Comment from Tina Crute

Excellent

You're going to make me use all my stars! How in the heck do you write like this?
I love the line about the heart being merely a prosthesis. That will be in my head for awhile. Dramatic and true, it seems to be in our world!
My only suggestion, if I may be so bold, is to recommend a stronger indication that we do have it in us to shine, not "maybe." That's just what I would like to believe:)
I love your work.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

I'd like to believe that too, Tina. Unfortunately, I don't see much supporting evidence :) Thanks so much for the lovely comments, I really appreciate them. Craig

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

You gave the old master a run for his money with this one. The cadence is true to "The Raven." I can only imagine how hard you must have worked on this, but then again, maybe it comes naturally for you. Either way, outstanding. Lots to ponder here. Very thought provoking.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018

Thanks so much for the wonderful comments, and the delightful stars. I'm really very grateful! I don't usually spend a lot of time on a poem, but this one took me longer than usual. It was my first try with Poe's meter, and I didn't find it all that easy. Makes me have even more respect for him. Many thanks, once again :) Craig

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

I am not as easily moved as this; I really am not, at least not so much these past weeks, but Craig, you have blown my mind tonight.This has to be one of the most fabulous poems (bar none) that I have ever had the privilege of reviewing. I won't even comment on any of the incredibly beautiful poetic devices used -- it's beyond my ken to imagine how this poem is not at the top of page one, there to stay for all time.
Wow, man, POM. (Two in one day that I would vote for- the other is Gloria's,"Owner of the Night".)

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018

Wow, Dawn... I am truly floored by the lovely comments. I might frame them and put them on the wall to inspire me when I'm struggling to find a word, or get the meter right. Thanks so much for the delightful rating, and the wonderful compliment, it's honestly made my day :) Craig

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a super job, Craig, with the poem for earthshine. The presentation is great--the color scheme, the picture, the internal rhyme/the end rhyme. You did great expressing your thoughts/feelings, too. This read smoothly with much for readers to ponder. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thanks very much for the lovely comments, Jan. Most grateful :) Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Exceptional

A stunning commentary, Craig! Yes, I would be of the group that believes in that well designed universe. I like how you start with the creation of the planets and have us stop and reflect on reflecting light and the need for humankind to also be better at reflecting the Light.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thanks very much for the great comments and delightful rating, Helen. I'm most grateful for both :) Craig

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Earthshine is a great word..used by a handful... Neil Armstrong, Buz Aldrin spring to mind.
Just more primates hurling feces or ...did you mean mere... for more?
I prefer In the Beginning God created the heaven and the earth ..to the fecal matter
God bless

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Regarding "mere" or "more", both work, I think. But I went for "more", because other primates have been observed doing that, literally. For the most part, humans do it in a figurative sense; still we are an addition to the clan.

I have been known to incorporate the creation myth in my poems, once or twice :)

Many thanks, Jenny.

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

this is so great, alliteration, internal rhyme and a rhyme or repeat thing going on at the end of lines. and the message is outstanding, I love to wax scientific about this stuff too. but, there's always some Buzz-Kill that will ask "so what happened before that?" okay, it's usually me. great write, CD...............meeshu

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

To which a great many people would respond, "There was no before."

Many thanks for the terrific comments, Meeshu. They are received with much gratefulness.

Craig

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

I read this yesterday and thought it superb. It has lost none of its shine this morning. No hesitation here in adding six luminous stars to the moonshine array! I particularly enjoyed the way you pulled it all together with your philosophical ending.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Hi Tony,

Thank you so much for the wonderfully kind and generous comments. I spent what was, for me, quite a long time going over this one trying to get it the way I wanted it, so I'm really chuffed you think the effort paid off :)

Most grateful, Craig

Comment from Joan E.

Exceptional

Thank you again for sharing your love of words in both your poem and your notes. I am glad you were inspired by Poe and created the captivating presentation as well. I admired your social commentary along with the internal rhymes and meter. Your discussion of "evil deeds" and use of "prostheses" is memorable. Here's to "kindness"! A tour de force!! - Joan

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thank you so much, Joan, for the delightful comments, and the wonderful rating. I'm truly humbled and very grateful for them. Craig

reply by Joan E. on 07-Oct-2018

Enjoy the remains of Sunday and sweet dreams--may the stars dance in your head! -Joan

Comment from Lori Cornetti

Exceptional

Wonderful! I love the cadence of this poem! It almost sounds musical to read it. Paints a picture as well with a very thought provoking message. Excellent work CD.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

I'm humbled by your lovely, kind comments, Lori. Thanks so much for them, and for the delightful rating. Craig