Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is hilarious, Craig. It reads like a flash fiction with a great deal of miss direction as we think she's doing a sexy strip tease for her lover and then we learn she's trying to get her clothes back from he who likes to dress in silky female lingerie.

Excellent metre and a totally awesome and delightful poem. lol. It works!

Love it!

Gloria

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thanks very much, Gloria. I'm thinking it could well be the piece which results in me finally being considered a "serious" poet. Such angst, such heartfelt emotion... Cheers, Craig

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

I can be dense sometimes. When I realized there was only a few lines left I wondered where this was going. Well of course it was. Very funny my friend. Made me smile and this morning that is a good thing. LOL Thanks Nancy

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thanks for the lovely review, Nancy. I'm glad it brought a smile to your face. Craig

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is hilarious Craig. You did a great job with the storyline, the rhymes, the smooth flow, the picture, & the clincher at the end. You had me thinking something else until that line. Thanks for sharing & for the laugh. Jan

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thanks for the glowing review, Jan. I'm glad you enjoyed - Craig

Comment from Mustang Patty

Exceptional

LOL!! ROFLMBO!!

Oh, you! I couldn't help but be caught up in the poem; wondering how far you would take this, and then... Well, the picture in my mind changed entirely and it just wasn't pretty!

Thank you for making my morning,

~patty~

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Oh, I can assure you, Patty, it wouldn't be pretty LOL

Thanks for the fun review, and the glowing rating.

Craig

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Exceptional

Hi,
I quite enjoyed the air of deceit you employed as your poem
Seemed to lead to....it doesn't matter now - I got it all wrong.
Clever, witty, seductive and cheeky.
Well done.
I also learnt a new word.
:-) Shirley

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Ah ha. Thanks for letting me know you were barking up the wrong tree - that makes me happy :)

I really appreciate the kind words and the lovely rating. Most grateful!

Craig

Comment from RodG

Excellent

I like how you let a single word inspire this poem. It is fun to listen to the Speaker as he responds to each command of the woman. Because you got my imagination going long before the punch line, this deserves an excellent rating.

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 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thanks very much, Rod for the very kind comments. I'm glad it put your imagination to work. Much appreciation, Craig

Comment from bob cullen

Excellent

The punchline was priceless and worth waiting for. But the rhyme, both the internal and end of line rhyme was sensational. It's so good to find a fun piece where the humour flows as well as the flow of words

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 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thanks very much for the kind words, Bob. I'm glad you liked - much appreciated, Craig