Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

I really like this verse, Craig. Your poignant and wise meaning really resonates with the reader and leaves us thinking about what we might have built on sinking sand. Thanks for the great verse and good luck.

Melissa

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks for the lovely comments, Melissa. I appreciate the good wishes as well. Cheers, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is a nicely presented Cinquain. Well worded with an image to accompany. Your words make sense with thoughtful composition. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks very much, Marilyn. Glad it made sense to you, and thank you for the kind wishes. Craig

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Craig, I liked this one. It's a great Cinquain poem. Yeah, if a like is built on a mere sand castle, what hope is there really left? His dreams has no foundation. This is great for the contest. Good luck. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks very much for the kind wishes and lovely comments, Ulla. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Exceptional

This is a perfectly written Cinquain, Craig. The theme of course universal that it's best not to build one's hopes too close to a turning tide, but those are becoming more and more difficult to detect, even on something as obvious as the shore of a lake. That is the essence of your work in my opinion. The metaphor most effective.

Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks for the fantastic rating and the thoughtful comments, Gloria. I'm not sure that there's any tide that turns faster than the tide of public opinion. Most grateful to you, as always.

Craig

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

As with all the best poetry, there's a wealth of meaning that the reader can bring to this. I should not be at all surprised if this did well in the contest. That inevitable turning tide always seems to catch us unawares.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks so much for the kind comments, Tony. I appreciate them very much. Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Cinquain poem about building our dreams on the sand is a very big mistake, it will definitely get destroyed by wind and the turn of the tide. The only safe place is on the rock. At least it will last longer.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Very true, Sandra. Most grateful for the kind rating and nice comments. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Scarbrems

Excellent

An excellent poem, Craig. The tide washed away most of my dreams. I know how the poor bugger feels, lol. love the alliteration - shifting sands/turning tides. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Awwww, well, you will go and live on a tiny little island in the middle of the sea! Thanks for the great comments and kind wishes, Emma. Craig

Comment from QC Poet

Excellent

Very nice expressed descriptive and insightful perspective on hopes and dreams washing away, I have had to make a few new ones myself, so it's relatable. Good Luck in the contest if entered and Thank you for Sharing your Gifts and insight.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Yes, I think we've all been through that at some time in our lives. Many thanks for the kind comments, and the good wishes. Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I like how you start with "His hopes" and end with "his dreams" which are like synonyms echoing each other and the middle lines show us what can happen to these in life. Really well done and perfectly illustrated. Best to you in the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019

Thanks so much, Helen, for the lovely review. Most appreciated :) Craig

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

This was a good piece, CD Richards. I love the flow of it and the message in your poem. I think you used the form of the piece to enhance your words. Nice job.

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 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2019

Thanks very much for the kind words, I'm glad you enjoyed :) Craig