Inspiration
A Four Line Poem22 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Inspiration
by kahpot
Hello, Kahpot,
Beautiful entry for the Four Line Poem contest. I will be looking for it in the voting booth. It flows very well. Children know the truth about races...we are all the same, as long as they are not trained to hate. The presentation is lovely. Well done my friend.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Inspiration
by kahpot
Hello, Kahpot,
Beautiful entry for the Four Line Poem contest. I will be looking for it in the voting booth. It flows very well. Children know the truth about races...we are all the same, as long as they are not trained to hate. The presentation is lovely. Well done my friend.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Wow! a six from my short poem hero! and yes children are innocent until taught or trained otherwise, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This is only 3 lines, so this can not win a 4 line poetry contest. I do like the words, but you need a 4th line. I would change my rating if it were fixed to fit the prompt.
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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This is only 3 lines, so this can not win a 4 line poetry contest. I do like the words, but you need a 4th line. I would change my rating if it were fixed to fit the prompt.
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Please read again, there are four lines and always has been "when" 1-"Darkness surrounds us"-2-"just one ray of light"-3" can illuminate a world of hearts" 4- honestly !!!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry. Great work with the prompt--your syllables are correct per line, the image is super, and your message is one we al need to hear and follow. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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I enjoyed your contest entry. Great work with the prompt--your syllables are correct per line, the image is super, and your message is one we al need to hear and follow. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you for your very encouraging comments and review, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation, kahpot.
-Your notes are appreciated, too.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic, and
effective use of one
continuous thought.
-I like the contrast of dark
and light, and how you use
it to show there is hope in the world.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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-Very nice image and
presentation, kahpot.
-Your notes are appreciated, too.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic, and
effective use of one
continuous thought.
-I like the contrast of dark
and light, and how you use
it to show there is hope in the world.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you Pam, and we must believe there is hope, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome, kahpot, and I agree about having hope!
Comment from Mark D. R.
An inspiring story you wrote about in your verse and author's notes.
Underlying the (racist) problem with skin color or religion, under all of this we share the same beating hearts and red blood. In a war zone, no one would question the source of the possible life-saving blood donation during an operation.
Mark
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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An inspiring story you wrote about in your verse and author's notes.
Underlying the (racist) problem with skin color or religion, under all of this we share the same beating hearts and red blood. In a war zone, no one would question the source of the possible life-saving blood donation during an operation.
Mark
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you, and I love your comments about war-so very true, as always very much appreciated and many thanks for the wonderful six****kahpot
Comment from ESOSTINE
Really inspirational! Children are burn without any iota of sense of discrimination. It is usually the society and family that educate the children to learn otherwise.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Really inspirational! Children are burn without any iota of sense of discrimination. It is usually the society and family that educate the children to learn otherwise.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you and exactly we are what we learn, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of the syllables allowed to convey a delightful, uplifting message about the type of person that plays the role of the candle in a dark setting.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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You have made excellent use of the syllables allowed to convey a delightful, uplifting message about the type of person that plays the role of the candle in a dark setting.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much for your great review, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is so true as we see a spark of light in our world from those grandchildren who take everything in their stride and still shine like diamonds in the rough, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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This is so true as we see a spark of light in our world from those grandchildren who take everything in their stride and still shine like diamonds in the rough, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you and children do have a way of showing us how it should be done, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a wonderful poem and illustration, which provides hope that all our problems will soon dissipate. I just hope that all that mad hugging didn't come too early.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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This is a wonderful poem and illustration, which provides hope that all our problems will soon dissipate. I just hope that all that mad hugging didn't come too early.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thank you Katherine, I hope so as well, but it was so wonderful to see, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your poem and the picture to illustrate it! The world seems like such a dark place. But if we can see a "ray of light" in the open, non-judgmental love of kids, there is hope.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Loved your poem and the picture to illustrate it! The world seems like such a dark place. But if we can see a "ray of light" in the open, non-judgmental love of kids, there is hope.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thank you my Friend, when I saw that clip on T.V. I felt tears, as always very much appreciated****kahpot