The French Letter
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Comment from estory
The mystery goes off in another direction here as you reveal that Helen has a Pakistani mother and a sister, whom something has happened to. A bit of a surprise turn here. I wasn't really aware that she is that much younger than Charles. He seems to be keeping his distance though, wary of her, even as he is attracted to her looks and personality, her charming method of disarming him and romancing him. estory
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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The mystery goes off in another direction here as you reveal that Helen has a Pakistani mother and a sister, whom something has happened to. A bit of a surprise turn here. I wasn't really aware that she is that much younger than Charles. He seems to be keeping his distance though, wary of her, even as he is attracted to her looks and personality, her charming method of disarming him and romancing him. estory
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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There?s quite a bit more to Helen than there may have seemed to be at first sight, but still not sure if Charles would be wise to trust her.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
> truly an enjoyable and entertaining read.
> I see Charles had to have some restraints on his they do's and morals, as Helen seemed to make romantic advances and Charles was headstrong and even near the bed set no nearer to her as she bounced on the bed.
> I like how you incorporated the picture of the envelope of the address that was very helpful. And added a little bit about this technique.
> Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alx
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Cheers, Tony;
> truly an enjoyable and entertaining read.
> I see Charles had to have some restraints on his they do's and morals, as Helen seemed to make romantic advances and Charles was headstrong and even near the bed set no nearer to her as she bounced on the bed.
> I like how you incorporated the picture of the envelope of the address that was very helpful. And added a little bit about this technique.
> Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Thanks very much for another six-star review, Alex, and for your comments about the chapter. Much appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
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You're very welcome, Tony, and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alx
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Best wishes also do you and your family, Tony and take care and have a good one and you're very welcome my friend.
Alx
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an excellent chapter, Tony. Dialogue, scene setting, and word choices are enjoyable to the reader. Your writing is interesting, has an easy flow and nice pace. Marilyn
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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This is an excellent chapter, Tony. Dialogue, scene setting, and word choices are enjoyable to the reader. Your writing is interesting, has an easy flow and nice pace. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Many thanks for your review of Chapter 10, Marilyn, and for the positive comments. Much appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Tony. This book is really enabling you to sshow off your talents for writing prose. It is very well written. Your choice of strong verbs and great images propel the plot forward at an excellent pace, like here for instance:
"I walked across and opened the French windows to a cool night breeze. The lights of the city shimmered in the moonlight, and somewhere in the distance a church clock struck ten. I carried a cane chair out onto the balcony, to enjoy the solitude and tranquillity as I continued to turn things over in my mind."
And you have left us hanging at a very good spot to hold our interest. Bravo, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Hi, Tony. This book is really enabling you to sshow off your talents for writing prose. It is very well written. Your choice of strong verbs and great images propel the plot forward at an excellent pace, like here for instance:
"I walked across and opened the French windows to a cool night breeze. The lights of the city shimmered in the moonlight, and somewhere in the distance a church clock struck ten. I carried a cane chair out onto the balcony, to enjoy the solitude and tranquillity as I continued to turn things over in my mind."
And you have left us hanging at a very good spot to hold our interest. Bravo, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Many thanks for your review of Chapter 10, Bob, and for the positive comments about use of strong verbs and imagery. Much appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
Congratulations on your placing in Book of the Month.
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Thaanks...Tony. Bob
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Thaanks...Tony. Bob
Comment from kiwijenny
I love this story. I love that Helen is opening up and that the mystery of the envelope is drawing us , readers and protagonists alike deeper into a mystery. I am intrigued. And read to the end. Can't wait for meor. Thanks..I'm reading a novelWAHOO
God bless
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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I love this story. I love that Helen is opening up and that the mystery of the envelope is drawing us , readers and protagonists alike deeper into a mystery. I am intrigued. And read to the end. Can't wait for meor. Thanks..I'm reading a novelWAHOO
God bless
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Loved your enthusiastic response and six stars, Jenny. Thank you so much! Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Helen has rich history. I can't wait to see how this plays out. I am so glad Charles is a gentleman. I like that quality. You are doing a great job of writing.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Helen has rich history. I can't wait to see how this plays out. I am so glad Charles is a gentleman. I like that quality. You are doing a great job of writing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Loved your comments about Charles, and the six stars, Barbara. Thank you so much! Tony
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Tony, this is another wonderful chapter. I'm really taken with the story, and I still wonder where all this might be going. And now a new and totally surprising side to Helen. I still think, she hiding something, though, but we'll see. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Wow, Tony, this is another wonderful chapter. I'm really taken with the story, and I still wonder where all this might be going. And now a new and totally surprising side to Helen. I still think, she hiding something, though, but we'll see. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Loved your enthusiastic response and six stars, Ulla. Thank you so much! Yes, I think we may have quite a bit more to learn about Helen as the story progresses! All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. A true gentleman never takes advantage of any lady when she is not all herself. New information and more background of her childhood and growing years.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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A very well-written chapter. A true gentleman never takes advantage of any lady when she is not all herself. New information and more background of her childhood and growing years.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Very many thanks for your review and comments, Sandra. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from damommy
Interesting information about Kalash. I'd never heard of it before.
I'm glad to see Charles is having doubts about Helen, too. Maybe it will save a lot of trouble and heartache.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Interesting information about Kalash. I'd never heard of it before.
I'm glad to see Charles is having doubts about Helen, too. Maybe it will save a lot of trouble and heartache.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Yvonne. I first read of the Kalash people in the famous Rudyard Kipling story "The Man Who Would Be King".
Comment from giraffmang
A lot more to the mysterious Helen that meets the eye it seems, and what of Miss Gaudin, and her hard to find parents? What indeed...
The Kalash are a minority indigenous group who have lived in the northern part of Pakistan for thousands of years. The women are extraordinarily beautiful." - opening speech marks needed here I think.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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A lot more to the mysterious Helen that meets the eye it seems, and what of Miss Gaudin, and her hard to find parents? What indeed...
The Kalash are a minority indigenous group who have lived in the northern part of Pakistan for thousands of years. The women are extraordinarily beautiful." - opening speech marks needed here I think.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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The art will be in weaving these two parallel stories together successfully. Thanks for picking up the couple of errors in this chapter - now fixed. Congratulations on your placing in Story of the Month. All the best, Tony