The Drifter
A mystery15 total reviews
Comment from royowen
This is and story in a poem Pam, I like the imaginative storyline, and the character. You have a flare for the fictional, which suggests a fertile imagination. This contains your usual meter and rhyming skills, plus you understand story writing, much like chess, beginning, important middle, and end game. Well done, good "game", blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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This is and story in a poem Pam, I like the imaginative storyline, and the character. You have a flare for the fictional, which suggests a fertile imagination. This contains your usual meter and rhyming skills, plus you understand story writing, much like chess, beginning, important middle, and end game. Well done, good "game", blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Thank you Roy for your kind words and excellent review
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Most welcome
Comment from fm wright
An intense story in poetic form. It sounds very much like it could be stretched out into prose form and made even into a crime novel. It is interesting that you never use periods at the end of obvious sentences. To me, this makes one sentence run into the next and has caused a little confusion.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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An intense story in poetic form. It sounds very much like it could be stretched out into prose form and made even into a crime novel. It is interesting that you never use periods at the end of obvious sentences. To me, this makes one sentence run into the next and has caused a little confusion.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hmmm. I get it both ways. Some people used to complain about capitals and punctuation. So I took them out. I will reconsider. It is partly the way FS displays things. Thank you for your fine review
Comment from jenintorre
Hi Pam.
I liked the beginning and the end of this poem and loved the title and illustration however I found the middle a bit disjointed. That's probably just me though. All the best jen.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hi Pam.
I liked the beginning and the end of this poem and loved the title and illustration however I found the middle a bit disjointed. That's probably just me though. All the best jen.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Thank you Jen for your constructive review. I had more in the middle but it got so long. Take care
Comment from Artasylum
I love when people take poetic license... so you are forgiven for he and she... Wow... what a great story here. He met his match and somehow he lucked out... what a fun read this was... scary. yours, diana
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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I love when people take poetic license... so you are forgiven for he and she... Wow... what a great story here. He met his match and somehow he lucked out... what a fun read this was... scary. yours, diana
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Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hi Diana. I have missed you. I hope all is well. Thank you for the great review
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Hey kiddo... I've been on a trip... thanks so much for missing me... you made me smile. yours, diana
Comment from Shanbreen
I don't think length should be a problem as long as it moves the story line (in this case) forward -- yours does that. It's a well rhyming beautifully written poem. I would have liked to see a better title, though.
PS: I'm glad he didn't kill her -- even if it's only a fiction. =)
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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I don't think length should be a problem as long as it moves the story line (in this case) forward -- yours does that. It's a well rhyming beautifully written poem. I would have liked to see a better title, though.
PS: I'm glad he didn't kill her -- even if it's only a fiction. =)
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Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hi Shanbreen. Do you have a suggestion for a better title? I appreciate your thoughts. I thought of just Cowboy. But I thought that implied Westerns. I thought about Serial Killer but it spoils the surprise. I thought about The Encounter. Thank you for the great review