Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Hawk Moths"A collection of free verse poems
72 total reviews
Comment from Mark Valentine
What elegant language you use here; "sultry sigh", "sequined, velvet dress of night", "wings of moonlit lace" - all sound like something out of Shelley or Keats.
And the phrase "casual promiscuity" to describe the moths flitting from flower to flower is brilliant.
The alliteration here is wonderful also, not overdone, but effective.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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What elegant language you use here; "sultry sigh", "sequined, velvet dress of night", "wings of moonlit lace" - all sound like something out of Shelley or Keats.
And the phrase "casual promiscuity" to describe the moths flitting from flower to flower is brilliant.
The alliteration here is wonderful also, not overdone, but effective.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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I always look forward to your reviews, Mark Thank your kind remarks and attention to detail. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Brett Matthew West
An interesting critter this hawk moth.
Well written poem captures their essence and colorful language adds another dimension.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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An interesting critter this hawk moth.
Well written poem captures their essence and colorful language adds another dimension.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind review, Brett. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from pome lover
lovely, original analogies painting a picture in the reader's mind.
I love "to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night," and "tipsy waifs." And "wings of moonlit lace," just wonderful.
I have never seen or heard of a hawk moth. I guess they are native to Australia.
This is a beautiful poem, lyrical in its descriptions and a great contest entry! good luck.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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lovely, original analogies painting a picture in the reader's mind.
I love "to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night," and "tipsy waifs." And "wings of moonlit lace," just wonderful.
I have never seen or heard of a hawk moth. I guess they are native to Australia.
This is a beautiful poem, lyrical in its descriptions and a great contest entry! good luck.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind review, Katharine. Much appreciated. I think that these hawk moths are found in quite a few places in the world. In some parts of the US they are known as honeyeater moths, because of the way they hover in front of flowers while drinking the nectar. Best wishes, Tony
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thank you for the info
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
-How many times I've seen these pesky predators in the night and sometimes as large as a half a dollar or even an old Irish penny as they would hum through the night. Seeking their prey as they whisked along dancing on the night shining dust created by the lamplight.
-Your poem and free verse gracefully and distinctly express the imagery in a very demonstratively descriptive way. Along with your vividly tasting alliteration of a combination of alliterations such as "wraiths that waft" and "cup to cup" and lastly
"sultry sighs"
-I was illuminated by your words, is it brought to life this creature, the hawk moth, which searches the night for their prey.
-The pictures totally divine and distinctly clear and very supportive and relative to the conceptual theme of your poetry.
-Excellent use of enjambment which flows smoothly throughout without a hiccup or your syntactical break in the meaning and understanding of your writing.
-Good luck in the contest, Tony and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Cheers, Tony;
-How many times I've seen these pesky predators in the night and sometimes as large as a half a dollar or even an old Irish penny as they would hum through the night. Seeking their prey as they whisked along dancing on the night shining dust created by the lamplight.
-Your poem and free verse gracefully and distinctly express the imagery in a very demonstratively descriptive way. Along with your vividly tasting alliteration of a combination of alliterations such as "wraiths that waft" and "cup to cup" and lastly
"sultry sighs"
-I was illuminated by your words, is it brought to life this creature, the hawk moth, which searches the night for their prey.
-The pictures totally divine and distinctly clear and very supportive and relative to the conceptual theme of your poetry.
-Excellent use of enjambment which flows smoothly throughout without a hiccup or your syntactical break in the meaning and understanding of your writing.
-Good luck in the contest, Tony and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Good morning, Alex - or evening, as it will be with you! I enjoyed reading your review. I haven't seen these moths since I lived in the tropics years ago. Some US reviewers have told me that they are called honeyeater moths, too, because of the way they hover in front of the flowers while drinking nectar. Judging by their girth, they are a gluttonous species! As always, I appreciate your kind words and good wishes. All the best to you and yours. Tony
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As I wrote in my review and more than likely have witnessed these creatures. I've been startled by their presence as they buzz when they flapped their wings or hum. The Death-Head Hawkmoth orAcherontia (Acherontia atropos, Acherontia styx and Acherontia lachesis) is what I witnessed but the North American variety is about a large as a
golf ball in relevant size. Thank for a great poem and your feiwndship. Take care and have a good one.
Alex
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Tony, also, I'm glad you enjoyed my review and thanks for the confidence.
Alex
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I hate moths but I loved the poem you wrote. You almost made me like the moths but I just can't. Your picture, although I think moths are disgusting, fits perfectly with the poem. :)
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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I hate moths but I loved the poem you wrote. You almost made me like the moths but I just can't. Your picture, although I think moths are disgusting, fits perfectly with the poem. :)
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your delightful review about these disgusting creatures! All the best, Tony
Comment from Caressa_08
Oh, it looks to be a hummingbird, though don't think so and different creatures exist in Australia than the US, as it does appear also to be a moth like your poem tells about and must really be something special, like your creative poem imagery...to see while this hawk moth is doing what he or she likes best, it does seem...with its casual promiscuity.
Thanks for sharing & Best Wishes for your entry...C.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Oh, it looks to be a hummingbird, though don't think so and different creatures exist in Australia than the US, as it does appear also to be a moth like your poem tells about and must really be something special, like your creative poem imagery...to see while this hawk moth is doing what he or she likes best, it does seem...with its casual promiscuity.
Thanks for sharing & Best Wishes for your entry...C.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Caressa. I understand that they do exist in the US as well, where they go by the name of hummingbird moths because of the similarities. They, too, hover in front of a blossom while feeding.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, lovely words, expressed with the sensitivity and allure of a romantic's soul, presented in easy and fluid free verse - a beautiful entry for the contest - best of luck...
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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In my opinion, lovely words, expressed with the sensitivity and allure of a romantic's soul, presented in easy and fluid free verse - a beautiful entry for the contest - best of luck...
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind and supportive review, Eve. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome indeed...
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written and contains beautiful imagery throughout and reads very strongly and beautifully presented well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written and contains beautiful imagery throughout and reads very strongly and beautifully presented well done regards Jill
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind and supportive review, Jill. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written free verse poem. I think that this is an excellent entry for the contest you should do very well I wish you all the best and good luck to you. I find this to be very interesting and I love the literation. Thank you so much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, Lola
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written free verse poem. I think that this is an excellent entry for the contest you should do very well I wish you all the best and good luck to you. I find this to be very interesting and I love the literation. Thank you so much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, Lola
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind and supportive review, Lola. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Heather Knight
This is absolutely delightful. I love it all, but my favorite lines are:
tipsy wraiths that waft from cup to cup
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to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night
Beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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This is absolutely delightful. I love it all, but my favorite lines are:
tipsy wraiths that waft from cup to cup
and
to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night
Beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind and supportive review, Maria. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony