Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Winnowing Winter Winds"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem with excellent repeating refrains and a good dose of alliteration without being overly done it abused. The reader can feel the winter winds.
Just to clear up something; did you mean willowing or winnowing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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A very well-written rhyming poem with excellent repeating refrains and a good dose of alliteration without being overly done it abused. The reader can feel the winter winds.
Just to clear up something; did you mean willowing or winnowing.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Sandra while in farmng parlance winnowing is a term used, "as wind blows the chafe from the grain." I am using it in a literary sense as in,"the winter wind winnowing its way through the grass"
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Okay, I understand I was just confused when I notice you mention willowing in your author notes.
Comment from susand3022
Hi JLR, I liked your poem, I have to admit to being a bit confused at first as to your rhyme scheme until I got to the bottom and read your notes. Is this something you made up or is it a specific type of poem? I've never seen one like it, I don't think. Then again, I've learned so many new forms here I'm beginning to lose count! :)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Hi JLR, I liked your poem, I have to admit to being a bit confused at first as to your rhyme scheme until I got to the bottom and read your notes. Is this something you made up or is it a specific type of poem? I've never seen one like it, I don't think. Then again, I've learned so many new forms here I'm beginning to lose count! :)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Susan I made this poetic form up with the refrain being used as the beginning to anchor the stanza's in rhythmic meter
Comment from June Sargent
I hope this happens before long. I long to see the beauty of spring return as winter is slowly ushered out by winnowing winds. Lovely and lyrical piece.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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I hope this happens before long. I long to see the beauty of spring return as winter is slowly ushered out by winnowing winds. Lovely and lyrical piece.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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June, we all yearn for the warmth of sun cast over our shoulder as we see the plant's flowering and trees exploding in greenery.
Comment from lyenochka
I like the sounds of your poem and all the fun alliteration. I also like how you show us that the trees breathe and drink in the water. The rhymes are evident but this unique format and irregular meter seems freer than most set rhyming forms.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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I like the sounds of your poem and all the fun alliteration. I also like how you show us that the trees breathe and drink in the water. The rhymes are evident but this unique format and irregular meter seems freer than most set rhyming forms.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Thank you, I believe we all yearn for the warmth of sun cast over our shoulder as we see the plant's flowering and trees exploding in greenery.
Comment from Frank Jauregui
I could almost feel the winnowing winter wind relax its grasp, as the spring took hold after it. Of course, here in Texas we will see this back and forth take place several times, even from one day to the next, until winter finally gives way to the spring. Still, it's a wonderful thing to witness, and now, after having read your poem, with a new perspective. Words flowed nicely and the image you chose, compliments your work as well.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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I could almost feel the winnowing winter wind relax its grasp, as the spring took hold after it. Of course, here in Texas we will see this back and forth take place several times, even from one day to the next, until winter finally gives way to the spring. Still, it's a wonderful thing to witness, and now, after having read your poem, with a new perspective. Words flowed nicely and the image you chose, compliments your work as well.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Hi Fran, we all yearn for the warmth of sun cast over our shoulder as we see the plant's flowering and trees exploding in greenery.
Comment from Gloria ....
I much enjoy your interesting rhyme scheme here, J. It creates the motion of the wind dipping in and swirling around the trees and leaves and then rushing out again.
Very nicely done and great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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I much enjoy your interesting rhyme scheme here, J. It creates the motion of the wind dipping in and swirling around the trees and leaves and then rushing out again.
Very nicely done and great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Gloria, thank you! We all yearn for the warmth of sun cast over our shoulder as we see the plant's flowering and trees exploding in greenery.
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well-written poem for the rhyming poetry contest. You have told a wonderful description of winter winds through your verse.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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This is a well-written poem for the rhyming poetry contest. You have told a wonderful description of winter winds through your verse.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Dancemom, we all yearn for the warmth of sun cast over our shoulder as we see the plant's flowering and trees exploding in greenery.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I love this one JLR. It is so poetically graceful and your reader feels the sting of winter slowly leaving and bringing in the fresh spring air. I also love the presentation and intent of this poetic art! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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I love this one JLR. It is so poetically graceful and your reader feels the sting of winter slowly leaving and bringing in the fresh spring air. I also love the presentation and intent of this poetic art! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Kiwi, I delight in your comments and the validation you send. Hugs back!
Comment from Joan E.
The eye-catching artwork and your alliterative title beckoned me into your poem. I could hear the trees and their leaves and enjoyed your rhymes. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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The eye-catching artwork and your alliterative title beckoned me into your poem. I could hear the trees and their leaves and enjoyed your rhymes. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Joan your good wishes are so validating, I thank you!
Comment from royowen
This is an excellently composed literary discourse, also beautifully written, with some great alliteration, a skilfully and deftly scribed narrative, that gives a great description of the winds affect on trees and their accompanying leaves, well done my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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This is an excellently composed literary discourse, also beautifully written, with some great alliteration, a skilfully and deftly scribed narrative, that gives a great description of the winds affect on trees and their accompanying leaves, well done my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Roy, thank you. I hope your forthcoming week provides moments of great inspiration!
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