Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

This is wonderful, Craig. Chalk up another one for your magic book, calendar, daily inspirational, or whatever you call it.... so fun!! Thanks a bunch for sharing.

Melissa

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 Comment Written 14-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018

I call it "my nemesis" lol

We will be parting company shortly. And, not for the first time, I'll be saying "none too soon."

I'm only half-serious, it's one of those love-hate relationships.

Many thanks, Melissa :)

Craig

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

What an interesting word. I chuckled at your presentation with the Starship Enterprise seeking out new worlds to boldly go where no man (or woman) has gone before. Hee hee.

Well rhymed and timed. Fine work. However, the last two lines of the first stanza do not rhyme, so break the rhyme scheme. Not sure what to suggest except to reexamine those lines and consider revising.

Warmly, rd

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 Comment Written 14-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018

Hi RD,

Thanks for the great comments. Awry is a perfect rhyme with die (at least in these parts), and so I thought the addition of the D didn't mess it up too much. It sounded alright to my ears, but I'll take your comments on board, and might change it if I'm outnumbered lol I might do it anyway, if an alternative springs to mind :) Most grateful, Craig

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018

OK, you convinced me. I changed it. Only took a few seconds :)

reply by rama devi on 14-Dec-2018

Happy to help! Good job! :)

reply by rama devi on 14-Dec-2018

I think you did a good job on the edits!
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Warmly, rd