Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Near Summer's End"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Tina Crute
This is beautiful and I can see many relating to the movement and feelings described here. Haven't we all felt stirred emotionally by being in or near the ocean?
I really enjoyed this. It is both relaxing and pondering:)
Tina
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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This is beautiful and I can see many relating to the movement and feelings described here. Haven't we all felt stirred emotionally by being in or near the ocean?
I really enjoyed this. It is both relaxing and pondering:)
Tina
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Tina, thank you!
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You are very welcome, JLR!
Comment from estory
I like how you created this sense of having one foot in the summer one foot in the future in this poem. There is this feeling of the summer light fading away in that wonderful sunset image. And then there is this open question: What comes next? left hanging in mid air. It is this question of what comes next that shapes so much of our attitude. The past is a comfortable place, really, because we know what happened there. The future is different because we don't know what it will bring. estory
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I like how you created this sense of having one foot in the summer one foot in the future in this poem. There is this feeling of the summer light fading away in that wonderful sunset image. And then there is this open question: What comes next? left hanging in mid air. It is this question of what comes next that shapes so much of our attitude. The past is a comfortable place, really, because we know what happened there. The future is different because we don't know what it will bring. estory
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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estory, thank you for the validation on the present and future aspects of this poem.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and interpretation of the picture this challenge about the picture of the serene waters at the end of Summer.
Typo
Near Summers(Summer's)End - title
as the sunsets(sun sets) in the western sky. - last line first stanza
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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A very well-written poem and interpretation of the picture this challenge about the picture of the serene waters at the end of Summer.
Typo
Near Summers(Summer's)End - title
as the sunsets(sun sets) in the western sky. - last line first stanza
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Sandra, thank you! I missed those spags. As I wrote this I was passing a kidney stone, I appreciate your input.
Comment from Eternal Muse
I loved your great descriptive imagery and your visuals. Superb artistic presentation and photo. I can picture myself right there, at that magical beach with turquoise color water.
Excellent response to the club challenge, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I loved your great descriptive imagery and your visuals. Superb artistic presentation and photo. I can picture myself right there, at that magical beach with turquoise color water.
Excellent response to the club challenge, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Eternal Muse, thank you so much!
Comment from lyenochka
I like the contemplative tone of your poem. It fits the picture well as it shows the lady wading into the water intentionally. Seasonal changes are a good time for reflection. Great entry for the club challenge!
At the end of a summers day (summer's)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I like the contemplative tone of your poem. It fits the picture well as it shows the lady wading into the water intentionally. Seasonal changes are a good time for reflection. Great entry for the club challenge!
At the end of a summers day (summer's)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your thoughtful shoutout!
Comment from amada
I like this line the best: each day shortening the depth of light. A very poetic sentiment. Beautiful thoughts of introspection and maybe melancholy. Nice to celebrate summer, again.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I like this line the best: each day shortening the depth of light. A very poetic sentiment. Beautiful thoughts of introspection and maybe melancholy. Nice to celebrate summer, again.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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amada, I appreciate your call-out on this poetic line, have a wonderful life!
Comment from Mastery
Hi Jim. are you aware of how many strong verbs you use in your writing? I am sure you are. This poetry encases a lot of them. Good for you. I liked this stanza best, my friend: (pushing...gliding...lingering
Pushing along with gliding steps
Letting my soul reach into deeper depths
pondering the lingering days of summer's sunny rays"
Brilliant poetry, Bob
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Hi Jim. are you aware of how many strong verbs you use in your writing? I am sure you are. This poetry encases a lot of them. Good for you. I liked this stanza best, my friend: (pushing...gliding...lingering
Pushing along with gliding steps
Letting my soul reach into deeper depths
pondering the lingering days of summer's sunny rays"
Brilliant poetry, Bob
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Bob, I do very much appreciate your validation, input always helps to gauge my readership's impact with what I push out
Comment from royowen
Well done Jim, this is a marvellous contribution to the picture this ekphrastically generated, and conjures up that almost mystical allurement of sun and sand. That attraction will always remain, and you captured that perfectly, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Well done Jim, this is a marvellous contribution to the picture this ekphrastically generated, and conjures up that almost mystical allurement of sun and sand. That attraction will always remain, and you captured that perfectly, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Roy, as always your comments and very valued, thank you!
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Well done
Comment from mermaids
Your words capture eloquently the end of summer. I like the image and feel of warm water touching my thighs. Your smooth flow of rhyming words adds to your theme and I like how you end with a question. There is a sense of a new beginning as summer ends.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Your words capture eloquently the end of summer. I like the image and feel of warm water touching my thighs. Your smooth flow of rhyming words adds to your theme and I like how you end with a question. There is a sense of a new beginning as summer ends.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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mermaids, Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from Markie Doczi
This is a nice, sort of whimsical poem. Very good imagery, I could picture the whole narration.
Just one note, in the first stanza you have 'sunsets' as one word, but in this case wouldn't that be 2 words? I apologize if I saw it wrong!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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This is a nice, sort of whimsical poem. Very good imagery, I could picture the whole narration.
Just one note, in the first stanza you have 'sunsets' as one word, but in this case wouldn't that be 2 words? I apologize if I saw it wrong!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Markiem very good catch and you are most certainly correct! I appreciate your honesty.
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No problem, I would hate for someone not to tell me! I'm a bit of a spelling/grammar nazi but it comes in handy on here sometimes!