Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "A Breath of fresh air"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Lobber
hi there
I guess I have less faith in mankind. Giving a high-five
to a total stranger sounds nice, but I'm sure some would respond with a )fist of five( ...Why take the risk? ...even on a dare.
- Lobber
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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hi there
I guess I have less faith in mankind. Giving a high-five
to a total stranger sounds nice, but I'm sure some would respond with a )fist of five( ...Why take the risk? ...even on a dare.
- Lobber
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Lobber, my friend, yes , I agree in the states we would likely get arrested for being an aggressive progressive..
Comment from TPAC
Little Sunshine give us your light, finding ourselves lost in the darkness of daily survival, refreshing words to regenerate feelings that have become absent. I dare given in my opinion.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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Little Sunshine give us your light, finding ourselves lost in the darkness of daily survival, refreshing words to regenerate feelings that have become absent. I dare given in my opinion.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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TPAC thanks for your review and comments.
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent response to the challenge of writing a fifteen minute free verse. You stayed well within the logic of your thesis and expanded it from internal thoughts of dissatisfaction into one of helping one's neighbours--an all too rare experience these days.
Wishing you great luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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Excellent response to the challenge of writing a fifteen minute free verse. You stayed well within the logic of your thesis and expanded it from internal thoughts of dissatisfaction into one of helping one's neighbours--an all too rare experience these days.
Wishing you great luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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Gloria, thank you for the strong validation and good wishes.
Comment from June Sargent
This is a fabulouos free verse penned in 15 minutes. It certainly captures the frustration many are feeling these days at the restricted way of life we've been subjected to by ths virus. How nice it would be when we can hug one another again without fear. Meanwhile, a smile and a nod will have to do. Maintaining a positive attitude would go a long way in refreshing our mental state...take a breath and relax.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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This is a fabulouos free verse penned in 15 minutes. It certainly captures the frustration many are feeling these days at the restricted way of life we've been subjected to by ths virus. How nice it would be when we can hug one another again without fear. Meanwhile, a smile and a nod will have to do. Maintaining a positive attitude would go a long way in refreshing our mental state...take a breath and relax.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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June, thank you so very much, hope your week is wonderful in every aspect.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Breath of fresh air
Hello, anonymous,
Good entry for the Fifteen minute free verse writing prompt contest. I agree with you... A smile goes a long way and it really makes a difference in somebody's life. Since we have to wear masks, a virtual high-five to
a total stranger is good.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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A Breath of fresh air
Hello, anonymous,
Good entry for the Fifteen minute free verse writing prompt contest. I agree with you... A smile goes a long way and it really makes a difference in somebody's life. Since we have to wear masks, a virtual high-five to
a total stranger is good.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
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Thanks much!
Comment from kahpot
Very well said, I like the message of communication, we can talk, encourage, and help friends or strangers any way we can, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Very well said, I like the message of communication, we can talk, encourage, and help friends or strangers any way we can, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Kahoolawe, thank you! Enjoy a very productive week.
Comment from elchupakabra
This is a solid free verse piece, I think there are some solid rhymes and alliterations peppered throughout that help it to flow smoothly. Good work and good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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This is a solid free verse piece, I think there are some solid rhymes and alliterations peppered throughout that help it to flow smoothly. Good work and good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Thank you, I do appreciate your review and comments!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fifteen minute free verse poem. We all need a breath of fresh air from time to time so that we can refresh our mind and Outlook in life that there is still good things in our lifetime.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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A very well-written fifteen minute free verse poem. We all need a breath of fresh air from time to time so that we can refresh our mind and Outlook in life that there is still good things in our lifetime.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Sandra thank you, have a splendid week.
Comment from poetwatch
I have exhaled toxic air with tears that filled the sky, author. I've been sad, hiding behind a mask. I cannot do anything right if everything I do is wrong. Yet, you are right. My mind has become befuddled with life's drama, but it should not bring me down. I shall fight the good fight even if I'm feeling down. I"ll bring a smile from a frown with words of happiness from my heart. Thank you so much for sharing a smile with me. :)
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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I have exhaled toxic air with tears that filled the sky, author. I've been sad, hiding behind a mask. I cannot do anything right if everything I do is wrong. Yet, you are right. My mind has become befuddled with life's drama, but it should not bring me down. I shall fight the good fight even if I'm feeling down. I"ll bring a smile from a frown with words of happiness from my heart. Thank you so much for sharing a smile with me. :)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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I was immediately drawn into your comments and smiled broadly, as I thank you for the six-stars l, in as much your free verse.
Comment from Patty Palmer
The message in your poem about wanting a fresh breath by being nice to another person, high five a stranger or if you see someone without a smile, give them one of yours! Just thinking about someone else can put you in a better mood! AKA a fresh breath! A great subject to have used for your poem!
Patty
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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The message in your poem about wanting a fresh breath by being nice to another person, high five a stranger or if you see someone without a smile, give them one of yours! Just thinking about someone else can put you in a better mood! AKA a fresh breath! A great subject to have used for your poem!
Patty
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Patty, smiling back with a glad heart.