A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
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Comment from Pamusart
And, what happened to Socrates? Why would I listen to him? Just a dark joke. The last laugh is being had by him throughout the centuries of human history. His ignominious executioners are long forgotten and unknown. I think this proves the premise of some of your earlier posts about the dangers of zealotry.
I have a question about the rhyming. Where are the rhymes in the first and third lines? I have never written a sonnet.
"To look for happiness is all mens' right--
some wise folk told us that a while ago.
No one should live their life in misery,
although our joy may sometimes ebb and flow." I do not know if you want a near rhyme. But, if you do, here goes. Ignore if not interested.
"To look for happiness is all mens' right--
some wise folk told us that a while ago.
No one should live their life in strife,
although our joy may sometimes ebb and flow."
Thank you for sharing
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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And, what happened to Socrates? Why would I listen to him? Just a dark joke. The last laugh is being had by him throughout the centuries of human history. His ignominious executioners are long forgotten and unknown. I think this proves the premise of some of your earlier posts about the dangers of zealotry.
I have a question about the rhyming. Where are the rhymes in the first and third lines? I have never written a sonnet.
"To look for happiness is all mens' right--
some wise folk told us that a while ago.
No one should live their life in misery,
although our joy may sometimes ebb and flow." I do not know if you want a near rhyme. But, if you do, here goes. Ignore if not interested.
"To look for happiness is all mens' right--
some wise folk told us that a while ago.
No one should live their life in strife,
although our joy may sometimes ebb and flow."
Thank you for sharing
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much, Pam, for the great catch. I guess I made a change at some point, and that slipped through. Your suggestion is a good one, but I came up with another answer, as I wanted to avoid using "strife" later (not terribly consistent, I know, as I've used happiness more than once).
Socrates won in the end, for the reasons you point out. I also think his calm acceptance of what befell him was somehow a victory in itself. He could have got off, if he so chose, but instead he elected to stick by his convictions.
Cheers,
Craig
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I knew there was probably something even better than strife. I went and took a look at your version now. Two thumbs up!
Comment from meeshu
nicely done, CD. an old sonnet form with modern vernacular. life is rarely hilarious, a little smile now and again is just fine. your book of words sounds like a lot of fun.......meeshu
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nicely done, CD. an old sonnet form with modern vernacular. life is rarely hilarious, a little smile now and again is just fine. your book of words sounds like a lot of fun.......meeshu
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Thanks very much for the kind words, meeshu. I don't see sonnets going out of favour any time soon :)
Most grateful, Craig