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Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
> Why I like your writing! Why, because you deal with the characters ideals and mannerisms throughout your writing. You describe every movement to the point of relating to the context help one understand the motive. And you do it so well.
> Like where thhey were choosing to go up the two flights of stairs in you reminded your audience that Charles Legg hasn't healed as well.
> You also brought up the would be conduct concussion that Helen may have had.
>And you've led me to believe the Charles onto Jeanne, who maybe is in with the Mafia?
>With the Mafia on their tail and searching for those documents is not long before the action should come to a head.
> Thanks for sharing, Tony inferred teaching me the ends and outs of writing. As I followed your writing for three stories now. In all of them have been superb.
> Take care and have a good one especially because you deserve it.
Alx
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Cheers, Tony;
> Why I like your writing! Why, because you deal with the characters ideals and mannerisms throughout your writing. You describe every movement to the point of relating to the context help one understand the motive. And you do it so well.
> Like where thhey were choosing to go up the two flights of stairs in you reminded your audience that Charles Legg hasn't healed as well.
> You also brought up the would be conduct concussion that Helen may have had.
>And you've led me to believe the Charles onto Jeanne, who maybe is in with the Mafia?
>With the Mafia on their tail and searching for those documents is not long before the action should come to a head.
> Thanks for sharing, Tony inferred teaching me the ends and outs of writing. As I followed your writing for three stories now. In all of them have been superb.
> Take care and have a good one especially because you deserve it.
Alx
Comment Written 02-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Alex. I really appreciate your very kind comments and interest in my story. Best wishes to you and your family. Tony.
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You're very welcome, Tony.
Alx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I do not trust Madame Duran. I am pretty sure that I am not supposed to. I am also wondering what is in that diary that Madame Durand doesn't want to be made public. I can't wait for the answers. This is a good read.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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I do not trust Madame Duran. I am pretty sure that I am not supposed to. I am also wondering what is in that diary that Madame Durand doesn't want to be made public. I can't wait for the answers. This is a good read.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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It does begin to look as if Mme Durand is a nasty bit of work. I?ve had my suspicions about her for some time. It looks as though Charles has, too.
Comment from Spitfire
Not all children share their parents' enthusiasm for healthy eating.
His mother, perhaps, less so.
The above sentences, especially the first one, should be deleted in my opinion. It seems like a subject shift that doesn't belong.
"I picked it up and jammed it up the Citroen's exhaust pipe."
I try to avoid repetition of a word in one sentence. You use "up" twice.
Other than that the danger increases with the disappearance of Jeanne.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Not all children share their parents' enthusiasm for healthy eating.
His mother, perhaps, less so.
The above sentences, especially the first one, should be deleted in my opinion. It seems like a subject shift that doesn't belong.
"I picked it up and jammed it up the Citroen's exhaust pipe."
I try to avoid repetition of a word in one sentence. You use "up" twice.
Other than that the danger increases with the disappearance of Jeanne.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Shari. I should have picked that up myself. Fixed now. I may rewrite the bit about the discarded apple, too. I appreciate your input.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Tony. This chapter moves right along and keeps a sense of whimsy throughout with the teasing back and forth between Charles and Helen, especially in relation to the comic book characters. I like the clever use of the child's discarded apple as a getaway ploy, Charles' ear to the door of the apartment, and Jeanne's annoyance at Charles in the car. I did look up "done a bunk" which is a term unknown to me--stated as meaning "boring." Is that what it is supposed to mean here? We're left with a cliffhanger of Madame Durand possibly missing. Very well written. Marilyn
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Hi Tony. This chapter moves right along and keeps a sense of whimsy throughout with the teasing back and forth between Charles and Helen, especially in relation to the comic book characters. I like the clever use of the child's discarded apple as a getaway ploy, Charles' ear to the door of the apartment, and Jeanne's annoyance at Charles in the car. I did look up "done a bunk" which is a term unknown to me--stated as meaning "boring." Is that what it is supposed to mean here? We're left with a cliffhanger of Madame Durand possibly missing. Very well written. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Hi Marilyn. Thanks for the review and comments. ?Done a bunk? must just be a UK expression. It means to suddenly leave without telling anyone.
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Oh. That makes more sense. Googling it gave the explanation as "boring."
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your chapter, Tony. It flowed well and added much needed info to the storyline. The 2 women are more involved than what we realized at the beginning. You have added some good possibilities for more action/suspense in your story. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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I enjoyed your chapter, Tony. It flowed well and added much needed info to the storyline. The 2 women are more involved than what we realized at the beginning. You have added some good possibilities for more action/suspense in your story. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thanks for your review and comments, Jan. Appreciated. Tony.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, this is another fine chapter and it's very well paced. A few surprises and what will they bring?
'she gave me a look with more implied meaning than a well-constructed haiku.'
