Love Me Once More
Love is strong and will return to me34 total reviews
Comment from karenina
"I stay alive in the hope you see
there's only me, there's only me
please love me again as you have before
please love me again just once more"
You have wrung from my heart every tear I had left...I am hurt by your hurt, so sad you're bereft. I can't explain grief...why do parents do this? I don't think there is logic, only pain as raw as an open wound...and all we can do is continue loving and forgiving them...perhaps one day it will all become clear. I am so sorry for your losses. Six stars to be sure, but I know that doesn't help....
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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"I stay alive in the hope you see
there's only me, there's only me
please love me again as you have before
please love me again just once more"
You have wrung from my heart every tear I had left...I am hurt by your hurt, so sad you're bereft. I can't explain grief...why do parents do this? I don't think there is logic, only pain as raw as an open wound...and all we can do is continue loving and forgiving them...perhaps one day it will all become clear. I am so sorry for your losses. Six stars to be sure, but I know that doesn't help....
Karenina
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you very much, and I do hope clarity comes before we lose each other, I to shed a tear in writing this one as memories not welcome, many many thanks****kahpot
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You are in my prayers....
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great entry in the contest. It reads smoothly with good rhymes. I like the repeated lines. Your notes add more to what I was thinking as I read this. I got the same feeling before I read the notes. Good job & best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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This is a great entry in the contest. It reads smoothly with good rhymes. I like the repeated lines. Your notes add more to what I was thinking as I read this. I got the same feeling before I read the notes. Good job & best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from Monica L. Moraca
Wow! This is powerful! My heart aches for you. Parents always have a 'favorite' child and it's unfortunate when tragedy strikes, the remaining sibling feels the void of their parents love and acceptance. If i had any six stars left, you definitely would have received one.
Thank you for sharing a beautiful poem.
Monica
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Wow! This is powerful! My heart aches for you. Parents always have a 'favorite' child and it's unfortunate when tragedy strikes, the remaining sibling feels the void of their parents love and acceptance. If i had any six stars left, you definitely would have received one.
Thank you for sharing a beautiful poem.
Monica
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this excellent review****kahpot
Comment from Violet WolfChild
Sadly this happens a lot. Blinded by what has been lost we overlook what still remains. This is beautifully written and filled with emotion I'm glad you were able to get out. I witnessed this with my sister after her oldest boy passed away and I hope one day you are able to find the love you seek. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Sadly this happens a lot. Blinded by what has been lost we overlook what still remains. This is beautifully written and filled with emotion I'm glad you were able to get out. I witnessed this with my sister after her oldest boy passed away and I hope one day you are able to find the love you seek. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this review and the 6 stars I am honored and sorry you have witnessed (dealt with this) many thanks****kahpot
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Kahpot;
-What a beautiful poem written in defense of your own pride and stability within the family ranks as a son and a brother not just someone other.
-I can feel the strong frustration that's emanating From heavy agonizing word, in your poem, that reflects, definitively, the demonstrative expressiveness in your imagery of this agonizing feeling or should I say situation?
-There was one small typo or a missed typo in the following line:
~"as loves(apostrophe'needed) support is now abstract"~
-What I question, that this is a love poem, And it well is, because it is an anti-love poem. A poem in which you would deny the love you thought was, at least, part of the family's behavior.
-Good luck in the contest, my friend, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Cheers, Kahpot;
-What a beautiful poem written in defense of your own pride and stability within the family ranks as a son and a brother not just someone other.
-I can feel the strong frustration that's emanating From heavy agonizing word, in your poem, that reflects, definitively, the demonstrative expressiveness in your imagery of this agonizing feeling or should I say situation?
-There was one small typo or a missed typo in the following line:
~"as loves(apostrophe'needed) support is now abstract"~
-What I question, that this is a love poem, And it well is, because it is an anti-love poem. A poem in which you would deny the love you thought was, at least, part of the family's behavior.
-Good luck in the contest, my friend, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you very much indeed, I have corrected my mistake (many thanks) I like it when someone helps with these matters and does not penalize, very much appreciated****kahpot
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Well, I just got turned on to punctuationguide.com, And it helps with every punctuation you can think of and where to put it when to put it in wider put it.
Take care and have a good one and you're very welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there;
There is a tangle of emotions within the lines of this poem. There is the need for parents to love you for who you are, and realize your brother is gone. So much hurt is portrayed here,
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hi there;
There is a tangle of emotions within the lines of this poem. There is the need for parents to love you for who you are, and realize your brother is gone. So much hurt is portrayed here,
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from RGstar
Even though this is more a different take of love with the difference being rejection, I really like the way you have complied it. Nicely done with dignity as well thought provoking of a situation that arise frequently..
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Even though this is more a different take of love with the difference being rejection, I really like the way you have complied it. Nicely done with dignity as well thought provoking of a situation that arise frequently..
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you very much, and yes I guess love has different forms, some give, some take, but I think everyone needs, many thanks for the 6 stars much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from l.raven
when I stop crying Kahpot I'll review this very touching poem my sweet friend...I felt that way about my mother with my brothers...they were mom and dads kids...we were mom's and another dads kids...my father loved us all...but I think mom had favorites...I try to look at her past to know why I felt that way...the way she was raised...sometimes it helps...love has never left you sweet guy...because in the end...when we are the last ones in the family standing...all friends are gone...truly God will be there...and what better love to have...love your poem...but so very sad...very well written...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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when I stop crying Kahpot I'll review this very touching poem my sweet friend...I felt that way about my mother with my brothers...they were mom and dads kids...we were mom's and another dads kids...my father loved us all...but I think mom had favorites...I try to look at her past to know why I felt that way...the way she was raised...sometimes it helps...love has never left you sweet guy...because in the end...when we are the last ones in the family standing...all friends are gone...truly God will be there...and what better love to have...love your poem...but so very sad...very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you very much, this is what I like about FS everyone has a story and are able to share (release) many thanks****kahpot
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you are so very welcome kahpot...always...love xxoo
Comment from jenintorre
This is a beautifully written poem, I really enjoyed reading it. So very sad and poignant but so believable. I hope it's not true but I suspect it is. Thank you for sharing. God bless. Jen.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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This is a beautifully written poem, I really enjoyed reading it. So very sad and poignant but so believable. I hope it's not true but I suspect it is. Thank you for sharing. God bless. Jen.
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review and many stars, you have good suspicion****kahpot
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a well written verse for the Love Poem writing prompt.
Your story of wanting unrequited love is clear and very sad.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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I think this is a well written verse for the Love Poem writing prompt.
Your story of wanting unrequited love is clear and very sad.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot