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NaPoWriMo 2017

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Comment from bichonfrisegirl
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Hi Kim. Well if that statue is a good likeness of Rupert, then he was indeed a handsome young man. What a shame to have his life cut so short by an infected mosquitoe bite.

Great Acrostric poem, Kim! "Ephemerality defined" ... no kidding. He died at such a young age. I enjoyed reading both your poem and your extensive author notes about Rupert and his poetry. You did a lot of research. Thank you for sharing it all with us. - - Connie

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Connie!

    He really was a handsome young man. There are a few pictures if you follow the link to his Wikipedia bio. He did die too young, but perhaps it was a kinder fate than if he'd made it to Gallipoli with the rest of his shipmates. Thank you for the awesome comments.

    Kim
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written acrostic and tribute to Rupert Brooke a poet that died as a soldier not by a bullet but bitten by a bug. A handsome young man who died too young.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Sandra,

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review! Just one day left of NaPo!! We made it!!

    Kim
Comment from CD Richards
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Some would undoubtedly say that compared to the fate that befell those who made it to Gallipoli, he got off lightly. Tragic he should die so young, but the description of his surroundings couldn't be much more idyllic. Congratulations, Kim, on this lovely tribute to a young man taken too soon. Craig

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Craig,

    I agree with you 100%. Thanks for the awesome comments! :) It does sound idyllic there. The picture of his grave is a beautiful area.

    Kim
Comment from rjuselius
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this is an intresting and informative piece of poetry dear kim! i ahve never heard of such a poet but i bet my bottom dollar that i'll try to find his work.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Rebekka,

    Thanks for taking the time to read and review! I appreciate all of the great comments! I just discovered his poetry this week. It is a shame we lost such a talented poet at such a young age.

    Kim
Comment from sunnilicious
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Twenty-eight years of goodness turned into a legacy. Good poetic Ode. You pay homage to him with nice visual imagery. Good poem with a good lyrical flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice work.

Have a great weekend :)

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Sunni,

    Thank you for the thoughtful comments. It is a shame that we lost such a talented poet at such a young age. Have a wonderful week!

    Kim
Comment from sunao
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I think that you expressed your feelings splendidly in this poem. Some would say that war is human nature and this could be true. I think that war is horrible. Your poem made me think of the many bad things that are happening in our world today, unrelentingly. I hope that one day we can all live in a peaceful world.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
    Hi Sunao,

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review my acrostic poem. I appreciate all of your comments on war and hope that we aren't soon headed for another one.

    Kim
Comment from lyenochka
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Clever! I like the melding of the acrostic introduced by a quote of the name of the poet. Thanks for introducing me to him. Alas, such a brief life. It's good we have his poems.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
    Hi lyenochka,

    Yes, he was so young, but of course, taking the lives of young men is the reputation of war. I just discovered him and his poetry this week. I found six of his poems on poets.org, in case you'd like to read more by him. Thank you for the lovely review.

    Kim
Comment from Janilou
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I'm a little confused about it being listed as an acrostic, but I dont know much about poetry, so I will just say that it was interesting and thanks for the author's notes to give the background. Thought these closing lines were awesome.

His grave, on Skyros dug,
kept 'neath the trees where tended olives grew;
escaped Gallipoli's atrocities of war.

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 Comment Written 28-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
    Hi Janilou:

    An acrostic spells out words with the first letter in each line. Generally those words are the title. In this case, if you look at the first letter in each line you will see that they spell Rupert Brooke. I lead with his quote, which is why I called it a 'Quotable Acrostic.' Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciated you saying which lines were your favorite.

    Kim
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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What an excellently done acrostic and so easily read that i did not realize it was an acrostic until i read the bottom notes. Smooth and a very good tribute. I remember the poem 'The Soldier', very well done

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 Comment Written 28-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
    Hi Barb,

    Thank you for all the kind comments. I also used Brooke's rhyme scheme from the second stanza of The Soldier. I just discovered Rupert Brooke this week. He really was an excellent poet. So sad that he died so young due to the war.

    Kim