Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Falling Jewels"Musings of an old man -2020
37 total reviews
Comment from lauralumummu
Very lovely, in august, we have quite a few falling stars so we sit out and look for them and make a wish or a prayer. Well written and the picture is fascinating. All the best, Laura.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Very lovely, in august, we have quite a few falling stars so we sit out and look for them and make a wish or a prayer. Well written and the picture is fascinating. All the best, Laura.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Laura, I am very grateful for your review and comments, thank you!
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This poem shines and sparkles! I didn't know anything about the structure of syllables and rhyming when I first read it - I just read it, cold. Then I saw the explanation provided, which is rather fascinating, and the poet has successfully conformed to the requirements of the Candlelight Poetry. I love the many verbs used here, the many nouns related to jewels and the sharp contrast with the darkness of stars that die. The photo is also a perfect choice for this poem!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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This poem shines and sparkles! I didn't know anything about the structure of syllables and rhyming when I first read it - I just read it, cold. Then I saw the explanation provided, which is rather fascinating, and the poet has successfully conformed to the requirements of the Candlelight Poetry. I love the many verbs used here, the many nouns related to jewels and the sharp contrast with the darkness of stars that die. The photo is also a perfect choice for this poem!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Mary Kay, I am very grateful for your review and comments, thank you! I am most humbled by your six-star review!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a gorgeous poem. The jewels which fell from the sky are very rich in color. When the star falls, life ends, they appear dark. Our life is somewhat like that; we are dark, too, when our life ends.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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What a gorgeous poem. The jewels which fell from the sky are very rich in color. When the star falls, life ends, they appear dark. Our life is somewhat like that; we are dark, too, when our life ends.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Rosemary, thank you for kind words, Merry Christmas!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello JLR, well written words with a good message all contained in this Candlelight poem. Lovely form and in spite of the restrictions of this form you have not comprised your words in any way - well done. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hello JLR, well written words with a good message all contained in this Candlelight poem. Lovely form and in spite of the restrictions of this form you have not comprised your words in any way - well done. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Dorothy, thank you for your review and kind validation.
Comment from dragonpoet
This uses the brightest gems as a metaphor for stars and moon. It tells of the birth and death of stars. It describes a starry night well.
Nice potlatch entry.
Keep writing
Happy Holidays.
dp
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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This uses the brightest gems as a metaphor for stars and moon. It tells of the birth and death of stars. It describes a starry night well.
Nice potlatch entry.
Keep writing
Happy Holidays.
dp
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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DP thank you very much!
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You're very welcome, JLR
dp
Comment from lyenochka
What a great job you did with this candlelight structure! And I love the theme of the stars likened to precious stones that are gleaming and the internal rhyme you added!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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What a great job you did with this candlelight structure! And I love the theme of the stars likened to precious stones that are gleaming and the internal rhyme you added!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Falling Jewels", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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"Falling Jewels", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Thank you dear reader!
Comment from RShipp
What a unique way to see the stars- a jeweled sky. I like that.
What a difficult rhyme scheme to have to have to follow.
The fallen star, if you find one, if far duller than the dullest of beads. We find a meteorite in our field: heavy and lusterless.
I did see it having the value of a jewel - to me. But pretty and glisten-y... it was not.
I enjoyed.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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What a unique way to see the stars- a jeweled sky. I like that.
What a difficult rhyme scheme to have to have to follow.
The fallen star, if you find one, if far duller than the dullest of beads. We find a meteorite in our field: heavy and lusterless.
I did see it having the value of a jewel - to me. But pretty and glisten-y... it was not.
I enjoyed.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my work, this was a unique but ultimately enjoyable poetic style wot work up.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a lovely example of a Candlelight Poem.
You have done a great job of meeting the Potlatch Poetry challenge.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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I think this is a lovely example of a Candlelight Poem.
You have done a great job of meeting the Potlatch Poetry challenge.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Sharon, thank you. At first, I was concerned this style would be more daunting. In in the end, I found it pleasing.
Comment from rspoet
Hello JLR,
You've written and excellent poem for the candlelight of the stars
with excellent imagery.
Though candles may sputter when they near their end,
stars often explode into a dramatic super nova.
Meteors also go out in a blaze of glory.
Excellent photograph and poem match
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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Hello JLR,
You've written and excellent poem for the candlelight of the stars
with excellent imagery.
Though candles may sputter when they near their end,
stars often explode into a dramatic super nova.
Meteors also go out in a blaze of glory.
Excellent photograph and poem match
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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Robert, thank you for your review and comments.