Saved by the Bell
true storm story11 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a very good story. Well done!
I found typos that you should look at.
"know that if you are caught in an open filed (field) you should hide in a ditch,"
"Nobody thought that we will need to discuss what to do when a bad-ass storm it's (is) coming,"
"It was 5 pm (and) most of my coworkers were already home."
"Thent (Then) the emergency alarm from my phone start shouting : Severe Storm approaching Alberta."
"Helpless (,) I stand (stood) up and run (ran) to the next cubicle where Annie from the Innovation Department was working."
"I remember that is not safe to take the elevator and the last thing I want is to free fall in (to) the basement."
"I will go to scope (I will go get a flashlight???) a flashlight from our materials management room."
"Me and Annie we did (Annie and I did) what we were told,"
"John came back (returned) and said:"
" Super, the last thing I want to see is a romantic (Roman) candle burning my boxes with records."
"We went into that room and waited for 2 (two) hours."
"I was to scare (too scared) to take the bus, so Annie offered me a ride."
"(The next day) Next day we found out that our office from (in???) Calgary was flooded"
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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This is a very good story. Well done!
I found typos that you should look at.
"know that if you are caught in an open filed (field) you should hide in a ditch,"
"Nobody thought that we will need to discuss what to do when a bad-ass storm it's (is) coming,"
"It was 5 pm (and) most of my coworkers were already home."
"Thent (Then) the emergency alarm from my phone start shouting : Severe Storm approaching Alberta."
"Helpless (,) I stand (stood) up and run (ran) to the next cubicle where Annie from the Innovation Department was working."
"I remember that is not safe to take the elevator and the last thing I want is to free fall in (to) the basement."
"I will go to scope (I will go get a flashlight???) a flashlight from our materials management room."
"Me and Annie we did (Annie and I did) what we were told,"
"John came back (returned) and said:"
" Super, the last thing I want to see is a romantic (Roman) candle burning my boxes with records."
"We went into that room and waited for 2 (two) hours."
"I was to scare (too scared) to take the bus, so Annie offered me a ride."
"(The next day) Next day we found out that our office from (in???) Calgary was flooded"
"
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Hi Rebecca thank you so much for correcting my entry for the contest, you are the best:)