A Fly on the Wall
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "A Fly on the Wall"A journal musings and assessments about situations
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Comment from Tedd Turton
It's one of life's mysteries isn't it. Politics, court-cases and even marriages. Our own versions of truth.
Great example here.
As always, wonderful story telling.
Most entertaining.
The very best,
Tedd Turton
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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It's one of life's mysteries isn't it. Politics, court-cases and even marriages. Our own versions of truth.
Great example here.
As always, wonderful story telling.
Most entertaining.
The very best,
Tedd Turton
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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What a lovely and helpful review, Tedd. Thank you for this terrific feedback. xo
Comment from zanya
Lots and lots of lols reading this most interesting item on perception - we forget, of course, most of the time that we view the world through our very own lense not someone elses - well done
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Lots and lots of lols reading this most interesting item on perception - we forget, of course, most of the time that we view the world through our very own lense not someone elses - well done
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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It's so true, Zanya. Thanks for the wonderful review. xo
Comment from Brett Matthew West
So true that perspectives dictate how people see, and what they feel, about every situation they encounter. Well crafted and captures the essence of the different perspective spot on.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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So true that perspectives dictate how people see, and what they feel, about every situation they encounter. Well crafted and captures the essence of the different perspective spot on.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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What a nice review this is, Brett. Thank you for the thought that went into these helpful words. I appreciate it. xo
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL!!! I can well imagine that, the two versions about the same thing and being totally different. Shame they didn't walk up to the waterfall, that would have been a nice little walk. I really enjoyed reading this, well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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LOL!!! I can well imagine that, the two versions about the same thing and being totally different. Shame they didn't walk up to the waterfall, that would have been a nice little walk. I really enjoyed reading this, well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Sandra. I always appreciate your feedback so much. xo
Comment from Coco Jane
Neat two-way view of the camping trip.
You could use this as the basis for a story, alternating between the girl's version and the mother's.
A friend of mine, mother of four, says she detests camping because she has to do all the stuff she does at home--cooking, washing dishes, etc.--without the modern conveniences of a stove and running water and a furnace.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Neat two-way view of the camping trip.
You could use this as the basis for a story, alternating between the girl's version and the mother's.
A friend of mine, mother of four, says she detests camping because she has to do all the stuff she does at home--cooking, washing dishes, etc.--without the modern conveniences of a stove and running water and a furnace.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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My mother used to have a similar lament about weekends at our lake house: twice the work, plus packing and unpacking. My daughter's take on camping is this: Why would I want to work really hard all week long at my job then, on the weekends, pretend I'm homeless?
Anyway, thank you for the very nice review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Haha - Annie Hall was one of my all time favorites and I remember that line well.
You're so right about perceptions. That's why it has to be hard for the police to get a good account of a crime scene from just one witness.
I experienced just one camping excursion. It was just for one night, so it may not count. Anyway, I came home with a tick in my leg. Disgusting! This was another enjoyable read, Rachelle. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Haha - Annie Hall was one of my all time favorites and I remember that line well.
You're so right about perceptions. That's why it has to be hard for the police to get a good account of a crime scene from just one witness.
I experienced just one camping excursion. It was just for one night, so it may not count. Anyway, I came home with a tick in my leg. Disgusting! This was another enjoyable read, Rachelle. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Yes, police have to be good at assessing not only what was said by a witness but whether or not s/he seems reliable. I give them so much credit!
Ugh! A tick??!! That would be enough to make me never camp again, too! (I've had only one camping experience, too. It cured me for the remainder of my life.)
Thanks for the nice review. xo
Comment from karenina
Good write! I had to smile as I compared and contrasted the two accounts. Now and then my adult children and I will stumble on a family memory...inevitably we three end up verbally diminishing because our perspectives and perceptions are so diverse! Makes you wonder how eye witness testimony ever holds up in court!---Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Good write! I had to smile as I compared and contrasted the two accounts. Now and then my adult children and I will stumble on a family memory...inevitably we three end up verbally diminishing because our perspectives and perceptions are so diverse! Makes you wonder how eye witness testimony ever holds up in court!---Karenina
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Doesn't it, though, Karenina!! I totally hear what you're saying!
