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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Moonlight Dancers"Love poems
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Comment from Dean Kuch
This reads very ...Shakespearean-like, Susan.
I'm not talking about a sonnet or any specific form of poetic expression, but more about the eloquence and the language you've used.
It's lovely...
~Dean
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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This reads very ...Shakespearean-like, Susan.
I'm not talking about a sonnet or any specific form of poetic expression, but more about the eloquence and the language you've used.
It's lovely...
~Dean
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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:-) thanks Dean... that makes me feel good..glad you liked it.
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Anytime.
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:-) hugs Deano
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Hugs, Susan...
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written love poem. Dancing in the moonlight is a great recipe for romance for a long time without stop until the next morning. Loving couples will do all they can to be together.
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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A very well-written love poem. Dancing in the moonlight is a great recipe for romance for a long time without stop until the next morning. Loving couples will do all they can to be together.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thanks Sandra!! always appreciate you warm comments! :-)
Comment from Pantygynt
A villanelle for lovers. This is very well done indeed. They are not easy things to write by any means. In my book, "Flat Packed Poetry" I wrote the following in the note to my Villanelle "To Write a Villanelle".
"The villanelle is not my favourite poetic form. The exigencies of the form tend to dominate the poem's content and it is difficult to make them flow naturally."
Difficult it may be but your repeats did not begin to make their presence felt in this way until nearly at the end of the poem, so you must have achieved what you set out to do rather well.
It is a lovelt poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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A villanelle for lovers. This is very well done indeed. They are not easy things to write by any means. In my book, "Flat Packed Poetry" I wrote the following in the note to my Villanelle "To Write a Villanelle".
"The villanelle is not my favourite poetic form. The exigencies of the form tend to dominate the poem's content and it is difficult to make them flow naturally."
Difficult it may be but your repeats did not begin to make their presence felt in this way until nearly at the end of the poem, so you must have achieved what you set out to do rather well.
It is a lovelt poem. Well done.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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:-)))) you so sweet!!... I have so much respect for you and your exceptional writing ability....that i am just smiling with this review!!! hugs!! :-)))))))))))))))))))))) ( that's me smiling)
Comment from nuthead
A lovely, romantic, sensual love poem. The rhythm and rhyme are well written. The sentiment, the words chosen create lovely, graceful images.
The repeated line "'twas serendipity that fateful night." made me wonder if this was a form poem, but I see no mention so guessing it's your creative gesture and not form based. It's effective in drawing the reader back again and again to the fate of the night, the fate of love and romance.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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A lovely, romantic, sensual love poem. The rhythm and rhyme are well written. The sentiment, the words chosen create lovely, graceful images.
The repeated line "'twas serendipity that fateful night." made me wonder if this was a form poem, but I see no mention so guessing it's your creative gesture and not form based. It's effective in drawing the reader back again and again to the fate of the night, the fate of love and romance.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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:-) a villanelle...Thank you for this sweet review!! I appreciate you taking the time to do so.
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Ah! Yes. It's been a while (years!) since I wrote a villanelle. Something twigged in the back of my head, that this is a form I should know. ha! :) Beautifully done!
Comment from Irish Rain
Out of sixes, and what a shame, for this is so lovely! I love the artwork too, which should dance forever with your beautiful words. Is this a Villanelle? Just beautiful!!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Out of sixes, and what a shame, for this is so lovely! I love the artwork too, which should dance forever with your beautiful words. Is this a Villanelle? Just beautiful!!! Blessings...
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Hi Sweetie!! ....yes, Villanelle...thanks for reading! I always appreciate your wonderful comments.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a wonderful poem about the power and surprise of love. These two never expected it to happen but it did.
Nicely done villanelle.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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This is a wonderful poem about the power and surprise of love. These two never expected it to happen but it did.
Nicely done villanelle.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Well Thank you very much!! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review!! :-)))
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Any time.
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
No more love less state of living, now love harnessed, two souls now dance cradled beneath moonlight, the glory and grace of love unified under the romantic light for ecstasy.
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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No more love less state of living, now love harnessed, two souls now dance cradled beneath moonlight, the glory and grace of love unified under the romantic light for ecstasy.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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AHHHHHH..sweet review!!! Thanks for reading!!
Comment from Hitcher
You have crafted a beautiful, romantic Villanelle here friend, your refrain and repeating lines work really well, this is a very accomplished poem and I thoroughly enjoyed the read... Nice!!
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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You have crafted a beautiful, romantic Villanelle here friend, your refrain and repeating lines work really well, this is a very accomplished poem and I thoroughly enjoyed the read... Nice!!
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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You sweetie! thank you for reading and for the great review!!...i'm smiling! :-))
Comment from Janilou
True bonded dovetails under heaven's sight ...
gone, empty yesterdays; now, living starts.
'Twas serendipity that fateful night;
love harnessed, two souls cradled 'neath moonlight.
Such a beautiful poem and this verse was my favorite. I didn't find any nits or errors. I really enjoyed reading it. Hope to read more of your work soon!
Jan
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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True bonded dovetails under heaven's sight ...
gone, empty yesterdays; now, living starts.
'Twas serendipity that fateful night;
love harnessed, two souls cradled 'neath moonlight.
Such a beautiful poem and this verse was my favorite. I didn't find any nits or errors. I really enjoyed reading it. Hope to read more of your work soon!
Jan
Comment Written 01-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Hi Jan! Thank you for such a nice review! I do appreciate it! :-)))
Comment from bertranclan
I love your love poem! My favorite metaphor is "joy's kaleidoscope "; in fact, I love that whole stanza. You have strong imagery that captures the mind. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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I love your love poem! My favorite metaphor is "joy's kaleidoscope "; in fact, I love that whole stanza. You have strong imagery that captures the mind. Well done.
Comment Written 01-May-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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thank you for such a sweet review!!!!!! i do appreciate it! :-)))