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Echoes of Artistry

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NaPoWriMo 2017

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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Great story in a poem about the old Masters, and you put it in perspective that they too come down to a pile of bones 'memorialized by dust'.
Your italic verses of some of the old masters are both sad, for some, and poignant and reminds me no matter how well known life doesn't always differentiate.
Sounds like Raphael bought it on himself, never mind.
You really did take up Jim's challenge and ran well with it Kim.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Valda,

    I am happy that you enjoyed this poem. I was surprised to learn how some of them ended up in life. Thank you so much for the exceptional rating and comments. It is attributed that Raphael died after a 15 day illness following relations with a Mistress. He neglected to inform his doctor of that fact and died from a misdiagnosed condition.

    Lots of interesting reading.

    Kim
Comment from BeasPeas
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This is outstanding. An excellent job all around with the poem, the synopsis of the artists in poetry form as well as the fabulous video of the Masters' works. Thank you for sharing. Marilyn

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Marilyn,

    Thank you for the exceptional rating and comments. I appreciate the enthusiasm and compliments.

    Kim
Comment from lyenochka
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Fascinating theme and wonderful poem, Kim! I knew all the master painters in the separated lines except for George Stubbs. The rhyme scheme filled with internal rhymes is superbly done!

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi lyenochka,

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I am happy that you enjoyed this selection.

    Kim
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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Masterly described the state of tribute to the great masters of art, painting and literature and I liked the historic acts and enjoyed the story of historic revelations in a free flow of thoughts.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Alcester,

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your kind comments.

    Kim
Comment from Sasha
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Marvelous work with this one. So many famous and great artisans lie in graves we know not where. Such a sad testament to the beauty they bestow on this earth, to be forgotten when death took them. We remember them but I do find it so sad that many were place in unmarked graves with no mention of who they were and what they did. Awesome work with this one and I enjoyed it immensely. A superb addition to your awesome boo,.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi!

    I'm really happy that you enjoyed this selection. I hadn't realized that so many ended up destitute or in questionably marked graves. It is a wonder what you discover when you read. Thank you for the fantastic comments.

    Kim
Comment from royowen
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Old masters, like the rest of us go by the way of the beggar, leper, madman or sane, back from whence we came...dust. It's funny, I was thinking this as I was reading, every man's philosophical reward is the same. But it would be nice to leave a legacy, I guess that's why we write. And I think you've done well with this variably rhymed in varied stanzas and generally iambic pentameter. Beautifully compiled and scribed, an epic of creative writing, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Roy,

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I thought a few change ups were in order to keep the story interesting. I'm happy to see that you've enjoyed that approach. I appreciate all of your wonderful comments.

    Kim
reply by royowen on 23-Apr-2017
    Most welcome
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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A very well written poem and so very interesting. Jim sent you down the right track with this one. I'd like to read some of the references someday when I have time. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Debbie,

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review this selection. Jim did spark an epic idea. I joked that I wasn't sure I could keep my epitaph challenge to less than a eulogy lol I think I have a bit of both here. I appreciate your wonderful comments.

    Kim
Comment from CD Richards
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I guess I can find some small comfort in the fact that a great many geniuses were not known to be such until after they were dead ;-)

You've certainly told quite a story in this poem, Kim - so I think you've met the requirements well. There are some very clever references, such as Stubbs' wild horses and Michaelangelo's fingertip of God.

A pleasing tribute to some of the greatest artists of all time - nicely done, and good luck in the contest. Craig

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 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Craig,

    Thank you for picking up on some of the subtleties in this piece. Raphael was one that was rather well off and famous in his lifetime, and died of a fifteen day illness, post coitus with a mistress, an encounter which he neglected to share with the doctor, and which is speculated to have caused his death. He lived long enough to put his affairs in order and bequeath her his money. How is that fair? lol I can't imagine what illness that could be?

    And yes, there is still time for your genius to be discovered and lamented ;)

    Thanks for the excellent rating and comments.

    Kim
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
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Incredible job on this write, Kim! Wow!! A tribute to the old Masters is such a wonderful addition to your Echoes of Artistry book. I love how you start out the poem by wandering through a European graveyard, and then take your reader to read the poems on the headstones of each artist. Such a creative idea!

Masterfully written. Terrific imagery created for your reader. I walked right along with you. I can't even pick a favorite line, because they are all so darn good. You nailed it for the Share a Story in a Poem contest! I'd bet my bottom dollar that this poem wins, such an exceptional write it is!! Luv it! -- Connie

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Connie,

    Thank you for the stunning comments in this exceptional review! Reading about how several of the Old Masters ended up destitute or whether or not they are even the ones in their graves was really eye opening. You have erased all of my trepidation about how this would be received as a story in a poem. I appreciate all of your wonderful comments! Thank you, thank you, thank you! :)

    Kim
reply by bichonfrisegirl on 23-Apr-2017
    Have no doubts, Kim! This is excellent story telling at its finest! Bravo!!
Comment from Nottoway
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A moving poem.

While reading this poem, I was reminded of my own travels in Europe as well the many places here in the United States and seeing historic graveyards.

This poem reminds us to celebrate the wisdom, creativity and the education of the masters of all crafts and professions yet it is the reminder that in death they are mere footnotes laid in the earth.

Superbly done.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Nottoway:

    Thank you for identifying all of the underlying nuances intended in this poem with your most exceptional rating and review. I appreciate all of your fantastic comments.

    Kim