragraphs that do the soft and fluid reading, I congratulate him on it and thanks for sharing its writings with us, greetings
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging comments. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Debi