Jellybean Love
Falling in love at age fifty? Possible?12 total reviews
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. I think you took this prompt and hit it out of the park. I enjoyed reading this straight through. I noticed a couple of grammar issues: 1) I don't think "sea" needs to be capitalized in "the sea of humanity." 2) In the paragraph about Katy, there are some pronoun issues and happy is spelled with brackets. I think, however, you should do well in the contest. Good luck with this entry!
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you for sharing. I think you took this prompt and hit it out of the park. I enjoyed reading this straight through. I noticed a couple of grammar issues: 1) I don't think "sea" needs to be capitalized in "the sea of humanity." 2) In the paragraph about Katy, there are some pronoun issues and happy is spelled with brackets. I think, however, you should do well in the contest. Good luck with this entry!
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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I appreciate VERY much your detailed edit--now corrected. I have vision impairment and it takes me longer to edit than write a story. Many thanks.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What a wonderful story about love. Two very lonely people finally finding happiness in mid life and finally giving a small girl a mother and making a family for her. Well done
Ingrid. Nice to see you posting again. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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What a wonderful story about love. Two very lonely people finally finding happiness in mid life and finally giving a small girl a mother and making a family for her. Well done
Ingrid. Nice to see you posting again. Nancy:)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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You are an extremely kind woman, and I thank you for the stars and your continued support.