Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Bow Ties, Silk ties, Family Ties"Musings of an old man -2020
33 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with this free verse! My favorite part was the lines about the power tie -- "wearing a swordsman's
chainmail into the boardroom battle
to prevent being
eviscerated in a struggle!"
Such a great way to describe that work environment and dress code!
Comments:
wore by others...of course, (worn?)
Truly....its' kinda like waving a flag, (it's)
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Great job with this free verse! My favorite part was the lines about the power tie -- "wearing a swordsman's
chainmail into the boardroom battle
to prevent being
eviscerated in a struggle!"
Such a great way to describe that work environment and dress code!
Comments:
wore by others...of course, (worn?)
Truly....its' kinda like waving a flag, (it's)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thanks for the spag catches
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I think you create an intricate poem for the club and a nice presentation of the world fashion for ties. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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I think you create an intricate poem for the club and a nice presentation of the world fashion for ties. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Iza, thank you
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very good image, Jim.
-I like the title, too.
-This is an excellent poem
with good examples and
a smooth flow of ideas.
-It is also creative.
-I like the verse about
"that perfect power tie."
-The transitions are very good
as you move from ties to
'How things do pass" and
the ego associated with
"gentleman's pocket square's."
-An excellent conclusion, too.
-One small thing [squares]
-Very well done, and
deserving of my last 6* for the week:)
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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-Very good image, Jim.
-I like the title, too.
-This is an excellent poem
with good examples and
a smooth flow of ideas.
-It is also creative.
-I like the verse about
"that perfect power tie."
-The transitions are very good
as you move from ties to
'How things do pass" and
the ego associated with
"gentleman's pocket square's."
-An excellent conclusion, too.
-One small thing [squares]
-Very well done, and
deserving of my last 6* for the week:)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Pam, I am truly grateful for your last six of the week and my first six from you! I appreciate every comment and and every review!
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You are very welcome and deserving, Jim. I thought I had given you a six before:)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your free verse on ties. Your lines read well with good flow, some alliteration, good formatting of lines, and great imagery. I really liked the lines about the bolo. Of course, I'm from Texas.
its' kinds--->it's
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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I enjoyed your free verse on ties. Your lines read well with good flow, some alliteration, good formatting of lines, and great imagery. I really liked the lines about the bolo. Of course, I'm from Texas.
its' kinds--->it's
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Jn thank you for the apostrophe correction.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Men's ties often made not only a fashion statement but gave off a vibe and character, as a tie was either appropriate or rather inappropriate and often men were judged on this choice! I even remember my husband commenting on another man's tie as a bad choice! Here you throw in the ties of family at the end which has a much more serious connotation, a fun post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Men's ties often made not only a fashion statement but gave off a vibe and character, as a tie was either appropriate or rather inappropriate and often men were judged on this choice! I even remember my husband commenting on another man's tie as a bad choice! Here you throw in the ties of family at the end which has a much more serious connotation, a fun post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Dolly thank you!
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
I wanted to give you a 6 тн? review so badly, but after reading it twice it rolled along like a short story. You really wrote a lovely piece here with a priceless ending, way to go. Hope you understand. Have a wonderful night.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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I wanted to give you a 6 тн? review so badly, but after reading it twice it rolled along like a short story. You really wrote a lovely piece here with a priceless ending, way to go. Hope you understand. Have a wonderful night.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Bobby, you felt it is too prosaic?
Comment from Mastery
Out of sixes, my friend. this one deserves a six for sure. Good job, jim. It has a "free n' Easy feel to it" If that make any sense. I liked this stanza the best, Jim:
"such a projection
of boldness, like wearing a swordsman's
chainmail into the boardroom battle
to prevent being
eviscerated in a struggle!"
Wow! :) Bob
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Out of sixes, my friend. this one deserves a six for sure. Good job, jim. It has a "free n' Easy feel to it" If that make any sense. I liked this stanza the best, Jim:
"such a projection
of boldness, like wearing a swordsman's
chainmail into the boardroom battle
to prevent being
eviscerated in a struggle!"
Wow! :) Bob
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you so ,uch I will bask in the virtual six my friend
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: ) Bob
Comment from papa55mike
Ties never did it for me; I was always the grunt slaving away in the heat. What a wonderfully written poem about the perfect fashion statement. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Ties never did it for me; I was always the grunt slaving away in the heat. What a wonderfully written poem about the perfect fashion statement. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Mike, thank you so much and I put a stint in the hot sun one summer as a hot tar roofer, made it very easy to stay in college, LOL
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, descriptive, interesting and creative. I
like how the author mentioned family ties at the end of this poem.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is colorful and goes
well with this poem. Hope you are having a great day!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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The author's words are engaging, descriptive, interesting and creative. I
like how the author mentioned family ties at the end of this poem.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is colorful and goes
well with this poem. Hope you are having a great day!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, what a unique and interesting perspective you have selected for this Free Versers Event. I guess it is not so strange for a man to think about his ties like a women thinks about her hair or lipstick color.
As for 'how a man thinks about his ties' I now know!
Becausej you have told me, in this well written poem about Ties
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Dear JLR, what a unique and interesting perspective you have selected for this Free Versers Event. I guess it is not so strange for a man to think about his ties like a women thinks about her hair or lipstick color.
As for 'how a man thinks about his ties' I now know!
Becausej you have told me, in this well written poem about Ties
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Suzanna, thank you!