A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
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Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Craig
Great opening with all those alliterations. Whole sentences bravo!
I could see this as a picture book lol yeah maybe not so much for kids in the present state but yeah big colorful pictures and thick cardboard so you could turn the pages as many times as you wanted to.
I liked it. So many fabulous alliterations and descriptive text.
xxoo Kiwi
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Hi Craig
Great opening with all those alliterations. Whole sentences bravo!
I could see this as a picture book lol yeah maybe not so much for kids in the present state but yeah big colorful pictures and thick cardboard so you could turn the pages as many times as you wanted to.
I liked it. So many fabulous alliterations and descriptive text.
xxoo Kiwi
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thanks, Kiwi :) It might take a little work before getting a PG rating, but probably could be done. Cheers, Craig
Comment from tfawcus
A good example of how voice pacing and stress can overcome metrical inconsistencies. Much more interesting to read when a change of meter guides the expressiveness of a piece of writing. Your comic use of alliteration much appreciated. I also liked the way you delivered 'manubiary' as a coup de grace at the end.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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A good example of how voice pacing and stress can overcome metrical inconsistencies. Much more interesting to read when a change of meter guides the expressiveness of a piece of writing. Your comic use of alliteration much appreciated. I also liked the way you delivered 'manubiary' as a coup de grace at the end.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thanks very much for the lovely comments, Tony. I'm glad it seems to come across ok in spite of changing meter. Cheers, Craig
Comment from James H. Oldfield
I'd does indeed read just fine, read aloud.
Really liked this, great fun poem, and would serve as an excellent educational tool in teaching alliteration.
No improvements to suggest, this was very, very good, great job.
Take care.
-James
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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I'd does indeed read just fine, read aloud.
Really liked this, great fun poem, and would serve as an excellent educational tool in teaching alliteration.
No improvements to suggest, this was very, very good, great job.
Take care.
-James
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thanks very much for the great comments, much appreciated :) Craig
Comment from Ricky1024
ICD I like this it was well written rich and themes was imagery this flowed well with no grammar issues adjectives as well as object the contents were firmly in place in to skip the measures along perfectly thanks for jthis.
Dr. Ricky 1024
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ICD I like this it was well written rich and themes was imagery this flowed well with no grammar issues adjectives as well as object the contents were firmly in place in to skip the measures along perfectly thanks for jthis.
Dr. Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the kind review, mch appreciated. Craig