Comment from apky

Excellent

Great, great, great rhythm and rhyme in you fantastic poem, Craig. It was like a song, a hymn even for all the wonders of our planet.

My favourite:

The world is full of wondrous sights,
each continent is full
of features making it unique,
and each has their own pull.

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

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reply by the author on 21-May-2018

Thanks, Apky, for the very kind words. Much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Mustang Patty

Exceptional

Hi, Craig;

I can only imagine how wonderful Australia must be if you rather be there than in wonderful Italy, or oh-my-God, Paris.

I have not made it to the Land Downunder yet. (It is on the Bucket List,) and so I envy you the travels you've had, but I envy even more the wonderfully poetic tale you told. And the use of 'transmarine,' fit in so well with this tale of travel.

Thank you for sharing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

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reply by the author on 21-May-2018

Thanks, Patty, for the delightful assessment and comments. Part of the attraction of places such as those you mention, I think, is that you get to enjoy them, and then come home lol - for me, anyway. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Kerry Wanstall

Excellent

Your poem captures, so well, the strong feelings that many share about our beautiful country, Description of your travels would resonate with many of us as does the overwhelming joy of seeing that vast expanse of star filled sky that you can see only in the Australian outback.

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 Comment Written 21-May-2018

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reply by the author on 21-May-2018

Thanks very much, Kerry. It's always nice to come home. Cheers, Craig

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Exceptional

Craig, I love how you managed to weave the word "transmarine" into this terrific poem. Your poem shows a deep appreciation and love for one's homeland. I love this sweet write!

Very nice how you give your reader a glimpse of highlights from each of your travels, and then go on to say that there's nothing special about where you live, but you wouldn't trade it for anything as you would be homesick. :-)

"transmarine" ... I'm gonna remember and use this word!

Great job in 8/6/8/6 syllable count with excellent rhyming and great imagery created for your reader. A most enjoyable read! ~~ Connie

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

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reply by the author on 21-May-2018

Thanks for the wonderful review, Connie, and lovely comments. It's true, I think, that home is where the heart is. It doesn't have to be "better" than anywhere else to be our place. Most grateful, Craig

Comment from Lifeisjess

Excellent

Great work, it has a nice flow and I love your discription of travelling but also remembering where your heart belongs. Towards the end a bit the flow of the poem took a bit of a turn where it didn't flow as much but then got right back up there into the stream again.
Despite this the poem was a very good read and I just love your sense of creativity

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 Comment Written 21-May-2018

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reply by the author on 21-May-2018

I just want to check - your choice of a "3" rating for this was deliberate, and not a mistake?

reply by Lifeisjess on 22-May-2018

No sorry for some reason it has done that with a quite a bit of my reviews sorry about that

reply by the author on 22-May-2018

It's your choice to change it, or not :)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

Good job Craig. I really like your poem with your word transmarine--trans mean across & marine has to do with water. So your travel adventure fits well. But as 'they' say "There's No Place Like Home."

Your words flow well with good rhymes, too.

This verse was a little hard to get:

But though of travel I have seen [though of travel??--But through my travels I have seen]
far more than my fair share;
there's no where else of which I'd say
I'd rather I lived there.

Your picture looks like it could be just down the road from me on the way to Big Bend in Texas. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

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reply by the author on 21-May-2018

Thanks so much for the lovely review, and the very kind and generous rating, Jan.

In the stanza you pulled forward, I was basically just trying to say "But though I have seen more than my fair share of travel". Do you think a comma would help? As in...

But, though of travel I have seen
far more than my fair share

If you still think it odd, I might go with your suggestion, even though the meaning is slightly different.

The photo is the Simpson Desert. I think a lot of our arid areas are similar to what you'd see around your area.

Thanks again,
Craig

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 21-May-2018

Thanks for the gracious reply Craig. I think it is the word 'though' that is awkward. It seems like that line needs another word when used. Maybe:

But, through my travel(s) I have seen . . .

I KNOW deserts have their own beauty IF people would just look & not complain. Jan