The Piper
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Comment from May 1
I love how vivid the descriptions are and how they make us keep our breath waiting to see if he would pull through. Oh, no. I am not happy at all that someone with so many prejudices towards the Fair Folk has found his way to their safe haven.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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I love how vivid the descriptions are and how they make us keep our breath waiting to see if he would pull through. Oh, no. I am not happy at all that someone with so many prejudices towards the Fair Folk has found his way to their safe haven.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Hi May 1,
Thank you for the great comments and your thoughts on the character of Burkehart. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi
Comment from dkblack
A very descriptive chapter! I'm glad it was not me in that dark moldy cave! I'm so glad he found the daylight. It made me think of how ready I am to have winter over! Bring on the daylight! Well-written!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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A very descriptive chapter! I'm glad it was not me in that dark moldy cave! I'm so glad he found the daylight. It made me think of how ready I am to have winter over! Bring on the daylight! Well-written!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Hi Dana,
Thank you for the super six star rating and your thoughtful comments on the chapter. I am ready for winter to be over too.
Debi
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You are welcome!
Comment from Benny Beeharry
As usual I enjoy Ed the story. I enjoyed the style, simple ,adequately detailed and one of vent leading to the the other.i was not able to read through but sorry for Burkharts misfortunes. But I really gave a big smile at his squirm about the moss....." I hate the feel of moss"
Very good for me.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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As usual I enjoy Ed the story. I enjoyed the style, simple ,adequately detailed and one of vent leading to the the other.i was not able to read through but sorry for Burkharts misfortunes. But I really gave a big smile at his squirm about the moss....." I hate the feel of moss"
Very good for me.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Hi Benny Beeharry,
Thank you for the great comments and your thoughts about the chapter. I am glad it made you smile.
Debi
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an interesting read with a believable character. The story line runs smoothly. I got to the end before I realized it. You have a well written chapter
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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This is an interesting read with a believable character. The story line runs smoothly. I got to the end before I realized it. You have a well written chapter
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Hi thaities,
Thank you for the encouraging comments, especially the comment about reaching the end before your realized it. That is such a nice thing to say. I appreciate you dropping by to read and review.
Debi
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You're welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
Super job with this post with all the accurate descriptions of texture. (Maybe you could add something more about the smells and sounds of dripping in the cave?) I think if Burkehart doesn't like the feel of moss (which I take as a symbol of Nature), he may not like it in the world of the fair folk. You also convinced us about his own doubts about his ability to get in. Hope he will have a transforming experience if he gets in!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Super job with this post with all the accurate descriptions of texture. (Maybe you could add something more about the smells and sounds of dripping in the cave?) I think if Burkehart doesn't like the feel of moss (which I take as a symbol of Nature), he may not like it in the world of the fair folk. You also convinced us about his own doubts about his ability to get in. Hope he will have a transforming experience if he gets in!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Oh, I love your suggestions. I definitely need to add some smells to the mix. The roar of the water was too loud for Piper and Redd-Leif to communicate when they were there, but I bet the dripping in the cave could add to Burkehart's discomfort and (dare I say) dampen his mood even further.
Thank you for a great review and also for the six star rating. I really appreciate it.
Debi
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Thanks for being so open to suggestions. But it's fine the way it is, too! ♥
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Thank you!
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
This is good even as a stand-alone chapter as I have not read the previous chapters! Piper's character and backstory reminds me of Kvothe from the Name of the Wind series which I really love!
Overall, this was a well written chapter with a good balance between the character's thought process and the story!
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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This is good even as a stand-alone chapter as I have not read the previous chapters! Piper's character and backstory reminds me of Kvothe from the Name of the Wind series which I really love!
Overall, this was a well written chapter with a good balance between the character's thought process and the story!
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Hi Aaqib Nadeem,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the story.
I'll have to check out the Name of the Wind series. It sounds like a fantasy series.
Debi
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You are most welcome! Yes it is a fantasy series and one of the very best! Highly rated!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, dear, well it seems that dogged determination has paid off in this case.... although I'm not sure that's good thing, yeah? Now you've got me a bit worried... Great chapter, W.J., with all the hallmarks of a search: peril, seemed defeat, and, finally, there!! ;) Thanx for sharing -- I look so forward to the next!! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Oh, dear, well it seems that dogged determination has paid off in this case.... although I'm not sure that's good thing, yeah? Now you've got me a bit worried... Great chapter, W.J., with all the hallmarks of a search: peril, seemed defeat, and, finally, there!! ;) Thanx for sharing -- I look so forward to the next!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Hi Yvette,
I love your comments. Yes, Butkehart is determined.
Thank you so much for the six star rating and the encouraging remarks.
Debi
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your story about finding the entrance to the fairy world that is hidden behind a waterfall. That is a clever place. I like the details used in describing his movements.
Bill
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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I enjoyed reading this chapter of your story about finding the entrance to the fairy world that is hidden behind a waterfall. That is a clever place. I like the details used in describing his movements.
Bill
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Hi Bill,
Thank you for the kind comments and encouragement. I am happy you enjoyed it.
Debi
Comment from royowen
I think I've missed an episode, because I've come in at Captain Burkehart looking for the entrance, to Fairy land, nearly lost himself and possibly his life, negotiating an entrance under a waterfall and then, despite and accident luckily negotiated it and found the entrance to the Fae country, well done Debi, great descriptive effort, blessings Roy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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I think I've missed an episode, because I've come in at Captain Burkehart looking for the entrance, to Fairy land, nearly lost himself and possibly his life, negotiating an entrance under a waterfall and then, despite and accident luckily negotiated it and found the entrance to the Fae country, well done Debi, great descriptive effort, blessings Roy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Hi Roy,
Thank you for the six star rating rating and your great analysis. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi
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Most welcome Debi