Well I liked that, but where is the nature? Only kidding. Can't wait to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Hi Tony, this is another fine chapter and it's very well paced. A few surprises and what will they bring?
'she gave me a look with more implied meaning than a well-constructed haiku.'
Well I liked that, but where is the nature? Only kidding. Can't wait to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thanks for your review and comments, Ulla. Appreciated. Just goes to show that I don?t know one end of a Haiku from the other! That?s why I tend to avoid them! LOL Tony.
Comment from Lady Jane
'(s)he looked daggers(.)'
'If looks could kill(,)'
I kinda suspected Mme Durrand given your conversations in the last chapter. Yes, WHY would a mafia branch be interested in a civilian's journal? I loved the Batman/Robin exchange. Fun dialogue smothered throughout this wonderful chapter, LOL. Lightbulb/epiphany moment gave me a smile. I like to predict what MAY happen in a book, and I am so glad I was on the right track :) Clean writing with excellent content and flow. This is an extremely well written chapter. I wish I had a six left, dear :) Until next installment...
Janelle
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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'(s)he looked daggers(.)'
'If looks could kill(,)'
I kinda suspected Mme Durrand given your conversations in the last chapter. Yes, WHY would a mafia branch be interested in a civilian's journal? I loved the Batman/Robin exchange. Fun dialogue smothered throughout this wonderful chapter, LOL. Lightbulb/epiphany moment gave me a smile. I like to predict what MAY happen in a book, and I am so glad I was on the right track :) Clean writing with excellent content and flow. This is an extremely well written chapter. I wish I had a six left, dear :) Until next installment...
Janelle
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Janelle, for your review and suggestions. Very much appreciated, as always. Delighted that you thought this episode six-worthy. All the best, Tony
Comment from damommy
So the Madame has done a bunk. Kind of surprising with her supposed injuries. No hint of being followed by the Citroen with the apple in the exhaust. Curious about that darn journal that's causing all the trouble.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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So the Madame has done a bunk. Kind of surprising with her supposed injuries. No hint of being followed by the Citroen with the apple in the exhaust. Curious about that darn journal that's causing all the trouble.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Maybe she won't get far! It could take the bad guys a moment or two to fix that old Citroen - Charles would hope so, anyway. I'm looking forward to finding out what's in that journal, too! All the best, Tony
Comment from estory
There are little moments of humor in this chapter, with the references to Batman and that little incident with the apple the kid discards, shoved up the tailpipe, to lighten the mood of this installment. It ends up being a lively chapter, with lots of chatter, and then that turn at the end when Jeanne disappears. This plot thickens., is she involved with the mafia against Charles and Helen? What is she really up to? Can she be trusted? We have to wait for the next chapter...estory
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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There are little moments of humor in this chapter, with the references to Batman and that little incident with the apple the kid discards, shoved up the tailpipe, to lighten the mood of this installment. It ends up being a lively chapter, with lots of chatter, and then that turn at the end when Jeanne disappears. This plot thickens., is she involved with the mafia against Charles and Helen? What is she really up to? Can she be trusted? We have to wait for the next chapter...estory
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Yes, Mme Durand is beginning to look more suspicious as time goes on. Thanks for your review and comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
We are now at that awkward stage in this sort of thriller where almost anyone could be the villain. I was always useless at spotting the evil doers so on this occasion I thought I would indulge in a little research. On this occasion I wasn't that interested in the result merely to see if a result was possible.
The apple you picked up even with a bite out of it? Stuffed it op the exhaust pipe - brilliant. Excuse but were you aware that the internal diameter of a Citroen light fifteen's exhaust pipe was 32mm? (barely one inch for our US friends) Now if it had been a kiwi fruit then perhaps, but an apple an inch in diameter. Merde! Even William Tell would have turned that challenge down.
It is just so amazing the amount of useless information there is around. You can even buy one for Euros 10.90 or the deluxe model for Euros 11.90. Now that is the better option as the inside diameter is 35mm and a tres petit crab apple might just, especially one with a bite out of it.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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We are now at that awkward stage in this sort of thriller where almost anyone could be the villain. I was always useless at spotting the evil doers so on this occasion I thought I would indulge in a little research. On this occasion I wasn't that interested in the result merely to see if a result was possible.
The apple you picked up even with a bite out of it? Stuffed it op the exhaust pipe - brilliant. Excuse but were you aware that the internal diameter of a Citroen light fifteen's exhaust pipe was 32mm? (barely one inch for our US friends) Now if it had been a kiwi fruit then perhaps, but an apple an inch in diameter. Merde! Even William Tell would have turned that challenge down.
It is just so amazing the amount of useless information there is around. You can even buy one for Euros 10.90 or the deluxe model for Euros 11.90. Now that is the better option as the inside diameter is 35mm and a tres petit crab apple might just, especially one with a bite out of it.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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I suppose that if he had been careful, he could have used the exhaust pipe as a corer, and eaten the apple for his lunch.