The Piper
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Piper, part 15"Young Adult Fantasy
18 total reviews
Comment from LaRosa
Thank you for the background intro. as it really helped me get oriented to the story.
You have a gift for making fantasy seem possible, real.
Now I have to go back and read previous chapters to get caught up!
I enjoyed this chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the background intro. as it really helped me get oriented to the story.
You have a gift for making fantasy seem possible, real.
Now I have to go back and read previous chapters to get caught up!
I enjoyed this chapter.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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What a delightful review. Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. That you would read previous chapters is a huge complement. I appreciate you dropping in to read and review.
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have a great new chapter!
Comment from apky
Thanks for the explanation - they helped me a lot to get into the
story as a first time reader.
I love your "voice" and the world you've created here.
It always amazes me to come across such a writer
with the ability to create an entire believable world.
Well done!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the explanation - they helped me a lot to get into the
story as a first time reader.
I love your "voice" and the world you've created here.
It always amazes me to come across such a writer
with the ability to create an entire believable world.
Well done!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for the encouraging comments. I am delighted you find this fantasy world believable. I appreciate the comment about my "voice" as well. Thank you for dropping in to read and review.
Comment from kriver
Hi,
This is a very good fantasy story
It easily holds the readers interest
A good story for young ones to enjoy
and engage their imaginations.
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi,
This is a very good fantasy story
It easily holds the readers interest
A good story for young ones to enjoy
and engage their imaginations.
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi K River,
Thank you conintuing with story and for the encouraging comments. I appreciate you stopping by to read and share your thoughts about the story.
Debi
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A wonderful chapter in your book. A transitional chapter where we see the wolf, Sheba, run off, leaving Piper behind. The troupe moves on, leaving the boys behind as well. Who is going to lead them to safety?
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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A wonderful chapter in your book. A transitional chapter where we see the wolf, Sheba, run off, leaving Piper behind. The troupe moves on, leaving the boys behind as well. Who is going to lead them to safety?
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Hi Rhonda,
Thank you for the encouraging comments and your analysis of the chapter. I appreciate you stopping in to read and review.
Debi
Comment from Badger_29
The great title, theme, and medieval magic made this whole package a wonderful and captivating read. I like how you build and present your cgaracters, and the way that they interact successfully draws te reader in, presents emotional and interesting situations.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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The great title, theme, and medieval magic made this whole package a wonderful and captivating read. I like how you build and present your cgaracters, and the way that they interact successfully draws te reader in, presents emotional and interesting situations.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Brother Badger. I appreciate your encouraging comments. Thank you so much for dropping by read and review.
Debi
Comment from Thal1959
I actually remember reading the previous chapter awhile ago, so that means it was interesting enough to be memorable. This piece is very well done with just a few minor errors - corrections needed are in the parenthesis:
Maybe it was (a) trick of his eyes in the dark forest.
But he had seen it, and it('s) unnatural behavior.
In frustration, Burkehart punch(ed) the boulder with his fist.
storm before we reach the next village.(") -forgot to close the quote.
Other than these small errors - all is well.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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I actually remember reading the previous chapter awhile ago, so that means it was interesting enough to be memorable. This piece is very well done with just a few minor errors - corrections needed are in the parenthesis:
Maybe it was (a) trick of his eyes in the dark forest.
But he had seen it, and it('s) unnatural behavior.
In frustration, Burkehart punch(ed) the boulder with his fist.
storm before we reach the next village.(") -forgot to close the quote.
Other than these small errors - all is well.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Thank you for taking time to do a close read and give suggestions for improvement. I am delighted that you remember the previous chapter. Thank you for dropping in.
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You're welcome - it was a pleasure.
Comment from Sis Cat
I read your last chapter and I am glad I found your next one. Your story and the magical world of fantasy you created are compelling. Here, Burkehart takes center stage in his search for the lost boys as a faerie wolf prowls about. Your story has a sense of danger and adventure. I found no SPAGS. Thank you for sharing another thrilling chapter.
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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I read your last chapter and I am glad I found your next one. Your story and the magical world of fantasy you created are compelling. Here, Burkehart takes center stage in his search for the lost boys as a faerie wolf prowls about. Your story has a sense of danger and adventure. I found no SPAGS. Thank you for sharing another thrilling chapter.
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Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Hi Sis Cat,
So nice of you to drop in again to check out the story. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
Debi
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'The Piper' is an interesting fictional story.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
The artwork is creative.
The author's are greatly appreciated.- Thank you!
Thank you for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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'The Piper' is an interesting fictional story.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
The artwork is creative.
The author's are greatly appreciated.- Thank you!
Thank you for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Hi Nicole,
Thank you for the encouraging comments and the good luck wishes. I appreciate you dropping in to read and review.
Debi