Thanks for the very nice review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love the title, and the artwork, to go with it. The premise of musings, on the differences in perspective, was a good one. My favorite part is the Annie Hall lines from the wife and the husband, on the subject of too little, or too much sex, between them. I also liked the reference to the movie Vantage Point, where the perspectives of five people, of the same event, play out. The descriptions of the 15-year-old piano student, and her mom, of the same camping excursion, was interesting, but my suggestion is that I would shorten this part of the post, if I were the writer, because I got the gist of it right away. I would take this with a grain or two of salt because this is, just one reviewer's opinion. I mean no offense. Overall, I liked the examples used, and the theme of the story. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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I love the title, and the artwork, to go with it. The premise of musings, on the differences in perspective, was a good one. My favorite part is the Annie Hall lines from the wife and the husband, on the subject of too little, or too much sex, between them. I also liked the reference to the movie Vantage Point, where the perspectives of five people, of the same event, play out. The descriptions of the 15-year-old piano student, and her mom, of the same camping excursion, was interesting, but my suggestion is that I would shorten this part of the post, if I were the writer, because I got the gist of it right away. I would take this with a grain or two of salt because this is, just one reviewer's opinion. I mean no offense. Overall, I liked the examples used, and the theme of the story. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Jesse. I never take offense when a reviewer offers suggestions because I consider it an act of professional assistance. Feedback is SO important, and I give serious consider to what the other members on FanStory tell me because they're writers, too. they read a lot, so they know what 'works.' Please always tell me how you feel something I've written could improve.
And thanks for this well-thought-out review, too. I loved it.
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Thanks. I appreciate your gracious response to my suggestion. I'm glad you loved my review. I take reviewing seriously, so feedback is important to me. Nice to meet you, Rachelle.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Mastery
Yeah, Rach. These are good examples of your point about perception. I think positive and negative attitudes have a lot to do with a person's perception also. Don't you? Bless you, good write a as usual. Bob
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Yeah, Rach. These are good examples of your point about perception. I think positive and negative attitudes have a lot to do with a person's perception also. Don't you? Bless you, good write a as usual. Bob
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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I do, definitely, but I also want it on the record that my friend is ordinarily as positive as her daughter (That 'you plant corn, you get corn' thing...) but she spent the first 30+ years of her life as a Texan, so she never really acclimated to these Upstate NY temps (and at that point, I think they'd lived here only six years.) I think the combination of being cold and sleep-deprived and then worried about the increasing acrimony and drunkenness from two sites over was just more than the poor woman could take. Pushed her RIGHT over the edge, I'm afraid. She got the BEST laugh out of this journal entry the next week when I sent it to her.
Anyway, thank you for your kind review. You know how much I always appreciate it when you weigh in on my work. xo
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Always a pleasure to read your work, Rach. :) Bob
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Always a pleasure to read your work, Rach. :) Bob
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No wonder I adore you!! xo
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LOL...And I, you, dear heart. X Bob
Comment from Michele Harber
Hi FSBFF. I like the "he said/she said" (or, in this case, "she said/she said") aspect of your story. It gives it a nice humorous touch, and makes it more interesting than had you just described a camping trip from one perspective. Of course I have one minor proofing note. (Would it be me if I didn't?) You said "... but it wouldn't been a lot nicer if it hadn't been thirty degrees out," when you meant to say "would've been." I just reviewed something by Nancy E. Davis and found a typo (saying "diner" more than once when she actually meant "dinner") and forgot to correct it. Proofing is so much a part of me that I actually feel guilty for not having mentioned it, but it would be tacky to send her a separate note just for that. I'm hoping somebody points it out. (Delivery for Ms. Anal Compulsive!")
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Hi FSBFF. I like the "he said/she said" (or, in this case, "she said/she said") aspect of your story. It gives it a nice humorous touch, and makes it more interesting than had you just described a camping trip from one perspective. Of course I have one minor proofing note. (Would it be me if I didn't?) You said "... but it wouldn't been a lot nicer if it hadn't been thirty degrees out," when you meant to say "would've been." I just reviewed something by Nancy E. Davis and found a typo (saying "diner" more than once when she actually meant "dinner") and forgot to correct it. Proofing is so much a part of me that I actually feel guilty for not having mentioned it, but it would be tacky to send her a separate note just for that. I'm hoping somebody points it out. (Delivery for Ms. Anal Compulsive!")
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Yes, thank you - another friend caught that and reported it, as well. I went in and edited, but now I'm worried that I didn't hit 'Save' or something. So I'll check it again. But you know I always appreciate these eagle-eye catches you make. Hopefully, the day will come when I post something correctly the first time and save you the hassle!! But until then, thank you!! xo
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Are you kidding?? If I couldn't proof, I'd feel useless. It was my stock in trade at my previous job. I'm just glad I can help - especially my FSBFF.
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xo
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XO right back atcha.