Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. When we seek answers, we will find answers. When we knock at the door, someone will open. We can learn about God but only He will give us the understanding that He is within us, we don't have to seek Him in the heavens, He left His Holy Spirit within our souls.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Thanks for reviewing, Sandra - much appreciated. Craig

Comment from catch22

Exceptional

Hi Craig, this is a lovely bit of philosophy that read mostly smooth to my ear. I did stumble on the line with enlightenment but as mentioned in your limerick, that could just be a pronunciation thing. The message is in the vein of the existentialist philosophy. I loved it. Straight from the myth of Sisyphus. Meaning lies in the in between for certain and it is our life goal t find it.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Hi Pam,

I think you're right. I'm not certain, but I think maybe the problem is when we say the phrase "but here's the thing", we naturally want to emphasize "here's", whereas my line forces the emphasis on "but".

I have made a slight change, hopefully it scans better now.

Many thanks for the insightful comments, the catch, and the stellar rating. All are very much appreciated.

Craig

reply by catch22 on 04-Jul-2018

Hi Craig, what about the following:

Yet, we strive for enlightenment, but with a catch---

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

OK, sold -- many thanks :)

reply by catch22 on 04-Jul-2018

Great! Glad to help. Lol

Comment from strandregs

Excellent

Hi Craig
Your efforts are commendable
Philosophising is a great tricky pastime.
I think you pulled it off,
A monadnok sounds a lot like a single monk, but, that's me.
second stanza after all I have learned
I think a (-) is in order, cause it broke my reading.
Grammar is a word I know, but not a lot more.
a thought came to me while reading
Hardships are what makes us grow spiritually.
That's why our orthodox have to get up to pray at sunrise,
whether it's 4 AM and go praying at sunset even at 10PM
and that is what I learned from Gordief and Ospensky.
who wrote about the eastern philosophy.
or in English
What doesn't kill you makes you stronger.
well, not exactly :-))Z.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

A single monk - is there any other kind? (hehe I know what you mean).

Thanks for the informative and kind comments.

Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Exceptional

Oh a Braun. Nice!

You know what's really neat is to see judgement written the way I learned it. It was driven out of me on this site as a typo which of course I knew it wasn't.

I very much enjoyed you taking us to Tibet, it's a great place to learn about levitation and apparently monadnocking too.

A superb poem of great depth and written in a lovely anapestic metre.

Much enjoyed. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Of all the metres, I think antiseptic is the most clean.

Also, we have to stick up for our correct spellings, and not let them be coloUred by the latest flavoUr of the month.

Thanks for the fantastic and generous review, Gloria. Glad you like it :)

Cheers,
Craig

Comment from GeeGeeRose

Good

This is so great! My motto is "I regret nothing because it all made me who I am today" and this piece basically says that but in a much more poetic way. I did not give it a five because there were parts a had to reread in order to read it to the right time and rhyme. You noted that this poem just came to you after reading a quote and your word of the day. I write the same way. I do not sit down and say "I think I will write about this topic" its more that I hear or see or feel something and it all just comes together so I also struggle with an easy flow of rhyme. I admire that you challenge yourself daily with the word of the day. What a fun and creative idea!

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 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Thank you.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I like how you turned that quote into a poem of your own, Craig. Good job. Your words flow smoothly with great rhymes. Your message comes through loud & clear, too. I can see here the definition of monadnock means as you related with the 'mona'
prefix meaning one. I believe judgement & ageing are UK spellings. right?

Good job & thanks for sharing. You are doing a great job with your project. Jan

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 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Thanks so much for the kind words and encouragement, Jan. Yes, those are the British spellings - thanks for pointing that out, I've added a note now. Much appreciated - Craig