Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hello Craig. Hey sheep's eye is almost like doe eyed and we don't make jokes about sheep down here under your down under if ya catch my drift ... Loved it. Wonderful writing style. Always a joy. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Sheep jokes? As if! That's just the height of ignorance. No one with any class makes jokes about someone else's girlfriend ;-)

Thanks so much, Kiwi. Much appreciated.

Craig

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

A romance story in 5 words, how clever. The one that stands out for me is - compromise -
I might think of doing something like this for our local writing group's 5 minute write, but maybe not with archaic words, they might all revolt, ha ha.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

"The local writing group is revolting!" - no, that wouldn't do :)

Thanks so much, Valda. Much appreciated,

Craig

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

this is very clever and well rhymed. My ugur used to joke too: first there is the engagement ring, then the wedding ring, and then suffering! I particularly applaud the alliteration rhyme in the middle:

Claim prize

Compromise


Clever work.

Chuckling,
rd

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Thanks for the kind review, RD - much appreciated. I guess, for completeness, your guru could add "interring", for when things go really bad :)

Cheers,
Craig

reply by rama devi on 09-Jan-2018

Ha ha ha! Good one! :-)))

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

And let's not forget "downsize", Heh-heh-heh.
As men, we're extremely predatory in nature. It is ingrained in our DNA through eons of evolution.
You know as well as I do, the thrill is in the chase. Once our pray is "caught", we lose interest.
We shouldn't, perhaps. It's simply the way we're wired.
Funny, Craig.
~Dean

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Thanks for the fun review, Dean.

I like Rod Stewart's approach:

"I'm never getting married again. I'll just find a woman I don't like, and give her half my stuff."

Much simpler lol

Cheers,
Craig

reply by Dean Kuch on 09-Jan-2018

Much simpler.
You're welcome. :)

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Actually, the choice of animal in this expression has always seemed a little strange to me. I don't think I've ever seen a sheep look amorously at anyone. No, don't make the kiwi joke! Cow or dog would be much more likely...

Cute little monorhymed poem, but is it true love if there's a goodbye at the end of it?

Steve:

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Are you asking if true love can ever grow cold? Why not ask me something hard?

I wouldn't dare do the kiwi joke. The guy who shears my sheep and alpacas is a kiwi - and decent alpaca shearers are hard to find.

Speaking of which, it was a little embarrassing when i asked if I could have a go at helping with the shearing . His response? "I ain't shearing these sheep with anyone!"

Oops.

Thanks Steve :)

reply by kiwisteveh on 09-Jan-2018

:O)

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Wow! This write says it all! I am at the penultimate stage, very close to the 'last goodbyes' he he he, great words in this clever write, best wishes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Oh dear! Well, all's well that ends well lol - wish I'd thought of that the first time round. Thanks for the great review, Dolly.

Craig

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Well said, well done, stages of love relationships, beautifully depicted, a pleasant read; thank you for sharing this informative poem. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR

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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Thanks for reviewing, much appreciated! Craig

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

A splendid rhyming sequence describing the course of a loving relationship! Beneath the humour there lies more than a little truth! This reminds me of the seven ages of man.

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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Hi Tony, good to hear from you :)

Would that be Shakespeare's seven ages, or another one>?

Cheers,
Craig

reply by tfawcus on 09-Jan-2018

Shakespeare's