Bright Hummingbird
In this colourful mobile precision of delight.17 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
I love this. Your delightful flow and easily understood verse is phenomenally written without the letter "a". So well done. Good luck in the contest!!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I love this. Your delightful flow and easily understood verse is phenomenally written without the letter "a". So well done. Good luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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It sure was a challenge to keep thinking up words with no 'a'.
Thanks for your review and good wishes.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You enjoy watching bright hummingbirds and their colours, movements, activities are so lovely, colourful that your heart and mind sing; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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You enjoy watching bright hummingbirds and their colours, movements, activities are so lovely, colourful that your heart and mind sing; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have never seem a humming bird in real life, and you brought the scene to me here with such delightful words, such a colourful vision, your meter is spasmodic, with frequent rhyming and the sentiments full of joy, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I have never seem a humming bird in real life, and you brought the scene to me here with such delightful words, such a colourful vision, your meter is spasmodic, with frequent rhyming and the sentiments full of joy, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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You would love them! They are so jewel-like. I tried to capture the feeling of it flitting about then hovering sometimes.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow!
You've written this entire poem on the diminutive, colorful hummingbird without using a single "a".
Now THAT'S impressive, Lisa.
Great work and best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Wow!
You've written this entire poem on the diminutive, colorful hummingbird without using a single "a".
Now THAT'S impressive, Lisa.
Great work and best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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It was rather a challenge! I had to really work my brain to use words without the common 'a'. Luckily English has a large vocabulary.
I hope I captured the spirit of the hummingbird.
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You did good!
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Thanks Dean... squeaked in.
Comment from kahpot
Yes they are gorgeous to watch and observe, I am amazed you compiled this beautiful poem without the letter "A" quite an accomplishment, wonderful artwork and an excellent poem, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Yes they are gorgeous to watch and observe, I am amazed you compiled this beautiful poem without the letter "A" quite an accomplishment, wonderful artwork and an excellent poem, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I was amazed too! I had to rack my brains for suitable words; it was a fair degree of mental agility. Thanks so much for your review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This descriptive poem has some fascinating, spot-on observations. Although once in a while the rhyme feels a little forced, I loved such phrases as "your colours molten in the sun" which is definitely how they look in such an iridescent sheen in sunshine, and also "pretty precision" which is a great alliterative phrase to describe them. Hope you do well in the contest.
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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This descriptive poem has some fascinating, spot-on observations. Although once in a while the rhyme feels a little forced, I loved such phrases as "your colours molten in the sun" which is definitely how they look in such an iridescent sheen in sunshine, and also "pretty precision" which is a great alliterative phrase to describe them. Hope you do well in the contest.
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Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Haha... no wonder the rhymes were forced! It was so tricky thinking of words without an 'a'. Thanks for your great review.
Comment from Gloria ....
I am impressed you wrote such a detailed and amazing poem about the cute little hummingbird without getting in a single letter A.
Excellent poem and you are so right how adorable they are.
Much luck to you in the booth.
Gloria
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I am impressed you wrote such a detailed and amazing poem about the cute little hummingbird without getting in a single letter A.
Excellent poem and you are so right how adorable they are.
Much luck to you in the booth.
Gloria
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Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I amaze myself! It was very tricky.
I only saw a few hummingbirds when I was visiting but they were utterly gorgeous.