Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Eye for an Eye"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from AnnieDawn
You have raised a very good question in your entry. I like the way you have put it together and think you have a good chance in this contest. The syllable count is complete and the punctuation looks good. I wish you luck in the contest. Great job;
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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You have raised a very good question in your entry. I like the way you have put it together and think you have a good chance in this contest. The syllable count is complete and the punctuation looks good. I wish you luck in the contest. Great job;
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Annie your validation brings a smile, thank you.
Comment from Patty Palmer
An eye for an eye doesn't always make one feel better about a situation. Heartache from a scorned relationship won't make you feel better if you do the same actions toward them. A million tears flowing down a river won't change the outcome.
Patty
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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An eye for an eye doesn't always make one feel better about a situation. Heartache from a scorned relationship won't make you feel better if you do the same actions toward them. A million tears flowing down a river won't change the outcome.
Patty
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Patty, my dad always told me right or wrong, suck it up bit, life isn?t always easy.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is is great form--correct syllables per line, great match of words to image, and a great message. At the time of the heartbreak, emotions are so raw, that one only thinks of 'getting even.' S/he pours more hate into the game that only causes more tears and created more wounds.
Thanks for sharing and Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Your contest entry is is great form--correct syllables per line, great match of words to image, and a great message. At the time of the heartbreak, emotions are so raw, that one only thinks of 'getting even.' S/he pours more hate into the game that only causes more tears and created more wounds.
Thanks for sharing and Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Jan, thank you for the review and good wishes.
Comment from mauial
Very beautifully written. I love, eye for an eye, why? That has been misapplied through the centuries. It was meant to rectify a wrong not for causing untold misery. Under the. osaic law there were no prisons. If you stole you paid back seven times what you stole. I think that was a great incentive not to steal. So was ths life for life a perfect just law.
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Very beautifully written. I love, eye for an eye, why? That has been misapplied through the centuries. It was meant to rectify a wrong not for causing untold misery. Under the. osaic law there were no prisons. If you stole you paid back seven times what you stole. I think that was a great incentive not to steal. So was ths life for life a perfect just law.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Maui always, thank you! I also learned something new, I researched Mosaic law..a new discovery thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
That's a great way to put it - all this tit for tat fighting going on - not only on a personal level but on the political arena and the national level. Sigh. Great message in your 5-line poem! Hope you do well in the contest!
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That's a great way to put it - all this tit for tat fighting going on - not only on a personal level but on the political arena and the national level. Sigh. Great message in your 5-line poem! Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the review and good wishes.
Comment from amada
Great poem for this five lines contests. You followed the regulations very well. The content of you poem has a great moral as well. We hurt ourselves when we try to hurt others...
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Great poem for this five lines contests. You followed the regulations very well. The content of you poem has a great moral as well. We hurt ourselves when we try to hurt others...
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Ameen, thank you for your review, sir!
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, I hope this post does not reflect heart break in your own life, and your poem was only inspired by that truly intriguing illustration that you have attached .
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Dear JLR, I hope this post does not reflect heart break in your own life, and your poem was only inspired by that truly intriguing illustration that you have attached .
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Suzanne, gratefully no! amen, amen...
Comment from lightink
I like the wording 'heartbreak's refrain"...which turns out to be a vindictive mentality...the poem ends on the striking image if the river of wounds...the endless tear flow. Of course it's only endless if one can't process it eventually, and the more we dwell in bitterness the more we can lose from our humanity....
Though provoking poem with intense imagery!
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I like the wording 'heartbreak's refrain"...which turns out to be a vindictive mentality...the poem ends on the striking image if the river of wounds...the endless tear flow. Of course it's only endless if one can't process it eventually, and the more we dwell in bitterness the more we can lose from our humanity....
Though provoking poem with intense imagery!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Lightlink....aah yes! You got the sublime message! Thank you !
Comment from kahpot
Heartbreak can bring on one of our worst emotions, sadness is so lonely and disrupting to our lives, a beautiful short poem, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Heartbreak can bring on one of our worst emotions, sadness is so lonely and disrupting to our lives, a beautiful short poem, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Kahpot, thank you for your time to review and comment on my poem.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Eye for an Eye
by JLR
Hello,
Nice entry for the 5 Line Poem contest. The presentation is beautiful. Good form. I like the topic. In a world of an
Eye for an eye, they are all blind.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Eye for an Eye
by JLR
Hello,
Nice entry for the 5 Line Poem contest. The presentation is beautiful. Good form. I like the topic. In a world of an
Eye for an eye, they are all blind.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Smiling back.