Perennials of War
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Comment from Ben Colder
I would think being captivated within their own household would become boring to some degree. What a life style. At least beautifying can break the routine. I saw a picture of my late wife one time when she was a girl wearing her hair in ringlets. I use to say, "What happened!" She would laugh got in the way I cut it off. LOL. Keep it rolling Barb. Getting more interesting.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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I would think being captivated within their own household would become boring to some degree. What a life style. At least beautifying can break the routine. I saw a picture of my late wife one time when she was a girl wearing her hair in ringlets. I use to say, "What happened!" She would laugh got in the way I cut it off. LOL. Keep it rolling Barb. Getting more interesting.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Barbara;
Thank you for sharing another chapter in the tale of Shana and the painting. I loved the banter at the table and Drew's obvious discomfort.
Looking forward to more,
A nit: '"Why did Daddy get(up) and leave without eating breakfast?"'
~patty~
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Hi, Barbara;
Thank you for sharing another chapter in the tale of Shana and the painting. I loved the banter at the table and Drew's obvious discomfort.
Looking forward to more,
A nit: '"Why did Daddy get(up) and leave without eating breakfast?"'
~patty~
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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I definitely need to fix that missing word. Thank you.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Babara
Another excellent continuation. Flow, dialogue and character interactions were spot
I like the counter balance between Emily's innocence and the dark reality there's going to be trouble and soon.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Good morning, Babara
Another excellent continuation. Flow, dialogue and character interactions were spot
I like the counter balance between Emily's innocence and the dark reality there's going to be trouble and soon.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the support.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
Nice instalment with Anderson's feelings being slowly uncovered. nice interactions between the females.
No, yelling or running in the house - delete the unnecessary comma here.
Nothing is ever delivered until after lunch, you know that?" - this felt more of a statement or reminder rather than a question.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Hi Barbara,
Nice instalment with Anderson's feelings being slowly uncovered. nice interactions between the females.
No, yelling or running in the house - delete the unnecessary comma here.
Nothing is ever delivered until after lunch, you know that?" - this felt more of a statement or reminder rather than a question.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the support.
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter, again. Always leaving us in suspense. wanting to know the next exciting event. Hope I am up for an autographed hard copy when this is all published. One spag."Why did Daddy get (up)and leave without eating breakfast?"
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Good chapter, again. Always leaving us in suspense. wanting to know the next exciting event. Hope I am up for an autographed hard copy when this is all published. One spag."Why did Daddy get (up)and leave without eating breakfast?"
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
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I will fix that little spag. Thank you.
Comment from apky
Another very intriguing and well written post. I like the subtle way you show Anderson's interest in Shana without coming out and saying it straight on.
Excellent
Aunt Jane(,) what color is Ms. Shana's dress?"
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Another very intriguing and well written post. I like the subtle way you show Anderson's interest in Shana without coming out and saying it straight on.
Excellent
Aunt Jane(,) what color is Ms. Shana's dress?"
Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
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I have made that correction. Thank you.
Comment from beizanten
An interesting background summary. An interesting and well written story. You portray the character emotion well. Emily is such a cute, darling girl. Keep up the great work!
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An interesting background summary. An interesting and well written story. You portray the character emotion well. Emily is such a cute, darling girl. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This looks to be a good story, even though I've just come in in the middle of it.
The characters are clear as is the story line.
I look forward to reading more.
Sharon
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This looks to be a good story, even though I've just come in in the middle of it.
The characters are clear as is the story line.
I look forward to reading more.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
I found this interesting. Once again, you pose more questions than answers keeping my interest piqued. Very nice work with this and I anxiously look forward to the next post.
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
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I found this interesting. Once again, you pose more questions than answers keeping my interest piqued. Very nice work with this and I anxiously look forward to the next post.
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from teols2016
Another strong installment with more questions raised. I did notice one issue:
Guess who this if from?: I'm guessing you mean "is" instead of "if".
Otherwise, well done. Looking forward to more.
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Another strong installment with more questions raised. I did notice one issue:
Guess who this if from?: I'm guessing you mean "is" instead of "if".
Otherwise, well done. Looking forward to more.
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the catch. I HATE making stupid mistakes like that.