Crumbling Foundations
5/7/5 Site Contest56 total reviews
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
This is a wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 contest. The picture is a perfect accompaniment to your poem. You have said a lot in this brief piece. We do seem to be held captive by fears at times allowing our dreams to fade away. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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This is a wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 contest. The picture is a perfect accompaniment to your poem. You have said a lot in this brief piece. We do seem to be held captive by fears at times allowing our dreams to fade away. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Hello Louise!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match.
You captured my attention fro the first line to the last this is what I call a food for thought poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Have a blessed Sunday.
Cookie
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match.
You captured my attention fro the first line to the last this is what I call a food for thought poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Have a blessed Sunday.
Cookie
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Hello Cookie!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
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Your very welcome.
Cookie
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is very clever wording, Diane, and it rhymes! That's hard to do in one of these 5-7-5 poems. The hanging door, and the memories behind it, have to be faced to stop the fear once and for all. sometimes, it's the fear itself, that is so frightening. Well done, this is a lovely contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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This is very clever wording, Diane, and it rhymes! That's hard to do in one of these 5-7-5 poems. The hanging door, and the memories behind it, have to be faced to stop the fear once and for all. sometimes, it's the fear itself, that is so frightening. Well done, this is a lovely contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Hello Sandra!
My sincerest apologies for being so late in my reply!
I am very pleased that you enjoyed my offering and my few words resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Poetic Friend
Sometimes the fears never disappear, for some people do not acknowledge them or unaware of how to rid them.
I love your analogy of the doors. This is highly creative and original. I always look for originality in poetry.
Technically, this poem is excellent and shows good usage of word economy. Not a single word or syllable was wasted. The poem packs a punch like a well-written short poem should do.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Sometimes the fears never disappear, for some people do not acknowledge them or unaware of how to rid them.
I love your analogy of the doors. This is highly creative and original. I always look for originality in poetry.
Technically, this poem is excellent and shows good usage of word economy. Not a single word or syllable was wasted. The poem packs a punch like a well-written short poem should do.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Poetic Friend!
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from mvbrooks
Excellent photo choice--the image is poetic and mesmerizing on its own and helps illustrate the wording "take their time to disappear."
Interesting use of the word "unhinged" as describing a person as unhinged is usually a negative reference--in this case, unhinged dreams seems could be positive or negative.
In such a short poem, each word counts and your wording gives a sense of curiosity as to what caused the door to become unhinged and what it might have once been blocking.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Excellent photo choice--the image is poetic and mesmerizing on its own and helps illustrate the wording "take their time to disappear."
Interesting use of the word "unhinged" as describing a person as unhinged is usually a negative reference--in this case, unhinged dreams seems could be positive or negative.
In such a short poem, each word counts and your wording gives a sense of curiosity as to what caused the door to become unhinged and what it might have once been blocking.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello mvbrooks!
Thank you!
So pleased you enjoyed.
diane
Comment from richie b
Mrs.KT,
Your poem takes a rustic feel as the door
in the picture. I really like this poem.
Four years ago, I lost a close friend, we
shared a 100 year old farm house. When Dan
passed I wrote a poem to release my sadness.
Your poem reminds me of the style I used.
Thank you for sharing and best wishes
in contest.
Peace,
Richie b
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Mrs.KT,
Your poem takes a rustic feel as the door
in the picture. I really like this poem.
Four years ago, I lost a close friend, we
shared a 100 year old farm house. When Dan
passed I wrote a poem to release my sadness.
Your poem reminds me of the style I used.
Thank you for sharing and best wishes
in contest.
Peace,
Richie b
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Richie!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, bring back memories and are
creative. I thought about how revisiting the past can bring up fears
and memories. In these 3 lines the author words speaks volumes!
Great picture! Hope you are doing well.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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The author's words are engaging, bring back memories and are
creative. I thought about how revisiting the past can bring up fears
and memories. In these 3 lines the author words speaks volumes!
Great picture! Hope you are doing well.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello harmony!
Glad you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Janet Foor
A creative and clever 5/7/5 poem Diane. Nice rhyme and wonderful play on words. Nice alliteration of "d". Perfect artwork to compliment your work. Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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A creative and clever 5/7/5 poem Diane. Nice rhyme and wonderful play on words. Nice alliteration of "d". Perfect artwork to compliment your work. Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Good Morning, Janet!
So pleased you enjoyed.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Alchera
Old doors, like old fears,
take their time to disappear ~
Unhinged dreams lurk near ...
Excellent rhyming in this non-obligatory poem being the context based on a Japanese versification of senryu 5/7 / 5. excellent the apparent metaphor between the artistic photo used and the semantic content of the poem itself.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Old doors, like old fears,
take their time to disappear ~
Unhinged dreams lurk near ...
Excellent rhyming in this non-obligatory poem being the context based on a Japanese versification of senryu 5/7 / 5. excellent the apparent metaphor between the artistic photo used and the semantic content of the poem itself.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Tony!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
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Welcome and blessings! May this Sunday be happy!Tony
Comment from ElPoetry001
Fear is chilling because of the negative unknowns and those that seek power use the Henny Penny editorials, news flashes, and government restrictions, to create a Hindenburg that they explode to cast the fears into our minds and actions.
Do not be afraid, just apply a religious procedure. Confirmation.
â??Henny Penny, more commonly known in the United States as Chicken Little and sometimes as Chicken Licken, is a European folk tale with a moral in the form of a cumulative tale about a chicken who believes that the world is coming to an end.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Fear is chilling because of the negative unknowns and those that seek power use the Henny Penny editorials, news flashes, and government restrictions, to create a Hindenburg that they explode to cast the fears into our minds and actions.
Do not be afraid, just apply a religious procedure. Confirmation.
â??Henny Penny, more commonly known in the United States as Chicken Little and sometimes as Chicken Licken, is a European folk tale with a moral in the form of a cumulative tale about a chicken who believes that the world is coming to an end.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Elf!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review!
Thank you!
diane