Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written chapter. Helen's rescued and saved from her ordeal. The crooks are either dead or in custody to be punished for the gruesome deeds of the leader.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your support and encouragement. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Once again the Richard Hannay/Kenneth Moore imagery was strong er than ever, particularly when Charles wants to see the ungodly handed over to the authorities rather than tortured barbarically. That is no criticism though but part of the story's charm and British sense of fair play.

I think it was the sixties and the Sweeney that brought an end to that era. They don't make 'em like that any more. Today you'd have the Health and Safety guys all over you.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thanks, Jim. I see you have the Prologue up. Had a quick skim through it this morning. Looks like an interesting project.

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

So - Charles and his party have managed to pull off their coup.

Just one point for your attention:

like a genii hovering in the sky - if 'genii' is plural, then I think the 'a' should be deleted.

Best wishes
Judy

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thanks, Judy. Clearly, I'm no genius! I meant genie, of course. It's a good thing I have some genii hereabouts to save me from embarrassing myself too much!

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Goodness, I wish I had another six for this chapter, too. What a tense, exciting part this was! I'm sorry, but I like Kayla, and had that been my sister, I'd have done the same. (I think) If it was my sons being tortured, then I'd not think twice about torturing him. So, now Helen is safe but a mental wreck, I hope the release of tears will help her part way to getting better. But I'm not sure if she will be ready for Charles for a long while. This was a brilliant, six star chapter, and I thoroughly enjoyed it!! (I'm a sadist, LOL ) xx Sandra xx

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

LOL I tend to agree. However, Charles, the poor old duffer, is plagued by that British sense of fair play. Maybe he also wanted to make sure that Kayla and Helen didn't get into trouble with the authorities.
I suspect you are right about Helen. It may take her longer to recover than Charles. I doubt she'll ever say what happened to her in the hands of the terrorists, but the emotional scarring is obvious.

Comment from RPSaxena

Excellent

Hello tfawcus,
Nice piece of General Fiction having impressive phraseology, thrilling effect, smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Interesting!

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thanks for your review, RP. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

reply by RPSaxena on 12-Feb-2020

Tony, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Great chapter Tony, full of drama. I think that special knife really spurred Charles on and Kayla with her Kradot Thip, good going. Sorry I've not a 6 left this was a great read.
cheers
valda

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thanks very much for your review, Valda, and suggestion of six-worthiness! Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

I'm so glad Helen and Kayla are alive and they were able to capture the man. I don't blame the girls for wanting revenge after all he did to them. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting, suspenseful start to finish, great job as always.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Many thanks for your review, Dawn, and for the words of encouragement. I'm not sure how the girls will react to having Abdul handed in to the authorities.

Comment from Cindy Warren

Exceptional

Kayla and Helen are going to be some mad at him, aren't they? Perhaps his incredible luck will run out at the hands of the two women. After what Abdul did I don't blame them. I'd want to cut his junk off too. I'm surprised Kayla didn't do it when she had the chance. Great action in this chapter. Charles' blunder in the last chapter had me worried.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020

Thanks, Cindy.
I?m feeling a bit guilty that I?m so far behind in the story of the dragons. Hoping to have a bit of time over the next few days to do some catching up.
I appreciate your comments and the sixth star.
All good wishes, Tony.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Wow! What an exciting chapter with explosions and gunfire and exotic martial arts moves! While I understand Charles' motive to do the right thing and the right way, the government there is easily bribed so I doubt they would do the right thing. It would also put Charles in a bad situation with Kayla and Helen.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020

Thanks, Helen. Pretty well every move that Charles makes lands him in some kind of trouble! I hope the girls forgive him.

Comment from Pam Norris

Excellent

I did wonder how Charles was going to get out of his predicament. at the end of the previous chapter. Once again you came up with a plausible solution. Well done I look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020

Thanks, Pam. I appreciate your review and continued support. Best wishes, Tony